Yesterday as I was walking through the old town square
I saw a man with cool squinted eyes
like slivers of blue mica shimmering beneath pools of water,
hair black as ink and glimmering
in the searchlight of the sun,
and a lean powerful body, muscles calling out
from beneath denim and jersey.
He stood in front of the French restaurant
bathed in delicious aromas and the pale light
that leaked from the open door.
I stopped to watch him unhinge the glass display case
and place a new menu inside, rich with calligraphy.
He was a craftsman with gifted hands
and I could feel his fingers moving over the cold fonts,
warming them, touching the arched letters he had penned.
I wanted to live among those letters,
feel my flesh, cold and untouched as a fish
beneath a pool of undisturbed water,
warm to the caress of his fingertips
as his muscled calligraphy swam against my arched skin.
I wanted to feel the pleasure of his craftsmanship
make me churn until my ache outlasted the sun
and I burned in the ashy silver moonlight.
Author notes
Written April 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- Show Me by StarGrrl.
300 points, ended April 10, 2006, 2 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This poem just brightened my day after along day at work and bad poetry...the imagery and the use of black ink hair and the later mention of calligraphy is very well crafted.
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You're amazing, this read better the 2nd time around, I love it, what can I say. Hope all is well!
-Timothy
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A slice of life poem beautifully done. You recreate the scene, and the feelings inspired by it with such truth and intensity. It is good to be reading with again, you are one of my favorites for your honesty and skill handling lust. Well, that word for some has a negative connotation. Certainly not with me. It is a big chunk of our lives..
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Superb is not nearly enough to award this awesome write. I loved every verse, and the last stanza was amazing, how you described his touch, his hands, and how you longed to be a part of his universe. Brilliant!
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whoa! now that's called obsessed!! but in this poem.. i like how you carried out your idea. sometimes you do feel that way, like you want to be a part of something and just dissolve into it. you appreciate other's art so much that you feel it's a part of you. it's wonderful, yet sad that it can't really be carried out. I just totally love the desire you have put forth in the last stanza. it's mysterious and makes the reader inquisitive.... as if to be a part of that caligraphy oneself!
calligraphed with gold! beautiful poem with lovely vivid imagery and very deep and strong emotions! please keep penning!
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Very nice indeed.
I was drawn to this as I have just done a collab. entitled
Calligraphy.
good luck in the contest. ~ crisstiena
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Sensually Sensational
Well, you certainly achieved the objective of the contest !!! I could picture each phrase as I read it. A simple moment in time, immortalized with your talented pen. Very sensual and exciting. Thank you for a wonderful read. -
*laughs* This was pretty good. Well, all up until the part about the fish. That kind of threw the ending off a bit. It seems weird and out of place in something so delicate.
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Descriptive~yes!...the lustre is portrayed for the passion,
giving a colourful light! It is clear you appreciate art!
Well done on Descriptiveness! Cheers Kaz. -
Interesting style that you have. Your words are very tantamount to what you are saying. It will be also interesting to see you progress. Tony.
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I loved how you took a moment in time..and immortalized it with your write... one wonders what would've happened if your eyes had met... this was fantastic... peace..shzoosy
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nicely done
VEry interesting and descriptive piece. Well done piece of write. I lvoe the way you made the words flow and made me feel them. It was something I havent felt with any other write as so far. LOL Please keep up the good write. Good luck to you in this contest.
God Bless
Victoria -
Very descriptive indeed, like the use of words, and the picture perfect poem you paint with your gift for imagery! Thanks for sharing you, please keep on penning on, this I enjoyed!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver~ -
Very good
Nice work, dreamy, gentle, sunshine-warm. -
beatiful!
You did a great job! I could see this scene unfold before my eyes and feel the intensity of your feelings. -
very descriptive poetry, femme. you've always been a craftsman at painting rich imagery and making the word picture on the page come to life in the mind's eye.
and I'm really impressed with your style here. quite different from what I usually see from you. very good.! I like it.
I wish you good luck in the contest. this should do really well.
~travis
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Well dayum...
That was Outstanding!
You took me out of my element
and brought me into your words...
Very few people manage to do that.
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oh wow.....that definetely brought images to mind with each line. i love it.
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