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Raging Storms

That night walking away seemed like escape
I ran from your bed, dashing out the door.
Gasping for breathe, closing my eyes to clear my head
Down the stairs and out the front door.
Past the streetlights that made the rain glint like diamonds
Through the street that leads onto yours
Stumbling over the memories of walking you to your gate
staggering over images of us holding hands and cuddling
Choking on the taste of your lips.
Coughing up the kisses I trail down from your neck
I fall over the corner and the feeling of being loved
Scrapping my hands with touches I left down your back
Bruising my knees with pavement and carpet burns
Crawling to the grass with pictures of crawling in your bed in mind
Lying down to let you catch up. Lying even harder to myself about my flight
Letting you pick me up. With a casual grasp of your hand and cheap pick up lines.
Walking back with you like it was all the storm. Really thinking I've just hit the calm before it.

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FightOffYourDemons

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  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 25

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    This is a beautiful write, filled with emotion... I really enjoyed this piece.

    Best of luck, and thankyou so much for entering!

    Maria


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 16

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    Wow.. this was amazing.
    Insight to so much emotions, like a roller coaster.
    And the ending was just beautiful..

    loved it

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • csmmoms2
    March 16

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    Stunning

    "Houston we have a problem" (look it up) and there's always something to get over. -c
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4762497


  • etoile
    December 12, 2008
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    i really like this. the ending is by far my favourite part, it hit so hard and left me with something to think about. i can really relate to this as well, probably another reason i like it. nice imagery, and great job on the trophies.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 21, 2008
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    amazing ending

    the line you used just blew me away this whole poem blew me away
    wow


  • unanswered
    June 15, 2008
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    This is a very well written piece. thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck


  • FallenAngel09
    October 23, 2006
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    Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I loved this poem, the duality in it was very unique and fit this situation perfectly. I loved the flow and the sadness gripping you, even when you went back to the person you were running away from. I loved it and hope you do well in this contest. Great job and good luck.

    Tiphanie

  • scorpanther
    April 13, 2006
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    congratulations on your win!


  • Star of Atlantis
    April 13, 2006
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    i think this is a very good poem but i am cerious what the metiphore is. this seamed pretty strait forward to me no hidden meanings in there which is i thought what a metiphore was all about. perhaps i have it wrong. any way i am glad you won thank you for sharing. and congrats.

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