What sweet madness confronts me
in this madrigal of swollen voices
taunting and so exquisite in their soliloquy
from icy depths they rise to claim their sovereignty upon my soul
an endless blue...
corporeal phantasms that poke and pry
bursting forth from the shadows to claim me for their own
capturing me in their wake
and sweeping me away in tides of lost opportunities
that lay like jetsam upon my wanting soul...
Author notes
Written April 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- Our Demons To Fight by Evasive Angel.
500 points, ended April 15, 2006, 6 entries
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this was a great write..i really enjoyed reading this..it flowed really well and your words were powerful and emotional as well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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good work
the use of metaphors is very nice, though a little forced and offbalance. but the words speak miles, and good luck -
Awesome job on the metaphors here. It flows well and really strikes the reader. A most excellent piece.
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my fave phrase is probably "swollen voices" this poem is cool but sometimes the big words feel a little forced. you don't need big words to be wise.
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REALLY REALLY GREAT WRITING
your writing is so dynamic and words chosen so well, this is a thiker and a half to read.
Thanks for entering and good luck
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