It's so cold,
Can't you feel it?
The prickles on my skin,
I'm numb to this,
But i'll shiver from the cold icicles in my heart,
Though it feels as though i'm dying,
I can't be,
It's burning too strong,
You're right beside me,
Can't you see what i'm doing?
I'm tearing away my coarsened skin,
In the hope that you will notice,
That you will stop me,
But i'm still hidden,
For anyone but you would laugh,
Your hand rests on my shoulder,
But only for a second,
And i wish i had turned around,
To see your eyes,
Maybe that ghost smile kept for me,
Then it's gone,
And i'm back to wishing,
Pretending to shiver,
Though the apprehension has racked my throaght dry,
My love for you has made me dizzy,
I feel so ill,
And i know if you would put your arms around me,
This feeling would go,
I'm so cold here,
And i know that means something,
It's so cold,
Please save me,
It's all i ever wish,
And i'm trying to stop this,
It's making me ill,
Feeling so strongly that you could make the world ok again,
And it's been cold for so long,
I know i'm not helping myself,
And there's so much pain,
Sleep is my only release,
Yet i can't embrace it eternally,
Because you're just a phonecall away,
I know if i asked you would sort things,
But i can't,
Because i can't lose you,
It's so cold, Ali,
Please save me.
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Written April 9th, 2006
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This is amazing Amber, I can really see where you're coming from as it's happened to myself. It's really beautiful, it flows really well and it's so honest; life will drop you when you've reached the top. Well done.
Em xxx -
awwww this is so beautiful. i really like this. it's so amazing. excellent write. great job.
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You tore my heart right from my chest with your emotional plea to this person. I've had this happen before and whenever they don't notice I feel so invisible. I really like this poem. Keep up the great work, this poem is amazing. I applaud you for it.
Sincerely,
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honest and authentic
been there, precious. i appreciate your honesty. the crappy reality of life is that it hurts. the beautiful reality of life is that there is HOPE. do you know where to find it? a wise woman said to me that if what you're doing isn't meeting your goals, try something new. not a different variety of the same thing, but something completely new. did you know that Jesus loves you? that He is alive and loves you? You are LOVED. That is hope!
don't mean to preach, just your poem pricked my heart for you. consider this as compassion coming out the way I know how. you're not alone. -
i have to agree.. this is heart wrenching. life is full of sunshine and rain.. warm and cold.. you'll warm up once again.
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what a heart wrenching plea... makes me sad to even think about it too much... poor thing... good write though..peace...shzoosy
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amber, this is so beautiful and touching. i wishi there was more i could say really. *hugs* the flow of the poem is really good and you can see it's a really heartfelt poem which makes it alive, almost, when you read it. it's amazing. i think she's very lucky to have you love her so much. there's some good imagery and you've used the idea of cold so well throughout. it's beautiful in a very sad way. *hugs*
talk soon.
luv Philippa x x x
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