sixteen roses
exhale Spring
through open petals
a new season's scent
and gentle beauty
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To Elisa.
Happy birthday sweet smile
allpoetry.com/poet/phantasmic%20smile
Written April 9th, 2006
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through open petals... wonderful verse that is to bring meanings to to the sense impressions that show the beauty of a stage in a life...important stage...h
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She's in college now. I spoke to her about a month ago. She seems well, was looking for off-campus housing I believe. She has outgrown us I am afraid, but hopefully we gave her something she needed at the time. A smile maybe.
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Birthday flowers with a wonderful sentiment attached.
well written.
I will swing by and see what she writes.
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These are beautiful images, Mari, and for a beautiful girl. Your tankas seem effortless, the best kind of art.
Best wishes to Elisa.
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Happy birthday Elisa. It's nice to know that people/parents care enough to share to their thoughts and feelings with others. I love hopeful nature of your message.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
I didn't know I had such a beautiful sister you can she immediately she got that from you mommer 
although the other part had to do something with it too I guess 
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So few words say so much. This is truly lovely! Happy birthday to your friend. Hugs, Patricia
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Dear Mari,
A well crafted and thoughtful tanka for a charming young lady who I am thrilled to have as a sonnet pupil. I think I already sent Elisa a birthday card but I better go and make sure (you know what my memory's like these days!)
Anyway, this is a lovely birthday present for her and I join you in wishing her HAPPY BIRTHDAY.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX El Padre. -
Wonderful words ,meaningfully penned ,a beautiful sweet 16 gift -Happy Birthday Elisa
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Such a beautiful poem in just a few short lines. It speaks volume about the beauty of springtime and the beauty of this young girl blossoming into a young woman. Wonderful, heartfelt poem Dear
Be Well and Be Blessed
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Ah the poem is as beautiful as our daughter mother.
Leave it to you to see the essence that we've both seen in this wonderful young lady. -
excellent~
Yes sis
Your cyber-daughter sure is pretty
Has some beautiful eyes thats for sure
Happy Birthday sweetie
Hugs
Susan~~~
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A birthday buquet ?
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Thank you so much, Mom! I sent you this massive email that was a whole bunch of questions about me and I put you and Dad as my role models. And you are. You really are. Both of you know how to make me smile, even when the dark surrounds me. You with your quiet love and gentle humor and Dad with his crazy Yemishness.
Thank you.
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Sixteen - seems like a lifetime away that to me now lol I was never sweet though A happy birthday to Elisa, may you have many many more that are filled with joy
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excellent~
Such beautiful words in 5 lines
Excellent tanka sis and Happy Birthday Elisa
I just penned a new one too drop by when ya can and take a look see....not my usual nature write thats for sure gonna surprise ya with this one
Love this and the soft background too
Love n hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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WOW Mari! This is so beautiful in its imagery and flow. I love the alliteration too and background reminds me of one of my birthday cakes All the best.
Charishma
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oooo i love it an the bkround too is that one of them or is that from somethin else
anyway beautiful pome!!!
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