Roaming the world,
Unseen by the human eye,
Untouched by the hand of incompetence,
Wandering about freely.
One day,
It all changes,
Meet yourself incompetence,
And enter the cage.
A panther who was free,
Lived without rules,
Capture from the wild,
And put on exhibit.
What a waste of the beauty,
And a loss of its soul,
He wanders still,
But not the same...
He lost his soul back to the free,
and gain a empty shell for where he now is housed.
Humans are despicable,
Destroying the habitats of millions of animals,
We are in power by just a chance,
And in the end, its still the animals world.
Author notes
this is basically how i feel about panthers. its hard to follow without the right mindset, but i took option 3, but i tossed in the twisted truth of humans...anyway enjoy, if you disagree, thats your opinion, wouldnt hurt to hear it.
Written April 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Utter Darkness by Willowhaunt.
300 points, ended April 16, 2006, 8 entries
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Fantastic
I agree with everything you said in this poem...I have the same feelings about panthers and the way humans cage them. You did have a few grammatical errors, but otherwise it was a very good poem.
But here's why you won't win the contest:
It was a very nice poem, with a good-hearted message. In this contest, however, I was looking for evil and darkness of the soul. I don't want to give you the wrong idea; I liked your poem very much. But it's just not what I was looking for theme-wise. Very sorry. -
P.S. the background is because he panthers have to fight to live in theyre natural habitat. the sword represent theyre fight againts humans.
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