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Shhh, My Brain is Thinking Again

 

 

 

I finally realize, after all these years,
that there were things outside my door-
and love was one of them.

 

I would have to have gone through a near-death metamorphosis
and wander off the edge of the earth
with reckless, unwise yet reproductive wild-abandon to find the second.

 

It is not fire- we do not find fire, fire finds us.
Relentless creatures, those eyes, burning,
Expect no less from them, caught between heaven and hell as they are.

 

They say planets orbit the sun,
that space is mostly empty, and there are no Martians
building canals on Mars. Emptiness. Dry, dry, rusted dirt there. Wind. That is something.

 

Let’s take a stressed view of things
and pop an electromagnetic psycho-social-ill pill,
for we should not be satisfied with our earthbound lot.

 

Maybe it is time for the next symphony to begin.

 

The dogs grew an inch chasing the children at the playground.
The poor children, they just recovered from the bees.
They might pee their pants this time, they say.

 

Don’t cry, little robin in spring,
yours is the last love we’ll ever need.

 


She bends and trembles in the bright flames and hazy smoke,
a molten creature in my eyes,
a hourglass of question marks staring up at me in a cosmic dance.

 

A touch. Why a touch? Why the senses? Why the need?
Deny it unmercifully and destruction follows
in the senseless realm, yet the need lingers and will not leave…

 

Peasant blood, now free to choose,
chooses badly. Sitting at the curbside, it finds solace
in the odds that their progeny will make it one step further.

 

Scratching, clawing, peppered with suicide notes,
the monstrosity of life inches forward in time
and belches us into existence.


Hello!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Written April 12th, 2006

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  • SexyAngel0418
    April 12, 2006
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    This is awesome!!! I guess I'll have to go finish reading the first one though!!! I will try to work on that tomorrow evening!!!

    Hugs,
    Your brightest angel

  • blessedbeyondbelief
    April 12, 2006
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    Great title...great write...oh the intricate passages that flow throw our brains...seem as scattered as each day...great write, keep up the good work, many blessings to you.

  • Canovash
    April 12, 2006
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    That was a very interesting write actually. It was well written but if i can make a small suggestion for stuff like this. Try not to report everything in an explanatory way and maybe break it up with some imagery to allow the reader to see things differently to the way it was written in your mind if you know what i mean. I'm not trying to bag this just offer a suggestion. It was well done though.


  • twilight seduction
    April 12, 2006
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    I was particularly surprised by the 'Hello!' at the end, yet it fits so well. It ties your observations into daily life with a simple greeting, in this case used for a deeper purpose.


  • Inside and out
    April 12, 2006
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    The words you have chosen makes each stanza intersting and very descriptive on its own. I don't seem to have understood the poem as a whole. But did like the flow and rhythm of this poem very much! I loved the background and thought it added to the mystery.


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    April 12, 2006
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    very nice... well written.. the background was slightly tricky but ok.. very thought provokibg
    good write
    jess


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    April 12, 2006
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    very creative and well written...it's message has eluded me though. It may take a second read through...or maybe I just don't/won't get it....none the less, I enjoyed it as I pondered over what points you were trying to make...Maybe that's the intent.
    Rory


  • Andy Stephenson
    April 12, 2006
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    I freely admit that I didn't understand this one. Some of the stanzas individually I felt were impressive, but as a whole I didn't get it unless it is summed up in the last stanza. In that case, I may have some idea; but not really.


  • Uhs Feth Malorn
    April 12, 2006
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    I like this.


  • Brittany2006
    April 12, 2006
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    Great.....

    Good job Keep up the good work. Love the back ground


  • elemental angel
    April 12, 2006
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    I'm kinda confused after reading this and although I see it is well written I just don't seem to get it. Maybe I'm just thick and I'm not supposed to. Well done and keep up the good work


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    April 12, 2006
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    Just my style of writing and I must say that I just loved reading this "Darn! this is the word, I have not been getting to describe such writes!!! Abstract! I really loved this wbiro, I certainly will come and check your work more often I guess. Shhh... my mind is working again!!! lol!!! Loved this!

    Don’t cry, little robin in spring,
    yours is the last love we’ll ever need. very beautiful lines wbiro!

    Love and light,
    Lencio


  • Peezzi
    April 12, 2006
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    This is well written. Well I wish we could all find love waiting just as you did and stop the destruction.

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