I am these words; my heart in letter form
Scrawled across the page; ink smudged and dripping
With a satisfying sound, I am tattered and torn
Into hundreds of pieces; like my heart
Blown away; thrown into the wind
My utensil of love will not write anymore
For my immortal ink is slowly drying up
Until I can not write the verses
Encrypted ((in)) bones
::: and:::
When a new day comes
my river of words will slowly dry up
Beside the oasis of my emotions
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Written April 9th, 2006
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BRILLIANT
amazing poem, description of your emotions fabulous! I think many could relate to your pain in this poem...
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silly question coming from the contest holder/judge but what was option 1? LOL. well yuor poem did go smooth. Good contrast and good flow n rhythm to it. niuce entry and although tis judging time now I apologize for the alteness of this comment. Good Luck
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I really like what you've done with this piece... it was intense! I love "immortal ink is slowly drying up", it is so true with writer's block though... it feels like you could write forever, yet you just can't write for some reason. The title just caps off this poem beautifully! Awesome Di!
Christina
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does this mean that your not writing anymore? Are you going through writer's block?!!! PLEASE don't tell me that this is what's happening!!!
beautiful write sweetie. I feel like this whenever I get cornered by writer's block. I feel overwhelmed with emotions but have no way to express them, tis very frustrating and quite confusing.
Much love 
Always and Forever,
~Kendal -
a writer sitting at their desk trying to meet a deadline and going insane is what i saw in my mind
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WOW Di... This is awesome!!! You did a great job on this!!! I really like it!!!! It is very imagerish...
... it's sad but great!!!
Hugs,
Beth -
Sadly beautiful, thoughtful.
Outstanding. BETTER than the first verse lol- it is smashing. I only wish the pic was larger, but since my screen rez is so high, it looks tiny! But what a nice backdrop to a very unusual poem...using metaphors like your ink and quill...just amazing. An Oasis without water and refuge becomes swallowed by the desert around it.
Another beautiful poem and superb artistry as well.
All my love, dear Godchild.
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The last part of this poem is magnificent. I remember reading it yesterday and just forgot to comment....Sometimes my brain is just mush and won't work right. Got to shake it to get the acorns out of my ear...
What I find remarkable about the whole thing is its keen eye. You pace yourself in an efficient and thoughtful manner , Always keeping youself afloat. You centered the poem , Which is usually something I don't care for , But you pulled it off nicely. Love the third line of the second stanza as well. It creates a nice visual to represent the movement of the poem. Also adds a unique layer to the idea.
This is very good. Again , I apologize for not commenting earlier. I hope you win this contest or at least place. You deserve it.
All the best and much love sis ,
James
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Another outstanding piece that flows together well and tells an awesome story. Very powerful, emotional, and descriptive once again, and another one that I can relate to. Great job! Keep up the amazing work!
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Awesome
A very thought provoking poem little Sis...I loved the whole meaning behind it and the way it captivates the reader so easily. Good luck with it in the contest you currently have it in.
Keep writing.
Your Big Sis
Countrybabe
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Rob,
thanks for the comment
always great top hear from u
Di
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I love the title of this amazing poem, It's breath taking when you gaze into the sands of the hour glass and you try and utilize the your thoughts and pain to open the other eyes of poets around you to see and feel the hurt you your self are feeling you have a brilliant talent And I hope someday that my own poetry will be as strong and powerfully beautiful as yours thank you for allowing me to comment and read your work,
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Cel,
thanks for the comment hun,
muchlove
Di
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This piece makes me think of a war that is going on inside you. I feel as if you are in an on going battle with yourself and you feel you are losing. stay strong...dont let life drain you of the beaty that is you.
cheers -
Solebaci,
thanks for the wondful comment
Scarlet
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BRILLIANT! I read it through a few times to understand it but that's a very good thing, it leaves the reader wondering so they want to know more. The use of words to describe your emotions in this is outstanding! Very inspirational and deep ^_^ (my favourite smiley thing again!) I enjoyed reading it, thankyou and good luck =D
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