I know that hearts can change darlin
But what we've got can last forever
If only you'd look into my eyes
And see what I'm trying to say
I would lay my life on the line
To see that smile of yours again
You know I do every time I come back to you
You seem like you need some time alone
The space closes in on you
And breaks this heart of mine
No matter how hard we try
We still end up back where we started
Holding hands and sealing our hearts
You know the feelings cannot subside
When I look into your eyes
I can see that you love me
But when they're invisible
In the times like these
The worry takes a tight hold
Convincing me that it's a lie
That it's all a big lie
That you don't love me
You use me how you want to
And surrender love when
You might not get anymore...
Don't you think that you need someone?
Tell me when you hear my voice
Do you hear what you need to hear
Cos darlin I would tell you anything
Just to hear it back from you
Maybe it's the wrong thing to do
But I would follow you anywhere
So long as you would want me there
If you want to love me darlin
Please don't hold back the charm
Sweep me off my feet
Like you know I want you to
Baby please turn yourself around
Turn this April shower into light
And chase away the dark shadows
Nothing lasts forever
Even cold April showers
Hold on to what we've got
Cos darlin this love is ours...
Author notes
Written on 13th April 2006 at 01:49 GMT
This is for my boyfriend. I've been at home in Northern Ireland for the past two weeks and I miss him so much. But it always feels like we drift apart every time I come home. Paranoia sets in, and I just need him to reassure me. But that never happens... I just hope his heart hasn't changed since I've been gone...
Inspired by November Rain by Guns'n'Roses
Written April 12th, 2006
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- Tell me a story by mascararunning.
340 points, ended December 19, 2006, 20 entries
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I liked the hopeful tone you put up there.
There are doubts but the certainty that love is stronger enough, comes up on your poem.
Nice read, thanks, and all the best always
Mari
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Great emotions flowing here
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Hey, nice work here. I loved this as i read it, becuase almost every line seemed to hit home with me. Great flow and just amazing all around, keep it up!
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good
hey that sounds really good. Some what like the picture. keep up the work -
Wow.....I always do enjoy your work in my contests, but you have really impressed me with this one...First of all, the song November Rain is my "crying song" lol...Whenever I am sad, I listen to it to get even sadder lol....Your spin on it is breathtaking, and don't feel alone about having to be reassured..I am the exact same way lol...This poem truly touched me...Good luck in the contest...Lynda
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hm. it seems that anything with a april showers is a hit. i love this poem.
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If you want to love me darlin
Please don't hold back the charm
Sweep me off my feet
Like you know I want you to
Baby please turn yourself around
Turn this April shower into light
And chase away the dark shadows
^^^ that stanza really hits home. I want david to sweep me off my feet too! I really like this poem and I think you should show it to him.
*huggies and pampers* --- been a long time since i used that one
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Well done
The first line is kinda the scary one there isn't it? It pretty well sums up what all the rest is trying to say with regard to your fears. Paranoia I think you say in the comments. Paranoia is a pernicious parasite that devours - with no benefit to the host.
But things like that have to be difficult - two weeks is a long time, except when taken in the context of what you say in line two, "what we've got can last forever." Two weeks - meh!
When I look at the whole poem, it's very positive, except for that fear that pops up through the write. Sounds like things are very good, except when you're apart and then they're . . . maybe just different. Somehow sounds like he always comes back.
Someone told me once that the man whose well has run dry has a quenchable thirst. The man who's AFRAID his well will run dry has an unquenchable thirst.
Good job on getting this down, Laura.
Paul
Edited on Apr 12, 11:12 p.m. because ''.
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