I put your ring back in its box,
your venison in the trash.
I hope I don’t regret these acts;
I may have been too rash.
Photos taken off the walls,
socks no longer mated;
small revenge for all the times
you told me we were fated.
You killed my love with alcohol.
I broke your bottle in the sink.
Cleaning out the rumors still,
cut glass I can not drink.
T-shirts marked for charity,
windows opened wide.
Some day I think I’ll breathe again,
free of all the things we hide.
Emails from the last five years
It’s easy - hit delete!
“Mr. Clean” my aching soul,
spring cleaning now complete.
Author notes
Not sure why I'm entering this...maybe because it's spring and I need to do a bit of "cleaning". [Again] Or maybe because I wanted to give you something you haven't read of mine yet, and there's not a lot of that to pick from. lol
April 2006 New Member Contest gold winner
Written April 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Truth Of Life contest Round TWO (invite only) by xandercheerios.
800 points, ended July 15, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Excellent
Oh.... how I hate Spring cleaning.
I clean up the mess in my children's rooms and sometimes I can't stand going in there.
Maybe I should put them to work and let them know how feels to be put to work.
LOL
Nah.
I'm not that cruel.
This is a perfectly penned piece of poetry.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Wow trista, very well done, I lika dis poem vurry vurry much! The rhymes are great, the rhythm is... alright and the content truly rocks! Keep it up, I know you will.
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wow! I could so relate to this poem. I made a vow when I did my last "spring cleaning" I would never have to go to those extremes again. Through living wrong I have learned how to live right. Perhaps one of the biggest paradoxes of our lives. Nothing is for nothing. It all has it's place...and all those other cliche' sayings we've all heard...we tend to not listen to until we have a place to put them. I love your author's page. Full of positive energy and great things. I could feel the warmth of your soul...peace and light, Kendal
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Many of us do this kind of spring cleaning now and again, and can relate to the sentiments you have expressed very well in these lines. Better to get rid of them before they poison us even more.
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Amazing
I feel like I have neglected you to have not read this
For the 34 time in 8,125 comments, I say the word Amazing
In clear stright foward words you held my heart
as I watched you toss away the reminets of a broken dream
I know from this, how deeply you loved him
that is the true beauty of this writing Trista
With little fanfair, you drew me in and made me cry
Love every heartbreaking word
Rick
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A good strong , emotional piece of work . But with in the work you have hiden many questions, tears and feelings that only you can explain. It is a piece of work that only one can read truely and many others can try. Keep up the work and keep hold of the inspiration.
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Wow, thank you so much, that really means a lot to me.
Thanks also to you and everyone else who puts so much time and attention into these contests. I'm loving AP and hope to spend many happy hours here. 
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Congrats on the gold!!!
Trista, Congratulations on the gold here. I will say now that it is over you had my vote for number one all the way even though we can't pick an order. We can only tell the judge who we like for the top three. I'm very happy for you and enjoy your time here at All Poetry. It really is a great site. Love and blessings for you, today and always. 
Joyce
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Welcome to the AP site
This poem I found to be a really good read. Your flow works really well and makes it a easy read for the reader. Good luck in the contest
Dawn. -
Hi. Welcome to AllPoetry.
This poem was great to read and it flows so well! It is so easy to read and i just love the whole thing.
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Kudos for such a great write!!!
trista, Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!! This really cleaned up as far as I'm concerned. Rhythm and rhyme were superb and it flowed so smoothly. I saw your reply above and I'm very happy you found this site. Sharing this work of art here was a delight to my eyes, mind and heart. You have all my best wishes in the contest and welcome to All Poetry. I hope you enjoy many happy hours here, it is a great site.
Joyce
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Sounds tome like someone just needed a little relationship spring cleaning and got it. I really enjoyed this on the standpoint of the rhyming and flow. You did a very nice job all around.
~ John
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Good
Been there, done that, perhaps today -
Oh this was so well written...i really really enjoyed this poem. Whether it was the broken relationship that you so wonderfully represent through the title...or the small symbols of moving on that you clue the reader in...just amazing!
Welcome to All Poetry! Glad to have you with us
stolen1985
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Trista ~ this was a very poignant write and one that, obviously, is quite painful for the author. It is well-written and expresses such deep emotion, that it is palpable by this reader. Well done, although I am sorry for your pain, truly ~ Natasha
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What exquisite writing, the rythem and rhyme blended with the honest expression of your pain comes out sorowfully perfect
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Thank you so much. For something that took a short time to write, but a long time to live, I have to admit I like how it turned out.
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This is a very strong and powerful poem that you have written here the rhyme pattern is stunning and also the meter seems to be flawless - great job!
I also like the fact you took this Spring cleaning as a metaphor to put a final point after this broken relationship well done!
thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, I really appreciate the effort you've put into this... Best of luck to you! -
I wish I had found this site long ago, but might never have if not for a magazine article listing it as one of the best web sites for writers. Thank you (and everyone else) for the welcome! It's good to be here.
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Hard to believe u are a new one here, Your rhyme and flow goes so very well in this poem. Good luck in the contest and a heart welcome to you
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You've presented an interesting parallel between "spring cleaning" and an emotional cleansing. I also enjoyed the rhyming and meter.
If this is a personal write, I commend you for sharing; but it is also general enough to allow readers to relate.
Thanks for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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Boy, you put a new meaning to "spring cleaning"!!!! You literally cleaned things out literally and emotionally. It's a sad story, but one so many can relate to. Excellent in every way! Thaks for your entry and best wishes in the contest!! vj
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Very nicely done. It is an incredibly sad theme, but it also bears that shred of hope that is moving toward the future when we have to face such moments as these. Great rhythm that sort of takes us from the initial concept to the conclusion.
Thanks for sharing it with us.
Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry!
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I've never thought of "spring cleaning" being like this. Very sad, emotional love poem. I think everyone has been here... having to move on from a relationship and do a little cleaning up to be able to move on. Very creative write! Good luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry!
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Wow.. this poem had such a impact with me.. I am unsure how to comment. I love it.. truly a wonderful poem and spring cleaning is complete.. excellent. Thank you.
welcome to AP
~Kristy
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