tears fell like rain down her cheeks,
as she stared at the dark bruises,
her breath caught at the burn marks,
her heart broke looking at the cuts,
as she sat in a corner,
very lonely and full of anger,
she sat cleaning up her blood,
she tried to move her stiff body,
crying out with pain every time,
as she made her way to her bed,
her father burst through the door,
drunk and angry he moved toward her,
fear curled up inside her,
she began to cry much harder,
she tried to run but was weak,
he grabbed her shirt collar,
jerking her up her threw her,
clear across the room against the wall,
his angry words filled the room,
with every slap her life slipped away,
with her last breath she whispered,
"why daddy daddy i love you".
Author notes
Written April 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- Sensory Perception by Wee Mira.
300 points, ended May 1, 2006, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thank you so much for being so supportive in my poems your friend always jaderoses88
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i no how you feel i just lost my grandmother last month and it broke my heart but i was there every second and every day so ill always keep you in my prayers i no what that exsperience is like it kills
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Its tale is a sad one, I agree. I can't help but feel angry at the same time though, my sword craves her fathers blood.
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Very good imagery. You can feel how scared this girl is for her life. But what was mostly unexpected was the fact that she died at the end of your write. Which made it even more breath taking.
~~ OctoberRain ~~ -
very very good write
thankyou for entering the contest
~mira~ -
awww this is so sad!!! I could actually imagine all this in my head. Very creative and nicely written. Good luck in the contest. Love it!
Edited on Apr 13, 12:24 because ''.
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