For a long time we've been
Just Friends
In fact I like to think of us as
Best Friends
But since a while ago I've wanted to be
More than Just Friends
Ever since that time you grab hold of
My Hands
Your Image hasn't escaped
My Head
and your voice kept on ringing
inside my heart
letting go of you will be so hard
Sometime I just wanna
take your hand
upon my shoulder
let yourself rest
Sometime I just wanna tell ya
That I wanna be your man
but I know that can't happen
cuz after all we're just friends
anyway you already have a boyfriend
and I'm not that kind of man
who would steal another's girlfriend
I know these impure thoughts have to end
but honestly a part of me don't want them to end
Cuz I truly believe that one day we could be
more than just friends
But for now I only wish that we would stay forever
Best Friends
Author notes
I'm not really happy with this layout, but I'm really proud of it because it's so honest, please give me some suggestion on the format
Written April 12th, 2006
Poet Brokenheart
A contest entry
- ANYTHING!!!! by JOSHv3.
360 points, ended August 31, 2007, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Also the format is really perfect for it because you have every other line at the beggining going long then short i would just look weird anyother way please reply to this Comment you didnt include your username.
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Thanx
My Username's Poet Brokenheart, but I'm thinking of perhaps changing it, Thanx 4 da comments. Yeah, I wrote this in HS when I fell in Love for real 4 da first time, funny that I can still relate to it right now. LOL. I think most if not all of us feel this way at one time or another.
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This was pretty good i like the feeling behind it...I have experienced the same thing in my life infact right now...But this really it the spot...Good luck in the contest.
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I liked the words and I like the feeling here, I just thought that the "cuz / wanna " etc spoilt it a little, also a few spelling errors, sorry for being picky but I do think it makes a difference, I have tried to revise it a liitle for you, correcting these errors and sent it to you in a message.
I hope you dont take offence because, like I said, I liked the emotion and words used
best wishes J x
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