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Nirvana

 

 


He pierced my soul with his eyes
And glanced at my lavender lace bodice
That clung with perspiration
To my hard breasts

As he tore it from my flesh
My whole body quivered
I was so desperate
For him
Briefly, he looked at me
In my eager desperation

He leaned over and sucked my erect nipple
Into his mouth, hard and hungrily
As if this was his last meal

His hands slipped down my sides
In to my inner thighs
And he pressed my legs
Open
Wide against the hard floor

My elated body
Exposed
His warm tongue gliding
Into my gaping pussy
So wet and so frantically welcoming.
His fingers pressing
Into my fleshy back side
As he lifted me towards him

I uttered incoherently
As I felt his tongue searching
Probing
Devouring my lush juices

I was dripping

He moved his head back
And stared for an eternity
At my openness
His face drenched and smiling

He pressed his face to mine
Intensely we kissed, and
I relished my own sweetness
From his tongue

I felt his perspiration
Against my skin
As he slid his immense
Shaft deep inside
Forceful
Continual

Perfect nails digging
Drawing blood from his back
Bestial

The scent of him
Invasive to my senses
Primal

His loud guttural groans
Drowning my ears
As his final deep drive
Brought a pained pleasure
A mutual surge
Of waves of sheer bliss

Leaving bodies coated
With sweet honeys
As exhausted we lay
In Nirvana

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Written April 9th, 2006

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  • ckwriter69
    October 10, 2007

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    Nicely done. Very Erotic and steaming hot. Your word choice has given this some very lustful images for us readers to enjoy. Thanks for entering our contest and good luck.


  • Poetic Sunshine gold member
    October 9, 2007

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    Erotic and sensual..

    Nicely penned, great choice of words. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.

    Sunshine


  • Sokarjo
    March 1, 2007

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    Mmmmmm, I like. Very sensual and erotic, great imagery. I don't really care for the word 'pussy', but other than that, great piece. Thanks and good luck!

  • Tercarro
    February 16, 2007

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    I liked this one

    I liked this a lot and wish I was the one close enough to even know how you smell, taste hmmmmmm. I wish i could get those thoughts out of my head. Way toooooo frustrating.
    TC


  • nichtmich silver member
    January 21, 2007

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    Hot!

    Congratulations on the Bronze Trophy. This is a wonderfully steamy poem and the ending is unbelievably fantastic! Deb


  • lovetolove
    January 18, 2007
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    very sexy poem I love it when you read this poem it make you wish it was you in nervana I felt his perspiration
    Against my skin
    As he slid his immense
    Shaft deep inside
    Forceful
    Continual
    very sexual makes me hot reading all of this poem great job and good luck


  • Dorcha Runda
    January 15, 2007
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    This is just.............i cannot find a good enough word.........sensational! I love this! Its so detailed, and its exactly what i was looking for, exactly! Thank you so very much for entering. Best of luck!


  • Fallen Below
    July 21, 2006
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    Wow...you are one of very few people who've ever made me squirm in my seat, let alone think dirty thoughts. On that I give you my congrats. This was one fantastic write. Maybe I shall go read more of your work. ::slips off to read other poetry::

    God Bless.

    ~Laura~


  • Floorboards
    July 7, 2006
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    *shiver* i've already read this! great to read again though!
    alex


  • sarajaneUK
    June 27, 2006
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    ohhhh we love HOT though...don't we?? heheheheh, glad you enjoyed sweety.


  • dutch2lips gold member
    June 26, 2006
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    this is just plain and simple HOT
    it is sexy, vibrant, a turn on!
    well done lass


  • sarajaneUK
    June 6, 2006
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    Don't for get the bucket too!

    a pretend blush ---->

    tee hee


  • individuality gold member
    June 6, 2006
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    offers to go and buy a mop - we can't have all that - dripping lush juices everywhere on this newly polished hard floor now can we

  • sarajaneUK
    May 9, 2006
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    Thank you for reading and commenting, erotica, is not really my thing, this is my first real try at it! Ty sj


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    May 8, 2006
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    This is very erotic and very nicely written!! Bravo Bravo!!!
    Nice choice of words and I really enjoyed reading this.

    So keep on writing and good luck in the contest.
    Nooni

  • Floorboards
    May 6, 2006
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    gggreat

    heehee,this is absolutely superb sarajane!i can't believe anyone could be offended by this,they were warned!
    very nice job my friend,
    alex.


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    April 21, 2006
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    This is both very sensual and erotic...I really enjoyed this. Thank you for entering my contest.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*


  • Endeavor gold member
    April 17, 2006
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    Very Good

    Very moving, I dare not say more, Rick

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    April 17, 2006
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    My dear poetess,this write is well written and tastefully so.This is erotica at it`s best.You have avoided vulgarity and painted a graphic picture with words that enable the reader to feel.I only write and read tasteful erotica and this is in that category, I wish you luck in the contest,keep penning my talented ap friend,love and light,Yvette

  • sarajaneUK
    April 13, 2006
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    Mr Banter, it was not my intention to offend anyone with this write, and this clearly did. I am sorry you found it so. Some of my writing is graphic, and is meant to be stirring, whether the topic is erotica, child abuse or animal cruelty. Should I feature this again, I will add to the title, that it is 'sexually explicit, may cause offence'. sj


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    April 12, 2006
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    I love sensual and I am a guy who treasures the taste of sweet pie if you know what I mean. Love the cream too! Nicely done my lady! I want to personally thank you for placing an entry in my Turn Me On (For Ladies Only) Contest! I appreciate the hard work and creativity that went into this piece. You have been applauded for taking the challenge I put forth!

    Ted E

  • ecrivain01
    April 12, 2006
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    I don't normally read erotica, but the title didn't suggest that this was erotica. Sorry. I'll applaud it anyway to give you some points back.


  • Swtpoetryman
    April 12, 2006
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    ANY LUCKY MAN WHO TASTED YOUR HONEY WOULD BE

    An erotic encounter as you so eloquently and sensually described in this HOT, HOT, HOT piece with a woman as sweet as you would be NIRVANA for any LUCKY FELLOW, indeed! AHHHHHHHHHHHH, to taste the honey from your bunny - I mean - pretty, wet pussy would be HEAVENLY - to say the least and a feast fit for a Queen or King as the case may be! HE! HE! GOOD LUCK in the contest! IF you ask me - this is the winner of a Shiny, Gold Trophy along with some extra AP BUCKS that oe can never have too much of! WORTHY OF A STANDING O - naturally!
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


  • starwing
    April 12, 2006
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    you should be a pron writer ...this was hot hot hot.... sex..what a driving force it is... well..I need to find my hubby now...LOL...peace..shzoosy


  • MrSaucyBanter
    April 12, 2006
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    never thought i'd actually be offended by something like this, i am, no more erotica for me, my experience begins and ends here.


  • sarajaneUK
    April 12, 2006
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    Hi Elfin....it says...into my gaping pussy..... and always has... so im a little clueless! sj


  • Elfin
    April 12, 2006
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    Hi Sarajane, in stanza 5 of your poem it say "Into my gaping bunny". I don't know what word has had to be changed, but that is the bit I was meaning. Val.

  • sarajaneUK
    April 12, 2006
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    Hi Elysium, ty for reading and commenting. Am pleased you enjoyed, and I too had my doubts about the manicured nails. I have changed it, ... Perfect nails digging ... It does sound much better too. Thank you


  • sarajaneUK
    April 12, 2006
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    Ty Elfin for reading and commenting. What's a bunny thing?? sj

  • Poetic-Artistry75
    April 11, 2006
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    muy sexy!!!!

    yup yup thats sensual and very good i like it alot, i really must read more erotica


  • darell
    April 11, 2006
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    Thrilling

    Oh Yeah!!! The sexual experience of twin lover expressed
    with excitement and sensually charged creativity.
    Like a rollercoaster this poem took you on a wonderous
    journey. Filling the minds imagination with plenty of
    sultry and erotic chills and thrills! Wow wow wow weeee!!!
    Very Hot! Extremely Passionate! Sizzling! Great work!


  • Heart Sutra
    April 11, 2006
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    Well, it is certainly sexy and to the point. LOL. Especially all the erect hardness of it wide open. A particular nirvana for sure. I love human sexuality because it is full of variety and expression. We can't really know what dogs or cats are thinking in their sexual proclivities. LOL. And, probably don't want to, but humans can write about it, paint it out, make movies of it, write songs for it...I mean humans can take their sexuality to all sorts of intellectual and emotional places, as your poem lends itself to.

    Maybe you might consider though replacing or removing the words "manicured nails." It was the only place where it seemed contrived and seemed to take away from the overall piece. But that is just my opinion, so you can take it or leave it.

    Great erotica! Good luck in the comp.

  • Elfin
    April 11, 2006
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    This is fabulous, a real turn on. Don't like the Bunny thing in stanza 5, wish you could have managed without it, but otherwise the rest is FAB. good luck in contest and well done. Val.


  • sock monkey
    April 11, 2006
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    Exotic according to me. Very nice, so much description of movement and lust. You got a great sex poem here, it's HOT!


  • MsPoetPixy
    April 11, 2006
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    Hmmm interesting choices of words....nicely written.


  • raingoddess gold member
    April 10, 2006
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    This is not only a turn on for the guyd, it is for the girls as well, great write.

  • Blended Souls
    April 10, 2006
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    Very very sexy!!! Sensual is acceptable! Sensual is a turn on! We think you did very well with this piece and we wish you the best of luck in the contest!!

  • Revwilliamfoos
    April 10, 2006
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    lovedt this pice i hope you did not have to pay much for the lavander lace may be you got it a a jumble sale or something i just do not like it when my close are riped off keep writing
    love the papa

  • Canovash
    April 10, 2006
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    Any sexier than that you'd be writing in Penthouse or Playboy. God damn it i'm gonna applause this with one good hand atleast capable to work the mouse. Well done!

  • ea silver member
    April 10, 2006
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    oo la la, sarajane to the rescue!


  • Phed
    April 10, 2006
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    Yummy!


  • KnightRhymer
    April 9, 2006
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    Sensual or erotic, this was wonderful. The imagery of this piece, left no doubt as to what passions were bared. Besides, it was hot. Great Job, Sara. Well done.

  • Swtpoetryman
    April 9, 2006
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    Made me hard faster than supperman can runa n

    NOW that's what I call NIRVANA, indeed! AHHHHHHHHH!!! to be covered with such sweet honey would mak me buzz louder than a happy HONEY BEE flyin from fragrant flower to fragrant flower! this looks like a real contest winner to be me and mad me harder than i have been for a long, long time in no time flat which is a true measure of it's eroticism! A SWEET TREAT (in more ways than one) and a VERY SENSUAL PIECE, Hon!
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • annamoy
    April 9, 2006
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    Ah, the memories!!! Great write, I enjoyed this and good luck in contest.

    Ann

  • Uriah Hamilton
    April 9, 2006
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    Hot!

    Boy is this hot!!!

  • Kandied Kisses
    April 9, 2006
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    Bravo

    Well done Sara, an erotic write indeed. The intense passion in which this was penned left me with the "scent of him". Bravo...xxkandixx

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