I must have gained
20 lbs
in my dreams.
Truffles snuffled by pigs
in blankets,
on a leash,
snout routed
bulbs
in chocolate dump.
There I was:
Infinity Annual
Overeaters’ Convention."
I saw her mink’s
thin nose, beady eyes,
claws of indecision.
She appealed:
"Can y’all
listen up please?"
"Life’s no cream puff
with PI
up to your eyes;
at every tangent
petitions signed,
cosigned;
but the Mud goes,
yes Mississippi,
right to your thighs."
The food was so good
& no pasta
until a slice
of self-control
slung the box open,
exposed like a salad
under spaghetti
whose straps I
tossed thereafter
in the street.
Author notes
I went for the food category; the compulsion of undereating.
I will try to write another entitled "Oh Doctor" something about cod livers if I get a chance.
Written April 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- dear. we must eat the liver. sweet as june. we must. dear. by jaunty pill.
300 points, ended June 20, 2006, 52 entries
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hehe! I love how you write
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k so it's been a while.
well this really is humorous to me, since i am working with someone right now who did the fast for lent (i would have died because i'm always so hungry) and the metaphors rolling off each other are awesome, just boom boom boom. good images. -
You have excellent descriptions in your poetry. I like the simplistic style of layout mixed with the raw punch of words. You convey a true sense of horror mixed with these danity words and discussion around food.
I have known many people in my life that have struggled with various sides of this food/weight issue. Some have had the over eating and bulimic struggles, some have had the under eating and aneroxic experiences. To some extent every single woman I have known, and a few men, have really had a hard time with their body image albeit too big or too little.
It is interesting in the US, as a culture that has plethora of food choices, as well as cosmetic ones, we seem to have the most problems with our body image and food/weight proportions.
Good luck to you in the contest!
This is a great poem on a number of levels and lends itself to a fantastic discussion.
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wonderful read, the flow from the tip of the tongue when vocalized is...well, fun. i'd love to hear you read this poem, the beat flowing right into the catchy little punch lines, i can only imagine the crowd's reaction. if you read ner pittsburgh, pa, let me know.
oh yeah, way to carry the theme through, it's easy to get lost when the words just flow like this one does. -
I will be looking for " oh doctor ".
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I love this and it shows me exactly why I have always admired your talent from a distance. Your short bursts of imagery , Blazing with texture , Senses , A poetic hunger of the most appealing design. I especially got wrapped up in the last two lines of your opening stanza..." snout routed bulbs in chocolate dump ". That is so good you can almost taste it. I must say also that some of this made me so hungry , Like watching the chip truck go by and wishing you had some wise popcorn , Etc.
And on another note , I can also see the bigger picture. There is a darker side to your imagery. My half-sister on my fathers side was underweight for awhile and was afraid if she ate as much as an extra bowl of cereal that she would gain 15 pounds. Even if it was fat and sugar free. I think at a certain point people start to brainwash themselves. They don't understand that half the world is worried about what everyone else is doing and therefore , They miss the things and issues that are right in front of them.
I also enjoyed the use of direct talking in the poem , Also a nice breath of air to come in contact with in this contest. I have been reading you often on the weekends when I get out of an afternoon class , Etc...And I must say , It is always your work that mixes something up inside the bowels of poetry that can be looked upon from so many different lights. You deal with an issue so visually , But it can be seen through a larger pin hole.
Your talent is admirable and brilliant.
All the best and good luck in my contest ,
James
Edited on Apr 08, 5:01 p.m. because ''.
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