One eye looks straight ahead,
Rarely blinking, vision dead.
It feels no sadness, love or pain,
Guardian of its numb domain.
It sustains its host with facades so grand,
It plays life's game without revealing its hand.
The eye is strong; chiseled like stone,
This eye is best suited, out on its own.
The other eye, it swells with tears,
The hopes the dreams of all the years.
The innocence of youth shines bright,
Pooling beside the solace of night.
Love wets my cheek, as that eye cries,
Its in that eye, which my soul resides.
It seeks out love and truth and peace,
A blinding fear; these tears will cease.
I cannot fathom my own division,
Its a constant struggle of indecision.
I live in the heart of the question, why?
One Eye Cries and The Other is Dry.
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Written April 10th, 2006
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It is such a strong poem, the emotion that comes from the lines as you read is just incredible. A wonderful poem.
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I swear i read this and commented it b4...well just wanted to say WONDERFUL PIECE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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its a beautiful poem filled with raw emotion. writen well with a very apropriat border image. it is full of sadnes, yet full of strenght. very well done.
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=D Hi Justin! Thanks for the comment!
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, Very good write tiff
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Capricornpoet, I dont think that I could have worded an explanation of this write any better myself. Incredible.
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I see what they are saying about emotion vs. numbness...however, I am only 25 but last year I had mini strokes for 7 months every five minutes. Life was hell. I couldnt walk, talk, chew...hell I couldnt even remember my kids names sometimes. Doctors were telling me I was going to have a massive stroke and quite possibly die. I wrote out a will and everything. They have since stopped but I also had facial numbness to go with it. One eye and one side of my face would be crying while the other side kinda was like "whats wrong with her?"....anyway...this poem just brought all of that back and reminded me how thankful I am for being me again. I'm not sure if you meant this in a literal form, or representatively or both but it was just amazing. Wonderful write. I hope it was figuratively speaking because I would hate to hear of anyone having gone through nearly what I did. Eventually, just so ya know, they found out my strokes where from the Ortho Evra birth control patch. Anyway good job on this.
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Numbness Vs. Emotion. That's what i was thinking of as i read this. Funny, i find i'm not the only one. This really speaks to me in many ways, one being the actuality that when i cry, i often only cry tears through one eye.
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so ...just what were you writing about????... just idding...no need to 'splain... this was a very good rea... like angel vs. devil... i rnjoyed your sharing ir wirh us...peace, shzoosy
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oh god, this is awesome. it seemed like an odd image at first, but really, you describe your emotions perfectly, and i can totally relate.
At first I just liked it, but these lines made me love it:
"The innocence of youth shines bright,
Pooling beside the solace of night."
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Very nice.
My favorite lines:
'Quite protective of its numb domain.'
'I cannot fathom my own division,
Its a constant struggle of indecision.
I live in the heart of the question, why?
One Eye Cries and The Other is Dry.'
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That was beautiful, and I agree with Salsa about the Numbness vs. Emotion comparison. It actually reminde me of one of my own poems, "Empty Eyes", in the sense that you are metaphorically blind and searching for answers beyond your blurred vision. Beautiful write, and well-thought-out on so many levels. Good job, my dear, and take care!
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where a soul resides
Truly deep , as the soul resides in the light of the eye, yet
the one that does not see as a recluse ; a personification of
an unseeing eye a paradox of the souls struggles to see and
feel. Metaphore of the sight of love wanting and the blindness of impassivity. Poetic prose , a dance of the soul .
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right now i feel i can relate. sometimes u have one and wish for another, and vice versa. its hard to choose. both can be bitter. very lovely write.
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WHOA!!!!
this is really good in my opinion. it is very thought provoking and i could picture this as i read your words. i almost did not click on it but now i am very glad that i did. viyanna r langager -
Ah, numbness vs. emotion
You portray it well
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