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Mutilated Love

 





Ignoring my instinct, I followed my heart
only to be left feeling dirty and used.




Lost in confusion, I stare in the mirror;
my mind altered, not knowing truth from illusion.




Alone, I sit in the darkness of the shadow
with my intestines knotted in rage.




Reflections showing my eyes glazed from crystal tears shed,
and my crimson lipstick smudged and faded.




My heart has suffered mutilation many times over,
but none so cruel as from your razor sharp words.




Thoughts of you are the gasoline that fuels the flames
which have caused me to become hostile.




The love I was held slowly dies
much like the candle that burns itself out.




I must harvest all my emotions, lock them away,
the pain of the past is just to great to bare.




Shut myself down, become numb to the world,
live life in a walking coma for eternity.





Author notes

Fear of the unknown


I used all words in your word bank.


Rob I would like to thank you for the invite into your contest. I greatly appreciate it. I enjoyed giving this a shot. I usually don't enter word bank contest so this was  something different for me
Written April 9th, 2006

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  • Amythest Moonjade
    April 13, 2006
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    Congratulations

    Merry meet,
    Congratulations on winning the Bronze. This was a very interesting poem. Again, Congratulations.

    Amythest


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 9, 2006
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    this is a very good write from you that defines the depths of your heart and the hurt it feels. i was amazed as i read the words you used so very well. i wish you luck in this contest that you have entered though i do not believe you will need it at all. viyanna r langager


  • Celticmoon
    April 9, 2006
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    Once again I thank you for the invite into your contest. I enjoyed writing this for you. I'm glad you liked it. Some of the words you had in the word bank were a tad tricky to fit into this piece but I think I managed it


  • robert bolin
    April 9, 2006
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    This was a write that knocked me out of my seat, I read it four times just because I was so amazed at the haunting feeling of the words I felt as if the woman in the mirror was speaking to her conflictions on the out side of the mirror, If that makes any since, anyways this put a chill on my spine in every word you have done a brilliant job and thank you for entering my contest,


  • justcurious
    April 9, 2006
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    it's strange how events and our own hearts can lead us into things. Sometimes... it just doesn't make sense... but far to often... hindsight will show us just what we did. I figure that this is more of contest poem so i am not going to say much more to the content... or really anything. I really liked the image and the poem.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    April 9, 2006
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    I felt this was good but spoiled a little by the use of the word "gasoline" which is parochial and too limiting in my opinion. A more generic term would perhaps be better. Fuel? Or whatever.
    Edited on Apr 09, 12:26 because ''.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    April 9, 2006
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    ooooh most excellent, my sister! Your fine talent shows brightly!!! Rock on, girlfriend! Love and hugs, Sandy


  • rainyday woman silver member
    April 9, 2006
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    excellent

    A very good write, I can see this contest is going to get really tough. I do not envey the judging in any way, so far all are excellent works, except maybe mine. But it's the self loath thing so what can I say. Good luck. Cheryl


  • April 9, 2006
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    you did well with this. very clever to have used all the words


  • Poetic-Dreamer
    April 9, 2006
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    I loved the picture. it made the poem more understanding. You combined the words together well you have an is that seems wrong towards the middle so you may want to reread it and see if its right but it was amazing. I applaud.
    NoL

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