In my life I have waisted
So much time I cant replace it
All my love I misplaced it
From so much pain I just cant take it
Every morning when I awaken
My body trembles and I am shaken
I lay in bed and I am naked
Im so damn sick and I aint faking
Life it sucks when you live like I do
From so many mistakes that I admit to
But I just cant help the stuff I go through
But that's why fate just brings me to you
'-Because life is hard and the road is rocky
So do what you can then come and cop me
You can burn me up and forget your problems
Like all this stuff I have forgotten-'
I have lost my since of self well being
Thanks to you my lungs are bleeding
I see some windows and I am peeping
I hear a sound and my heart stops beating
I cant sleep at night because I am with you
All these nights I have slept so few
'-Because life is hard and the road is rocky
And I just wish that I could stop me
From making the mistakes that I make
I need a break from the stuff that I take-'
I need you here choking me
I am willing to let you suffer me
God I pray for help from you
Help me run from the things I do
I will run so far away
I wont think of you I hope someday
-But you would find me there searching for you-
Then I would run some more until my sky turned blue
Can I break away can I run that far
-Well I don't know because life is hard-
'And the road is rocky'
-So do what you can then come and cop me
You can burn me up and forget your problems
Like all MY life that's been forgotten-
WRITTEN BY J. GLENN NORTH AKA GLENN THORN
Author notes
Keep in mind this is me and my demons battling and they can talk too
Written April 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Write me a world, write me a rhyme, write me a tale of yours and mine. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
400 points, ended December 19, 2006, 34 entries
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My demons can talk also... I love the chorus... I like that bit where you mention what i'm taking. I thought, "Hmmm interesting, dope or ganja?" but yeah I get what you mean. We all have our mental demons, mine are pretty damn mental actually. Anyway thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Thanks for reading this poem it started out as lyrics for a friend of mine but instead of giving these words to my friend I kept them for my self there is a lesson in these words a lesson that took a long time for me to learn thats why this poem is like apart of my soul thanks again
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This is a bit sad here. It seems as if the author has some regrets about the past, and wants to make the future right. this has some good word choices in it here. -
This piece is soaking in tragedy, the stumbling rhyme carries the vision of a desroyed mind with great effect.
Some small spelling errors, 'since' should be 'sense'
'shakeing' should be 'shaken' perhaps, but please do not let my comments distract from your talent.
Excellent Work.
Thank you for entering.
E.A.
Edited on Apr 09, 11:18 p.m. because ''.
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