Green, velvetine shrouds
Upon a barren earth
White peaks touching turquoise
Post quenching nature's thirst
A mistaken light flickers
Small, yet strong and able
Tan feathers, fluffed plumes
A young bird I see out my half-open window
The sound of rebirth
Through the turmoil of this land
Forgiving frailties
Forgetting the curse of man
Author notes
Written on 9th April 2006 at 19:05 GMT
The picture was taken after I wrote this today. It is of the scene I was looking at. The bird I saw flew in and settled on the area of grass near the pointy shadow.
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this is soothing especially the first stanza.
thank you for entering this treat and good luck
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I liked this alot. To me I realy enjoyed how you pictured only surface calm and beauty kind of like keeping our true emotions and problems in.
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Great
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Beautiful flow... and the picture makes it just so... so unique! Even without the image I'm positive I could close my eyes and picture the scene. It was a wonderful write with great meaning. Keep it up =D
Love always,
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WHOA
"Oh MY GOSH I love this" those were the first words out of my mouth when I read this poem. Its just.... ough I cant even describe it in words how much I felt that poem.. and im not even exactly sure what its about because I only read it once so far. This is completely... amazing. I saw the title and said "oh that sounds interesting" so I read it. Thank you so much for writing this poem and please keep it up! The rhymes were just right: not too cliche but still rhymeing and getting the point across. I cant say it enough -- Great Work!
rock on and God bless
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Realy great well written poem! I loved the amazing discription that you used! Keep writing and never ever give up! Haylow x -
I loved that so much, I read it twice. You have talent. Great job!
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Excellent
This is so wonderfully written and described. You have captured it all perfectly. Keep up the good work -
A beautiful description of a simple pleasure. You have shown us that simple pleasures can be far more than simple, and a vision we may write off can be uplifting if we choose to look upon it that way.
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beautiful.. wonderful language.. beautiful flow.. so meaningful
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Thank you so much!
I haven't written anything decent in such a long time, and I'm really glad that this one has turned out to be a success. 
Your comment means a lot.
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Outstanding
Simply breathtaking. You have said so much in this seemingly simple write but there is so much more here. It's a great write and the picture is stunning. Great job and good luck in the contest. -
SISSY!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU BACK!!!!!!! I MISSED YOU!!!
Thanx for what ye said darlin, that was really sweet. 
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Laura, you always amaze me but I think you've done so much more with this one. You've truly captured the view of this picture. Even without the picture posted here, I would have been in awe of your words. You have captured everything this place truly is. I applaud the beauty of your pen to paper. Truly great job my dear sister. Best of luck in the contest.
Love you
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I was watching that scene while writing. We've had incredibly weather changes today. It started off sunny like the picture. By lunch time it had started to rain. Then the rain changed to heavy snow! When it stopped, you would hardly have been able to tell it'd been snowing. It brightened up again, which was when I took the picture, but there was a heavy hail shower not long after! Crazy weather.
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Soothing with promise
Quite a view, lady. Surprised you could move away from it to write something. Tis gorgeous indeed and bears the mark of restfulness and peace. I'm envious of a view like that. Oh, and the poem is just an extension of the picture. Almost hard to tell where one stops and the other starts.
The sound of rebirth
Through the turmoil of this land
Well said and a wonderful description.
Edited on Apr 09, 2:42 p.m. because ''.
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