Can you believe someone if they tell you they love you,
But they don't give a rats butt about you?
It hurts when my father does that to me,
But I know he's a hypocrite.
I can go on-and-on about my dad,
But I can summarize it into 2 words.
I by down at night thinking these 2 words,
But all I know that he shows is --- no love.
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Written April 10th, 2006
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GOOD!!
hey you;-)
Everything will be ok!! this was a great write!! I'm sure your dad loves you but he just doesn't know how to show it. just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have! keep writing and tell him how you feel!!
luvs yas
Sirena -
sad but great
Love, You're loved my your dad he may just have a odd way of saying or showing it to you and I know for my dad and mom they do the same to me but I know they love me even if it is a odd way of doing so ^^
plus you are the greastest thing that ever happen to your Dad and he knows it and I hope that you can someday work things out with him
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thats a sad one...but iz great..but u r being loved trust me...great poem
sineane
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Good job. Your feelings must be deep of this and I know a few people who can really relate to this. I hope that someday it gets better for you. Keep up the writing. xxxx, April
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Very Good
I know how this feels...Had to go through this myself -
I like this. Simple words telling a very sad jagged story. Yep good job. sj
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Good job!!!
Howdie sweetie. Agree with the question of Child of an Angel...apart from that, interesting poem. Short and to the point, it also seems bit unstructured in its flow, which I think is exactly what you tried to do, as the message of the poem is really metaphorically just that. Good job. -
Hey sweetie, forgive me if iam wrong but in this line
I by
Did you mean I lie?
And in the last line, take out the is, it will help it flow better. I love this dear, but what has made this come? I wish i could talk to you, but, I sure hope everything is ok. Well great write none the less, and i loves ya!!!Take care, and keep penning and i will keep reading!!!
Emily
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