I cannot weep; -my eyelids slumber tonight
Unloved hearts won't sing.
Diluted dreams of peace and serenity
Where no golden church bells ring.
I cannot weep because my soul seems hollow.
Although I have revealed,
My indigo heart seemingly trusts no-one
And all my love is sealed.
Music whispers, inspiring me slowly,
It leaves me pondering,
Once upon memories love enhanced my faith
I'm now sadly drifting.
On, ever on, the dim skies of loneliness
On gloomy clouds of gray
The in-depth thoughts I jot will always linger,
In times of yesterday.
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Thanks for reading me, much love and tenderness, Timothy~
Written April 10th, 2006
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Brilliance True Gold in Heart & Soul!
Dearest Poeticweaver,
I will always love you!
I will always cherish you,
I will always be here for you!
I can feel you slowly
Dissolving into the sea
Longing for unity with life and God
You see beyond the veil of unseen things
A masterpiece, a journey through memories of yesterday.
Beautifully Penned my new old friend. I see a balance in-between
Life and Art. Eternal music flowing through your strings everlastingly~
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VERY GOOD
WOW VERY WEL WRITTEN MAKES ONE THINK ABOU LOST LOVE KEE UP THE GOOD WRITES -
WOW and WOW! again,
this is written beautifully....Such a very sincere
outpouring of feelings...Excellent write!
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WOW!!! VERY POETIC, and a good use of words, expresses alot of feelings, i read the first line and got stuck into it, keep writing.
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ur really good!!! good job i like this poem!!!
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It's beautiful. I understand how it feels to feel unloved. I also know a lot about how when love is lost, it is like you are the only one there. Great poem!
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Very beautiful and with a haunting loneliness.
I hope there comes someone new soon to love and hold Timothy.
Jim
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well written and good use of wording, it pulls you into the emotion the poet is feeling, congratulations.
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Initially.......I felt the sadness well penned throughout this write.......but I also feel some sense of hope that is still lingering within this poet...........
Beautifully written Timothy.................
Leance
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This is an amazing poem! You have a great style of writing...I just...LOVE IT! I love the words you used to capture my attention...it sorta felt like...I felt what you're feeling for that brief moment. It was amazing. WOW...this is really good. Keep it up! I definitely hope to see more where this came from!!
The one and only...
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This is an excellent poem that captured my attention at once. You have a lovely style that just sucks the reader in. I like the feeling the poem gave, and your skill shows clearly with it. I especially love the last stanza...it was beautifully written. Thank you for sharing this with us all and keep that ink flowing!
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Eloquent
Love your style and flair. The emotions ring true and your word choice is exquisite. An imagery filled reading experience that was a pleasure. -
Great Job
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excellent
Good write bit sad, but still good. -
i got a nice (well, obviously not nice, but you know what i mean) feeling from this. good job of putting your feelings across on paper/screen...
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Bravo!!
I think that this write shows of great skill and artistry within each carefully chose word. I very much enjoyed reading this and want to thank you very much for sharing such craftsmanship. Great job and please keep penning. This one is a keeper. Gary
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Ho so sad , but it catches the heart strings.Well done Tim and good luck in the contest. Val'
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excellent
Very sad, but very beautiful. Your words express a melancholy mood so well. Reflecting about past times when love enhanced our lives. I enjoyed reading this one.
etherealforu
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Soulfully written
So sad, So sad!!! The obvious desired effect. Good penning bro, and a great imagery of a tortured soul.
I enjoy a more upbeat poem, but as we both know ( life is not that way ).
~cries for bro
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there is an obvous saddness in this beautiful poem feelings ooze from each line and flow from each word thank you keep writting
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this is sad but very good and it feels like writing a poem is writing a memory too.
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Very nice, but also very stark. An interesting choice of words and form. It was loose, but still kept to the rhyme. Flowing. An enjoyable read. Keep it up.
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Beautifully written. It is deep and powerful ... yet filled with such sorrow that it has left me sad.
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Boy Howdy, do you ever need a woman. LOL Seriously, I enjoyed this piece as most of your writes. The only bump in your journey into sadness is the word, "because," on the first line of the second stanza. It detracts from the sharing of your thoughts and goes into an explaination. Deleting the word may keep the flow without hurting the message. But either way a commendable write.
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Sometimes it is hard for us to move on eh? But we must. Locked up hearts will never be opened. Time to insert the key, find someone to unlock you. Tis poem made me feel sad for you. I guess because my heart is padlocked too. Trust in yourself and no one else. Thanks for this moving poem.
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splendid
Very well done and artfully written. You have captured the feeling of the trapped soul, fighting to get out from within the poet with each structured sentence. A pleasant change from the norm, I greatly enjoyed this poem and it's subject. Thank you for sharing it.
-Darkness
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Quite the captivating write! Wonderful piece here, Timothy, full of passion and intrigue. Simply wonderful! Keep penning, keep sharing, and much luck to you with your poetry!
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Excellent use of color to set the tone. I love the line, "linger, in times of yesterday."
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Excellent use of color to set the tone of your poem. I love the line, "linger, in times of yesterday.
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this is a well writen piece. i no u r goin through alot right now and u r havin probs if u wana chat im here and if u wana tell me y then sendd me and Im. much love and keep writing love irenexxxxx
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very melancholy. It makes me think of sitting in an old church yard and having it start to mist over. all the best.
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Beautiful! I wish I could say more, but there really isn't any more to say!
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perfecto
wow.. this is so me.. I am glad I clicked on this.. I needed to read something like this tonight.. My fav line of a few is " I cannot weep cos my soul seems hallow" I love this....!!!!!!!
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sweet melancholy
True poetic melancholy, every line a sad serenade, with a touch of darkness just enough to stir the morosoty .Every line was my
favorite, ; reminds me of John Keats ,yet it has its own magic.
Loved this classic write and perfect prose, a delight of poetry,
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a brilliant piece.
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So emotional and the flow was amazing!!! Love it all the more and really like the choosen rhymin scheme!!! Whising you well and let your emotions drown your paper!!!
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I love the tender in this piece...very nicely written... congratz!
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sweet,soft feel to this poem. i can almost feel the emptiness myself.
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nice!
the emotion really shines through in this piece. i love the flow of it and the word choice and the way its put together just.. i don't know, fits. so yeah, great job of expression here, i liked reading it. best of luck with your continued writing!
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I must say this is a perfect piece of art, you have alot going for you in the arts of poetry! Keep that pen to paper, you're going places, I can tell!
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wow!
this is a really good piece. very structured but in a very loose way, if that makes any sense at all. i really enjoyed reading it because it seemed very original and flowed really great. good job and i look forward to reading more of your work! -
beautiful, soulful
enjoyable poem...love to read more of your stuff,nice flow and style -
Touching
you could feel the tender pains within your heart with this write. I hope this is just something that came to you and nothing being present in the moment of the here & now. Irregardless it has a sad beauty. -
awesome again! Great job Weaver!
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Oh, Timothy...this was so sad! It lacks your usual sunshine and warmth, but it's still hauntingly beautiful. It makes me want to offer a shoulder. Much love to you and yours,
Nicole
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Wonderful poem, felt the melancholic state of mind-it reached the reader's state of mind
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Very nicely done I like this one a lot the strongest lines are
I cannot weep because my soul seems hollow.
Although I have revealed,
My indigo heart seemingly trusts no-one
And all my love is sealed.
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this was a sad state of affairs here...it flowed very well..and evoked feelings of lonliness in the reader...a good thing... keep your muse around ...peace..shzoosy
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very nice, it felt traditional...in a good way
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Wonderful
So beautiful...
Love is so powerful, it makes us weep, it makes us crazy. It reminds me of all the trials I went through for and because of love, the hurt.. but the sweet, bitter sweet sorrow it all became..
This poem is beautiful beyond words because, for all the words it has a simple message - or atleast to me it does- that love burns, lingers and scars.. but the memories still seem to warm our hearts, if not just a tad.. everyone once in awhile. -
Very melancholy this poem, filled with such sad emotions and thoughts of past happiness and present gloom. One feels such tenderness and sorrow for the one writing these lines. One should not feel so lonely.
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Thanks my dear friend queenie, I miss your comments, they're all so uplifting, I'm glad you enjoy my works as I weave each line as one. My heart to yours, love ya.
-Timothy
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oh,timothy,the beauty in you shines even through somber moods.i so miss when i don;t read your work.there is always something to carry me through.this sort of fits my mood as of late,but it reeks so much of the beauty of your soul,it lifts my spirit.you are the soul that offers healing for wounded souls.
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AWWWWWWW this is sooooo sad...to be so very empty and lonely. C'mere...lemme give you a Beautifully penned, the message was very clear...flow is awesome. Keep up the great work, many blessings to you.
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The form struck me as really well done, and everything from the flow to the word choice was excellent. A real pleasure to read, superb job!
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Wow, that's really good. Great way of subtly getting intense feelings in there
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Beautifully written, I enjoyed your word choices, indigo heart, diluted dreams of peace and serenity. Very deep and emtional, I can feel the loneliness through this piece, great work/
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i absolutely love this indigo heart you have. the description is so much more than just a sad heart. you have written this extremely well. love you timothy. your ap sister viyanna r langager
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BEAUTIFUL
Oh my gosh. If I could describe this in one word, it would be
BEAUTIFUL
This masterpiece has left me almost speechless, i really love it. It has a somewhat haunting tone to it. Great write. More than great. Incredible, amazing, outstanding!!! Keep on writing.
~noir ~
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TRULY BEAUTIFUL
It seems that almost everyone today has these same feelings, this is very beautiful, I love your words and the impression they leave.
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Exquisite!
This was beautifully melancholy! It sang like a operatic drama.
Images of hopelessness and isolation played in my mind.
All the aspirations of former days of glory were hinted in
this beguiling piece. Reflections of broken hearts and dreams
cascaded across the canvas as I peered into each sad moment.
A lovely poem written with eloquence and grace
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'My indigo heart seemingly trusts no-one
And all my love is sealed.'
That is powerful.
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This is extremely well written and i thought of how excellent a piece of poetry it is. So often a piece like this just digresses into blah. This rises above and the rhymes and content stay well fixed with a set beginning and end. You should be pretty proud of this one. Thanks for sharing it on featured. RC
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Timothy is uninspired?!!!!Oh no!!!! This can not be true.Just kidding ya.This fine expressive write bares no referance to a lack of such.It screams it's message loud and clear.Music is the answer,you know that.Listen to some golden oldies of the sixties to stoke the fires.Does it for me.Loved this emotional longings for inspiration write.Background of Navy's blue works well with it too.~~Suseann
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Ah my heart was touched by this.. How mine continues to mourn what might have been with Lisa.. sigh you have melted a bit of its coldness with this beautiful write my friend.. Be Safe and may you find solace for your pain as well..
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I don't know exactly what it is about this poem but I really like it. I love the blue background with it and the poem makes me feel like it is raining and I am sitting in my favorite chair with my favorite blanket feeling melancholy.
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I liked these lines:
On, ever on, the dim skies of loneliness
On gloomy clouds of gray
The in-depth thoughts I jot will always linger,
In times of yesterday.
Nice. Keep penning because I love reading. You know me.
victoria
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exelent
what a very deeply sad emotional write, one that I am sure most can relate to in one way or another, we live and learn my freind or do we just live? -
WOW. Once again you have written a poem which is beautiful and awe-inspiriring. Such beautiful imagery was put in to this poem. Fantastic job! I really loved it and I could really relate to it!!!
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This is so emotional and beautiful - fantastic imagery in it.
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Thanks my friend, just penning, no worries, I think? lol..
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love this just remember do not hold onto old bagage. let it go into the slimy pits of nothingness keep writing
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very emotional
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Thanks Tammy, I love you too!
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This is beautiful, I love it. I cant relate to this in alot of ways. Thanks for always sharing you with us.
Know I love you very much.
Much love always,
tammy
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Thanks my sweet sis, I love ya!
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wow this has so much emotion in it...I almost cried with this piece. Very moving piece.... I really understood it.
Yvonne
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Most wonderfully and beautifully penned, my brother! Again, you've written your heart into your words
I love you dearly,
Sandy
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