As the whirligig parade,
of tumbled spirals in my head,
refuse to stop or even slow,
continually ebb and flow,
an eternity until i'm dead.
Author notes
12. Eternity.
Written April 12th, 2006
A contest entry
- 25 Words Or Less. by Poetryintheblood.
300 points, ended April 14, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Within the confines of the contest a nice effort, the tenses seemed uneven and could be fixed (if intended)without increasing your word count. Thanks for the thoughts and words.
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Bleurgh! I feel sick now....
What is a whirligig though? All the best for the contest.
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This is really good, i like the rhyme and rhythen that it has it's great. I like the was that you have compared it to the tide as well with the line 'continually ebb and flow,' It works really well. Keep the link flowing
Somebody Somewhere -
Thank you for your wonderful entry into my contest, good luck Josephine
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