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BEFORE YOU READ THIS
I suggest that my Scottish poems are read in the following order to unravel the story and meaning behind them, as it will clarify certain things regarding the thinking and heredity involved and as these have been written as a series and have a definite order. Seeds of Time allpoetry.com/poems/1928938
The Pipers allpoetry.com/Poem/1909921
The Battle of the Pipers allpoetry.com/poems/1934996
The Piper's Last Call.allpoetry.com/Poem/1945742
THIS POEM HAS BEEN REWRITTEN AND CAN BE FOUND ON THE FOLLOWING LINK.
allpoetry.com/poem/1998435 IT HAS BEEN RENAMED PIPERS INTO BATTLE. Hope you enjoy it.
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Author notes
Part of a seemingly ongoing dream. It seems like there is still more left.
Written April 9th, 2006
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Comments
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I can not comment on the other pieces of the series you have, Poet, but this one stood out on its own merits. Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
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It would be easier on teh contests that you entered if you were to just add the revised version instead of going though that.
I caught a glimpse of it and read it, its very well writen
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you couldve just entered the rewrite instead, it be easier if i were to consider it for the finals, i did check it out though, got to say great write, you definitly have great talent, thanks for entering - Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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I have heard the pipes until the sound remained etched permanantly in memory. They have a place in time and they do cast a spell of strength and moral fortitude. Thank you for sharing this with so many.
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i cannot comment on the write until i click on the link but as i see that my friend Kenny has read and enjoyed it i am sure that i will also
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The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I really appreciate this work. I hope you continue writing because I would love to see what else you have to offer. You paint a rich picture with this pallet of words taking us along enveloping us in the feeling and emotion that pores from each line. very captivating in your choice of words. I liked the overall theme of this poem.
I thought it had a nice flow and feeling to it. Great message in this poem. Thought provoking, Imaginative, and I loved your creative imagery. Your carefully chosen words painted a picture as I read your poetic work of art. I am glad I read it. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always -
Gutter Princess Thank you Charlene for being the only person out of 10 (Featured poem) who took the time to comment in the spirit of this site. I also wish to thank you for your kind words and am glad you enjoyed it. There are many others and I hope that you will find some that you enjoy too.
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awesome
I really like the description here, it made me appreciate something I've never witnessed. Very well written, and a great flow. Thanks for writing. I can't wait to read more. Love and Peace
Charlene
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urehooked Thanks Kenny for your applause and comment. We seem to be on similar levels of inspiration but you have the advantage of first hand local knowledge. I wish I had that !! I have another 'dual version' of one of the Pipers poems in mind for tomorrow. Thanks again mate.
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Excellent
Yet another excellent poem from you my friend,and every word written all so true.I'm proud of you my man.Keep up the great work.Kenny -
ask261,thank you for such a perceptive and sensitive comment and I am so glad you enjoyed it. I have other ancestry in the english lowlands but nothing comes to me of that. I have not had a male blood relative that lived past early adulthood for several hundred years and it makes me wonder if these genetic feelings come from that side. Maybe it is because I am a dreamer .. whatever .. it is enjoyable to give the mind free reine and see what comes forth for I never know in advance, except certain little visions that keep reappearing .
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This was so sad, yet beautiful! I love how you incorporated Loch Lomond and the battle for the Scottish king! You have told the story the way I would have wanted to hear it first. You have brought much beauty, sadness, hope, and fear for the soldier whose fate awaits him. Keep up the great work and keep writing! I guess I should read the poem that I missed reading!
By the way, thanks for everything!
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Elfin. Thank you for your comments and I appreciate your taking the time to do so. I am of Scottish descent (long ago)and if you can read the following poems in the order shown it will explain my "series" which makes more sense. I am considering putting a note to this effect on each poem so that there is less confusion re my ancestry. I am glad you mentioned it because it was in the back of my mind to clarify the Sottish bit where I am generally know as an Aussie. The poems 'Seeds of Time' explains the whole thing. Thanks a lot, mate.
Barry
Seeds of Time allpoetry.com/poems/1928938
The Pipers allpoetry.com/Poem/1909921
The Battle of the Pipers allpoetry.com/poems/1934996
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Bazza, I thought that I had commented on this piece of work before but obviously not and I don't know why. If this is truly a dream then you must pursue it, Scotland is more beautiful than you can imagine, especially the Highlands. Are you of Scottish descent? Val.
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Thank you Puppydog, I am glad you liked it and took time to comment. I hope you have a pleasant Easter break.
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WONDERFUL
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Hello Di hope all is well with you. Thankyou for your comment and I am pleased you liked it. Regards,
Barry -
Hi. a nice wee tale to tell around the fire, liked this a lot, all the best, yes it would be nice to see a follow up, all the best, Di
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Angel w o Wings, thanks for the applause and comment and I hope that I see Ireland before I pass on, but you have given me an idea to write about it from an outsider's viewpoint. The Scots poems are true feelings which I cannot explain, and the history is true too.
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Well, it is number 3 as the two before it are of the same vein and feeling. Thank you for taking the time to read it and comment. Hope all is well. Have to be careful it does not lose interest though but there is more left in me.
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Nice work!
I'm Irish, but I loved it anyway. I Could hear bag-pipes off in the distance.
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As the dream progresses you can add on to this and it might become an epic eventually - good write - images vivid and realistic.
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Hi a very good descriptive poem I liked it a lot the colour was blinding but it did not distract from your poetry do read one of mine if you get time try " Imagine if you can " if the feeling takes you i will look at more of your later
thank you
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I like it. Very much. Descriptive; flows well; and the Pipes...yes. BRAVA!
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I loved the descriptiveness of this piece. It was like I was reading a story. I could picture this in my mind. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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Yes, I love the skirling of the bagpipes. I clicked on this because of the word "Pipers" in the title and am not disappointed to read a piece on Scotland. Yay!
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Rufina Caraid Hi Von thanks a million for your comment, applause and history. There seems more left in me and so I am going to research it further so that this time I don't make the few minor historical ones I did, so i hope they don't get boring.
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Barry my first thought was a former life - a soldier fighting in the Battle of Colloden against the English in 1745.their tactics of course were unknown to the Scottish clans gathered on the Moor. Instead of each confining himself to his mmediate opponent, the english soldier thrust with the bayonet at the adversary of his right-hand man, piercing them in an unprotected area. sorry I'm talking too much but your poem excited me very much and whether it be a dream or not it was well described, with a fever pitch close by, but also a hint of poignancy and sadness.
I enjoyed very much.
Von -
brilliant
i like the way the poem unfolded and the imagery portrayed an amazing journey for me...thoughts of friends from the highland country and battles for freedom one very nice write thank you -
very nicely written, told well and dreamt sounds good to me also..let the ink roll and penn on my friend..thanks for sharing and good luck..
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this was an excellent piece, well well done and the flow of it was amazing, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry......
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I think this is a most excellent piece! Thank you so much for sharing, my friend!!!
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This was really descriptive and I liked it... I don't know what people are talking about with the spelling and stuff- who cares??? I just can't stand it when people pay attention to the spelling errors, rather than paying attention to the real deal- the ideas, the creativity, and the originality. People totally miss the main elements of the poem- same goes for stories. Anyway
This was really good. I like the imagery a lot. Keep dreaming! You earned my applaud!
Keep it real
-Tyler
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Oh, and another thing - I'm sure it's dreamed, and not dreamt!
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Excellent poem.
Just one slight criticism - the half-rhyme filter and heather.
A better rhyme would be for the heather to "dance a-kilter"
Have the clap!
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Well, this passion of yours burns on--only one way to satisfy this yearning and you know what that is, try and visit the highlands. I went up to Edinburgh--beautiful charming place and well worth the visit. As always you have penned this poem straight from the heart with much feeling. A beautiful and well crafted piece of work. excellent.
shaz xx
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xolovinlifeox Thank you for the comment and I am glad you enjoyed it. You will see some links above in one of my replies to a few others in this series. thanks again.
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wow this is awsome, it has so much heart
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Elfin, thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment on my work. I have fixed one mistake but skirl will take a little time tomorrow. Tht word was in my mind but I could just not retrieve it ..honestly. If you look on my reply to Mairi's comments, you will see links to a few others on similar veins (all Pipers) and I would love your opinion too, especially if I have used a wrong tem or word.. I appreciate your friendly comments. This last poem is best read after those mentioned above. Looks like I have started a series .. as there is more inside of me.
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Hello Bazza,for someone who has never been to Scotland this poem is very good.Mairi has put you right on a few things so I don't need to go there. As a child of the jacobites who fought along with Bonnie Prince Charlie.I am very proud of my heritage,but Bazza, If you do nothing else before you die, then visit Scotland, It is the most beautiful place on earth. Well done my friend. Val.
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great work
Blue Loch Lomond languid lays far below,
Grey veiled mists in the soft sunlight filter.
Caressing breezes from a chill north blow,
As I’m mesmerized by the waltzing heather.
these are personally my favourite besides i couldnt choose. the poem was so sweet and intresting ! its descriptive and has good vacubolary ! great write ! keep it up !
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Yes I better stick to writing word brews instead of getting myseelf in the poo (cheates etc0 lol Thanks mate for reading applausing and commenting .. you are a vlaued friend.
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Thanks a million Mairi.. I have just been talking to my best friend WelshDragon and if you look it has already been changed to English lol thats great and someone mentioned skirl and I thought it applied to swirl .. like the kilts do .. I will edit both poems and fix it up.
my direct email is bazthompson@bigpond.com and if you are agreeable you can send me an email with your address. This way it gives you the option.
Bob just sent me a link to the Battle of Bannoksburg or something like that on Google and I am going to download and print it tomorrow as I am out of ink.
I will be in touch. Did you know there is another two like this it is called Seeds of Time allpoetry.com/Poem/1928938 and the first one The Pipers allpoetry.com/Poem/1909921 I hope you like them and would love your verdict. I will edit them all. -
Outstanding -- as usual
Again and again
Everytime when
You come through
With a new
Bazza word-brew
It always seems to
Be from you
A special brew
A Masterful Poetry Coup!
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Bazza, if you wish to know anything more about Scottish history, then I'm your girl. I have a passion for it - drop me an IM. Mind, you might get a few surprises.
I was fascinated by this poem. I liked it very much. Could I caution you against using the term "British" in this context, by the way - it's trifle wrong for the historic period.
Och - and laddie, the pipes dinnae "wail", they skirl!
Alba gu brath
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Excellent ,i enjoyed this poem completelty.Vivdly described
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Bob, thanks for the applause and comment and I must admit that your comments bring more joy to me than most because I know you are sincere. I had so many comments from the first one that one young guy wrote about the Scottis wars around Loch Lomond and I could only write about the little I knew but I will resaerch it further because the song 'I'll be in Scotland before You' etc with the high road being heaven etc stirred me up to the point of writing that before I researched it.. blazes I rave on .. sorry mate ..
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Excellent write, most colouful imagery. I really Like the piece as a whole. Its a subject that has obviously become dear to you. Another story extremely well told, with good flow, and rhythm. I'll send you a link to a similar piece, dedicated to me, by the poetess Moonling. Well penned my freind. Nice to see you back in the saddle !
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Dear Barry, another wonderful poem on the dreams that you're having, Oh yes I believe you are psychic and your great grandpa is giving you the information. It's a wonderful tale you have told keep going with it and share your dreams with us.
Hugs Joan
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There is still a bit of Scotland left in me. Those Scots were on my Grandmother's side and they settled in New Zealand and I know it is strange but i often break into a Kiwi accent .. I hear it come out and am always surprised. Amongst other things I am supposed to be physchic ... and no rude commenst or you wont get your Brownie Points ... It is easier to get a trophy on this site ... provided you join the right group !!lol.. Thanks for the applause and comments xoxox
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Bazza, these dreams you are having...seem to be telling you something and are driving you to write about it. Are you sure your house is not built upon a Scottish soldiers grave? Better look and check. lol
Grasping for your sword and it is not there, isn't that the way dreams always are? "Raw emotions escape my lips a stifled cry"....I am sure war is truly like this for there is really no time for tears they must be stifled. War is never beautiful and if one takes a good hard look at it, it IS gory and ugly and animalistic. I think you have described it well. But war will always take place for it is the nature of man. Very well done on this one and I hear those bagpipes piping while reading.
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ha ha ha not being a Scot ... but honestly ..it was that word that prompted me to write this one but the thread grew in a different and more sombre direction. I will join if you would like me to as that would be an honour. What do I have to do ??
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Great stuff
I would love you to come to Winklings, Barry, with these stirring historical ballads. We lack that. Think about it deeply. We are a friendly mob. I thank you for this stirring literary ballad. Enjoyed it thoroughly except I expected to see the word "skirl". lol. Cheers, Ron.
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WONDERFUL POEM
Wow Barry, Another breathtaking poem with beautiful imagery of your great great grandpa's homeland. Your talent shines through as usual. I love the stories you weave so well throughout your poems. A pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy
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Enjoy My sweet see you alter xoxoxo
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hi dearest daddy.I was just here to send a message that saw your new poem;so couldn't help reading and commenting on it.
This is a lovely piece,full of your true love for a land that you even didn't see that personally.
Love you daddy,
I'm off to lunch.
Shahrzad
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Quietport Thank you for reading and commenting and there are a few more just before this one on my Author's page. Hope you enjoy.
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I love this poem!!!!! Excellent!!!
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