Here you are, within me.
A little human being
growing inside.
Skin and bone,
heart and soul.
My eyes and your father's smile.
You move me.
You make me glow.
I can't wait to hold your tiny hand.
You are the best thing
that has ever happened to me.
My little miracle.
Here you are, within me.
A little human being
growing inside,
but not in my womb.
Just in my heart.
Just in my head.
© Sarah Louise Hudson
Author notes
I am infertile
Written April 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything. Just Impress Me. by I-Am-Custard.
900 points, ended April 13, 2007, 58 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me feel... by xTomorrowx.
600 points, ended October 9, 2007, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A lovely poem that you have written here.
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this is so sad, i felt very upset while reading this, i have met people who are unable to have babies and it's a very upsetting time...
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A very moving write..deserving of the gold. Congrats! ~Pastel
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Poem read and judged.
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Thank you. Again this is about my pain so I thought it was appropriate for this contest! Thanks! Blissful princess
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thank you for entering, this was a diferent kind of write from other s i have gotten but this is a nice write. thankyou for sharing!
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thanks so much for your comment - I hope this is good enough! sarah
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This starts out on a high note and ends on a low, well crafted and good luck in the contest
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this starts out on a high note and ends
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Glad you liked it babe - thanks so much!!Did you see my picture yet??? Sarah
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Oh sis this is so sad. Am back from holidays if you're on later give me a shout. Take care sweetie pie. xxxxx
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thank you so much - this is moving!! You liked the poem???
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A heart may not be beating
But in your heart you know
Your baby's soul is meeting
Within your love's pure flow
A mother in the making
A shelter from the storm
He's waiting for the waking
You'll keep him safe and warm -
yeah, you're right - thanks again!
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that looks a whole lot better now i reckon
no distractions.
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Thanks so much for those tips, I'll get onto changing those!! I appreciate it!! Sarah
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fathers smile - father's smile as the smile is belonging to the father
You are the best thing that has ever happened to me. - this line perhaps breaking into 2?
a good piece, just needs a little editing
spill poetic ink and twist me into the wild crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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Thank you so much for such a wonderful comment temporary life!
Glad you liked this one!!
Sarah
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My dearest Sarah, sometimes life doesn't always seem fair, especially when such a loving woman cannot bear children. This is really beautiful and touching, and you will someday make someone else's child a wonderful mother. You need not have empty arms. Love, Mum ♥
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You have left me speechless, Sarah. Wonderful write.
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It seems you may have missed the message of this poem, phoenixonfire, I have yet to feel the feeling of a baby in my womb and I'm not sure I ever will! Thanks for reading it though!
Sarah -
Thanks so much!!
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Thank you so much for this touching message!! I am sorry you can relate!! I think this is one of my better poems, as it says so little, but the message hits hard. I really appreciate your comment and it has made me feel a little better!
Sarah
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this poem is awesome! a feeling of the baby inside the mothers womb is so beautifully written that u can actually feel it ! the words are simple yet each so powerful and endearing that u can feel it in ur blood! i love dis poem !
keep it up !
preets
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Such a terrific muse, with quite the sob and heartfelt ending. Would that we could all have this certain joy; know that I feel your pain, as I know you very well right now. A very good write, you've done justice to your dreams, and to my eyes that've read.
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Thanks so much honey bear!! That is a really lovely comment, it gives me a bit of strength to get through the day!!
Bless you!! Sarah Louise Hudson
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very good
never give up hope of being a mother ,you dont have to give birth to mother a child my friend and you can share in the joy of many childrens lives in other ways too, you have so much love to give dont keep it locked in but share it motherhood itself can often bring much pain and heartache,may you find happiness and peace of mind not to dwell on what cannot be but to enjoy what can be
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i am so sorry that this has been the card you were dealt. i really can not comment any further then that and criticizing this would not even be a consideration for me. there would just be something so not right for me. thank you for sharing your heart with me. hope2makeit
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Thanks so much..I really appreciate your comment on my poem!!
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great job
This is a beautiful piece. When i first start reading someones work i always start at their first entries. Those are usualy the ones that show most of the writers soul. The ones that have been on paper and in a drawer for a while. This is very moving.
juffle242 -
Thank you so much!! You are truly lovely and have made me smile through this tough time!!
Sarah
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Great Write
This one is also very good, very emotive. I am sorry you are infertile, but I have loved so many children and not always were they my own. It seriously doesn't matter, so many children need Mother's who want them, and so many Mother's want children of their own who cannot have them, seems they are matches made in heaven. Good luck to you Sarah, be strong and don't give up. -
Thanks so much - this is very comforting and supportive!
Sarah
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This is a great poem, and it's such a great way to deal with your pain. I hope you the best of luck in your life, and I pray that you can eventually have the child that you're dreaming of.
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Thankyou so much for the applaud and comment, but I am not pregnant - perhaps if you read it again you will understand my words better?? thanks!
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this is a really great and special tribute to your unborn child, very lovely
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Thank you so much - this means alot. It can be tough at times when thinking about it, but i just have to think of all the good things that are happening to me.
I really appreciate this comment!
Take care
Sarah
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i had to make the choice not to have children due to severe medical reasons. i have since married a wonderful man who is so loving and supportive. at times i get feeling down thinking how unfair this is to him as he could hsve easily married a woman that could bare children. he's an only child so there will be no one to carry on his family name or bloodline. he reminds me that he married me out of love not because i could or could not have children. we wanted to adopt but that also has not been possible due to financial reasons. so we love our niece and 2 nephews and embrace and yes spoil them. while its not the same its all we got. i know god allowed this for a special purpose and i'm ok. as you can tell by my wordiness your poem really touched me. great writing. keep it up
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Thanks so much for the applaud - it's much appreciated! Glad you liked this poem - why not take a look at my poem 'Bundle of joy' - you may like that too!! Thanks again and good luck with your beautiful baby! Sarah
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Beautiful
the first poem i click today ends up explaining the beauty of with holding a child <3 i've just recetly found out i'm carrying my own this touches me to know i'm not the only one who fels this isn't a mistake like my family does *rolls eyes* a child is such a great gift and its so great to see my love smile when he feels the baby move too i could never ask for a warmer feeling
Beautifully written
<3 Mandi -
Thanks so much!!
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great
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Thanks so much Kitty Sarah
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Really good poem
aww this is so sad and is it really true. I can kind of relate to this cause I think I might be infertile too. My boyfriend and I have in a way been trying but its no use so good luck and good being. Be strong and hold on. Good poem. -
Thanks so much - this means alot!
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very good
sarah i now have 2 kids one is 25 the other 9 .i tries so many times for another child i lost like 6 or so. but i prayed and left things in gods great hands and he blessed me with my darling son who will soon be ten. see god doesnt always do things in our time ,he does it in his time keepprayers for god answers prayers,beautiful poem very well written good luck mary -
Thanks so much joyce!
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Thanks so much for that encouraging comment - you've really brightened my day (ha, please excuse the pun).
This is a lovely welcome. I'll definately return the favour as soon as i learn how to navigate this site Ha Ha LOL : )
Sarah UK -
Very emotinal!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sarah, This is a very good write indeed. I feel the emotions and it flowed very well. I do not have children of my own, but that was by choice. Blessings for you and I wish you the best.
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