A mighty tree how she stands so tall and proud
her limbs stretch out almost caressing the clouds
surrounded by her children thriving by her side
as queen of the forest she looks at them with pride
Wearing a lushes green robe holding out her arms
she sways to the wind's tune seduced by his charms
her children waltz with their partners and smile
under the sun's gleaming gaze this forest comes alive
Whilst dancing a chilling thump disrupts this harmony
the wide-eyed queen stops, hearing a distant agony
she sees a man approach with a shiny blade in his hands
fright creeps into her as terror invades her homeland
The man swings back his axe and chops down a tree
queen distraughtly witness her child fall down to his knees
anguish rips her heart as scent of death chokes the forest
silently she laments unable to move to save her eldest
Author notes
Written April 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Door Is Open--Enter by Legend.
300 points, ended April 19, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Best by Titus.
300 points, ended October 14, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The tree in this somehow feels like the monarchy and how vulnerable it is. Using the axe as a public vote to whether one way or the other it will tip. Swings and harmonies and the effects of how one way or the other swing. Nice read.
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that is a great write, I never thought before on one tree being the child of another, great job Meena, I love this.
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As always, you write with heart and passion and this is moving, beautifully written and simply lovely...Lynda
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Great imagery in your write. Good luck in the contest.
Jim -
This was full of imagery wonderful. You have written this message very well and it is a very thought provoking piece. Good luck in the contest
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WONDERFUL POEM
Oh you have penned a beautiful and heartfelt poem here. It was very original. I love it. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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a sad metaphor for the environment problems we are facing. all the best.
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i have a thing about trees so i loved this write from you. i think that it is great. i just id not like the ending though i know why--or think i do--you chose the one you did. good luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna r langager
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Captivating
WOW! This was a very passionate write. I don't think I will
look at tree's the same way again. You gave life to one of natures creation. Its a shame how society takes tree's for
granted. Hewing them down as fast as they can for profit.
Always for profit. This was a very thoughtful poem written
with imagination and creativity. Your words were wrapped in
caring and warmth. Bringing a new dimension of how tree's
should be viewed. Very nice work!
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Excellent!!
Hi Heartofmeena, Wow, wonderful imagery and so sad at the end to feel so helpless for your loved one! I love how you personalized nature as I am a fan of nature poems!!A beautiful, but sad write you have penned here!! Excellent job! Good luck to you in this contest!! Jasmine
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Beautifully writen piece, with lovely flow and rhythm. Very touching piece, very sad. Good luck in the comp'
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You shone a whole new light on this forest family--soon we will have raped our woodlands and all we will see is a concrete jungle, Well done with this sad and wonderful write. Good luck in the contest.
shaz xx
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I never thought of a forest this way. Great way to envision this.
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Meena
It may be that i am crazy but i love the end, it adds so much power to what went before.If we are to give feeling to trees then surly they would feel these things.A great write and an enjoyable read Thank you Good luck in the contest -
This is wonderful. It is so charming but the ending is very sad. Terrific imagery and very creative. Well done. Good luck to you. ~ Sue
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