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Eternal Love

 

  A pastel heaven settles atop a falling flame slowly eclipsing itself in depths of liquid turqouise. The soft cascades foam and gently rush over polished stones only to recede and glimmer in the aurora skies as warm winds breeze past a chilled silhouette tracing the water's footprints.
  If love were as this, then itself as the image would displace my universe and threaten my soul with happiness.
If love were as this, then no association of washing away sands and water as its successor would be made but realized that if love were as this - the sand is not replaced only replenished to withstand yet another pass over polished stones and the precious toes of those regarded with true and absolute passion.
  I no sooner have fallen into this beautious virtue of fervency, and as these affection-drowned eyes look past the distant horizon, my once covetting soul emits with abundance.
  If love were as this, then we are a willful slave unto it, and within our spirit a new faith will give us strength to hold on till eternity reaches its ending
           and time is frozen
                            still.

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  • a beautiful penning, exceptional descriptions and word play. Well done.
    Rory


  • vaseline
    April 17, 2006
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    Despite the spelling mistake in the word turquoise, I find this piece to be quite flawless. You bring forward general emotions but give them new light, without making me want to hurl. Repetition of 'if love were as this' just makes me keep my eyes on the screen. Very nice.

  • silver bugs
    April 17, 2006
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    this is beautiful, really. it's vivid, the imagery was great and it gave me a peaceful feeling. nice job thanks for sharing...good luck.

    ~Lana

  • Co-Co-Cola
    April 16, 2006
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    Whoa. Amazing.
    Dude, you fucking blew me away.
    I know that sounds very unprofessional of me cussing,
    But I was literally blown away.
    I'm so sure you're going to win that contest.
    You seem to deserve it.
    Wow.
    Still can't get over
    The beauty.
    The little tingle it made me feel beneath my core.
    Good luck, I really hope you win.