what if the devil wasn't evil
what if he is immortal
do the terms good and evil apply
what happens to a being when
they have an eternity to exist
what if he gives with one hand
destroys with the other
what if he's a being
that lost a fight
history is written by the victors
losers are either lost to history or
vilified, then fall into
the realm of myth
what if the devil wasn't evil
just the loser on planet Earth
Author notes
This takes the idea of two immortal beings, neither good or evil that use the Earth as their battlefield. Then what happens to the loser.
Written April 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Let us take on the Domain of HELL....all metaphors welcome! by ears2hearyou.
1200 points, ended November 7, 2008, 29 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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interesting idea
INteresting idea and so true. history is written by the 'winner' how to access reality then? because the 'winner' is'nt necessarily going to be truthful.
I like how your poem asks many important questions.
thanks for the poem!
warm wishes,
isabella
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well done!
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yes. i see your premise clearly. i think good and evil are manmade concepts. the gods don't bother about such trivialities. beautifully expressed.
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The name devil is no used correctly here, and does not apply to the one you are referring to
questions such as the ones you ponder in your write, are the result of bad information and brain washing methodically done by religion
I think there is not enough brain left in people
anymore to be able to reason and understand simple truths, or they would not ask questions such as these.
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Awarded with Gold for your simpliclity of imagery
and use of content........torturing was it to chose the
Golden Winner......YOUR POEM stuck to the ribs....
and inspired.........lest we seductively or innocently...
be willing partners of hells lost....the biggest loser on earth!
wonderfully written,
thankyou, and congratulations on earning the GOLD!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen/Seattle
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oh..i enjoyed this poem.....unique and probably reality,
what if ......the devil.....were just another loser on
this earth!
actually...that's true!
loved it!
ears/Seattle
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well done....wonderful questions to chew upon...and
ingest!
wonderful philosphical conversation this poem could
promote too!
WE salute you!
flamesdragoness
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Merry meet,
thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. No, I am not offended by your thoughts on my poetry.
Amythest -
awesome
wow i very differnt point of view. well done and writen well also. thank you for sharing your words with me. keep on writing. -
awesome
I love this interesting point of view on the Christian religion. A piece that made me think is always a good piece. Nice work, and a good job. Peace and Love
Charlene
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well written
well all i c an say is this was written well and flowed nicely but i too feel your giving credit to an evil demon. He is what he is, and im sorry nothing will make me see him differently. But your write does make you wonder certain aspects but its my solid foundation that makes me strong in beleiving their is a God and A Devil and I give my life to God, for He will protect me from evil doers. Definately writtenwell, no doubt there and definately dont intend to cut down anything or anyone, so i hope i didnt disrespect you if so i am truly sorry, but i too , speak whats on my mind.
God Bless
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Good
Cool read. Love the verses. Well written -
a different perspecttive. I personally dont believe in god or the devil but its a good poem and one that makes you think
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i loved the 3rd stanza, that the victors write history, yet the losers are a part of it too. this is a great theory that poses a lot of questions that can't be answered at first glance. great piece.
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Very unique perspective. Loved it. It leaves the reader to wonder and ponder the many possibilities. Great write. Keep your pen forever flowing!
Bunny
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Satan is what he is, and you make one think of him in a different light. What if he is what we make him to be? Isn't that the freedom of choice....? Enjoyed the read thanks for posting.
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It definitely challenges your mind to think, i really really liked it, i felt like things arent actually as they seem. Fantastico!
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Merry meet wordsmistress21,
thank you for reading my poem. I enjoyed 'Childhood's End', in fact, it is one of my favorite books. Perhaps I was channeling Arthur C. Clarke when I worte it?
Thank you for commenting on my poetry.
Amythest -
Merry meet haudauxilium,
Thank you for reading my poetry and commenting on it.
Amythest -
this is quite a unique spin on many religious pretenses... i think u are dealing with a common aspect of human nature: the act of thinking of things as black and white or good vs. evil; whereas many things in the world aren't completely one way or the other, but a mixture of different things. and you're are quite right about history's way of making the loser 'deserving of loss' (it's kinda like rubbing salt-into-the wound. there's a book called 'Childhood's End' that shares a similar concept to your poem. love your creativity!
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wow. this is really well written, and makes me think. I love a poem that realy makes me wonder. Very clever, and extremely thought provoking.
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Merry meet Pallas Athena,
Thank you for the applause and for your kind words. Having your poetry read and taken seriously is all any poet can ask for.
Amythest -
Merry meet XxJT LoveXx
Thank you for the applause and your kind comments.
Amythest -
Merry meet,
thank you for your wonderful comments.
Amythest -
Interesting write... I like that you make the reader think, and possibly question, what they have thought for so long. Very well written as well. Athena
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This poem poses a very interesting theroy. Can't say I fully agree with it but it does ignite my spiritual interests, of wondering what the whole story of the devil maybe.
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Merry meet plasticjesus,
Thank you for reading and commenting on my poetry. All religions (whether they wish to admit it or not (mine included))is based on some sort of myth or need to explain their natural world. This does not necessarily invalidate that religion, especially if they acknowledge that, it can make it more powerful. Thank you again.
Amythest -
This poem makes you think a whole lot. I love it. Those are some very good questions, and you make a good point. What is Satan is just the loser on Earth? What would Christians do then? All their beleifs falsified, that would be a sad day.Anyway good peice.
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Clever write~fear can create great distortions! Without hellfire etc etc...it may be merely the struggle of duality! Cheers Kaz.
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Merry meet Blac-sol,
Thank you for your kind comments and for reading my poem. I personally do not believe in an "evil" or "good" god. It is what you do as a human being that defines "good" and "evil". Also, thank you for your applause.
Amythest
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this is a good aprouch to the good, not good , evil, holy philosophy, we look at it in the confines of our own mortal space but you took it out of this and left me the that question, good one and thanks for your entry. gud luc!
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Merry meet Akifan,
Thank you very much for your words of praise. I don't believe that the world exists in just black and white. I hope that this poem conveys that. Thank you again for reading my poetry.
Amythest -
This is an awesome and very cleverly executed line of thought...because there certainly is truth in history being written by victors...it's really sad that many religions rely so much on trying to erode and lessen the will of the individual, make him afraid to think, analyze, and search for own answers about spiritual matters...your write reminds me of a book i've heard from J.J.Benitez, called lucifer's rebelion...which basically consists of an essay about this epic battle which precisely took place on earth among these two supernatural entities, which eventually became good or evil...it's like..under that narrowminded view of the supposedly 'world and universe' order...one has to exist in order for the other to compliment it...the unexistence of one means the unexistence of the other...which makes you wonder...how much is really true spiritual-tangible energy and how much is simply men's fabrication?
Excellent write in my opinion..and definitely makes you ponder...!
All the best ~ Akifan
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Merry meet Tory,
Thank you for your words of praise.
Amythest -
Awesome!
Wow, you know what IF the devil wasn't evil! Lol great! Now you have me thinking! I hate to think! But I love a poem that can make me think! Now I feel kinda bad for thinking so badly of the devil all these years, well not Many years but ya know! And now you have me doubting history! Lady you are DEEP! Lol you put the awe in awesome! Fabulous poem! -p00f- CHOWDER!
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thank you
Merry meet Melodies,
thank you for the applause. Yes I have read poeticinjustice and have two of his poems featured on my Author's Page. In the case of Custer, that is "recent history" but, what will the story be in a thousand years from now? Would it take on the portions of a myth? Take a look at a lot of the Roman and Jewish history (of which most European history is based on) a lot of that is considered myth today. Sorry, your talking to an Historian, that's what I majored in at the University was Medieval European and Middle Eastern Histories and a Minor in Religious Studies. Can't avoid the lecture in me.
Amythest -
^This poem is clever!
The Devil not evil? An idea I had not considered. Losers do lose all around. Hey, this poem is clever and smart...and good luck in the contest! "History is written by the victors" is mostly true, except in the case of Custer at the Battle of the Little Big Horn.
Have you read the poems by the author poeticinjustice? They are amazing! AP is a very fun place to hang out and I am pleased to meet you!
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