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child smiles...

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child smiles...

 

 

a magnolia
fragrance
stays in my mind
evoking my feelings
of you, here…

 



sweet infant,
if I could guardian
your sleep
and turn it into doves;
bring the milk
that lights and flows
from the sweet aroma
of your breath,
and bring you life...

 



I would… become
The mother of you.



Author notes


This was born, thinking about the sweet innocence of the children in my country... but it also reflects somehow the motherhood in me...

To your contest:

I chose the option to write a poem to your sister and soon to be child ...

Best Wishes
Leslie

Photography by
beatus-vir.deviantart.com

The Shot
www.deviantart.com/deviation/29502240/

Written April 9th, 2006

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  • Candy6
    October 16, 2007
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    Very beautiful

    Great write.

  • confused by love
    July 10, 2006
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    Like this poem very well. Keep on adding your poetry

  • Angelwatchingme
    May 29, 2006
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    Wow, nice pic, and amazingly lovely piece.
  • JennStuff
    April 24, 2006
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    Once again and i come back to find you have written some of the most bueatiful pieces of work, i hope you never stop writting. I have missed You...

    ~ JennStuff~

  • little-hug
    April 22, 2006
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    Awwww the words in this are sooo beautiful and caring.
    It touches my heart and makes me smile. It is so beautiful and you portrayed such a sweet heartfelt message in a few lines
    thank you for entering
    and good luck

  • Leslie gold member
    April 15, 2006
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    Thanks .... Lately my mother instict has quite a kick...

    Love you.!

  • Nicolette gold member
    April 15, 2006
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    Beautiful poetry, Leslie! I think this is the first time I've seen anything by you that speaks of the maternal instinct. As a mother I can so relate to this - I just love the little ones...pure white magnolias. Simply beautiful in all languages and cultures!!

    ~ Nicolette

  • Zayra Yves gold member
    April 14, 2006
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    This is beautiful.

  • Leslie gold member
    April 11, 2006
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    thank you for your words....


  • Ankeeta silver member
    April 11, 2006
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    This was very innocent and beautiful
    Ankita
  • marrow
    April 10, 2006
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    leslie, this is astounding! it may very well be my favorite write of yours. you had so much fanastic imagery, & you were still so simple & expressive. i am beyond impressed.

    i hope that you are doing well. i apologize for not keeping better in touch. may God bless you, & may you have many bright & shining days.
    -- justin

  • grannyeri gold member
    April 10, 2006
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    Loved the message and the brevity of this poem. It's much harder to say profound things in few words - you have succeeded here.
  • Axel Dream
    April 10, 2006
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    very good

    Very capturing, indeed. The last two lines: "I would… become
    The mother of you." are very strong. I especially like how you put all the words to make it stronger and stronger in emotion until the conclusion at the end. "Sweet infant" to "and bring you like" as the climax of this poem, I feel, and it's definitely one that suits this piece of work. Hope you win a place into this contest, Leslie, because this poem deserves it.




    Axel Dream
  • blessedbeyondbelief
    April 10, 2006
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    Beautifully penned and filled with loving emotion...The blessings of motherhood is an amazing thing...Keep up the awesome work. Many blessings to you.

  • Plastic Dreams
    April 10, 2006
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    heart stopping

    this is beyond amazing. i'm not sure how to respond to this and show the gratitude of how i feel. i smile inside as your words put together a lovely showing of fears dropped, and curtains forgotten. a child's innocent mind is one of the most beautiful things and i don't think it could have been better explained when it comes to love for younger hearts. well written. i hope you keep on keeping on.

  • aRdNeK
    April 9, 2006
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    Another very heartfelt piece. Truly a beautiful write, and it's filled with love and emotion. Great job! Keep up the amazing work!

  • April 9, 2006
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    some of us have bigger hearts, wider arms and stronger shoulders than others. that we dont alwys percieve our own strenghs because we are basking in the lonlliness of being a hero.

    i never knew. i would touch so many ppls hearts.
    i never meant. to let so many ppl down.
    i never thought. i could be lonelier than i already was.

    and yet i digress... heart. size does matter. for all that we are is all that we leave behind, mayhap imortlity is that ability to touch other pppls hearts.

    when that sun goes down.
    will you remember.
    me.






  • Robin Candor
    April 9, 2006
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    Poetry about children is one of the wonders of literature. The opportunity to dwell on innocence and our part to play in or ruin that innocence. This piece is very light toward the little ones and is a nice addition to all children poetry. Thanks for sharing this one. RC

  • WordWraith
    April 9, 2006
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    Wow

    Well done. This is a great poem. I liked the style in which you wrote it and the way that it flowed. The fact that it was short and succinct and still carried a deep point was surprising. Again, well done.

  • Swtpoetryman
    April 9, 2006
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    PRECIOUS AS A CHILD'S INNOCENT SMILE!

    What a beautiful, concise, precise, heartfelt, and soulful poem for what anyone can see (with the photograph or without) is obviously a beautifula nd gentle child! GOOD LUCK in the contest! This IS the winner of this contest to me even IF it doesn't garner you a SHINY, GOLD TROPHY that will never be as precious, anyway - as this child's innocent smile!
    Peace& Love!

    Worthy of my third applause (which I don't easily give away) of the day!
    THANKS for spending some of your valuable AP BUCKS to feature this for otherwise I would have sadly missed it!

  • blondone
    April 9, 2006
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    wow what a nice piece of poerty done here very well written true emotion came threw for me thanks =for sharing this one and have a great write day....

  • Floorboards
    April 9, 2006
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    lovely

    this is absolutely beautiful "i would...become the mother of you". is just the perfect ending to a wonderful poem,very well done,floorboards.

  • Leslie gold member
    April 9, 2006
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    thank you for your words, I know what you mean, we are indeed lucky to have families....

  • fille d ombre
    April 9, 2006
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    i think i know how you feel
    it really freaks me out some times when i stop to think about all thats going on in the world
    and how lucky most of us are to have familys and homesand a safe place to spend the night i really liked it
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