sitting by the mesmerizing sea
hair blowing in the breeze
running my fingers in the sand
drawing pictures with my hands
the loving sun crisps my skin
as I lay down and let it drink me in
laying bare as the day I was born
waiting for the arrival of a loving one
the sea creeps to kiss my toes
oh the sensation now I'm aroused
feeling the splendor of natures ways
this is the time where heaven opens its gates
hugging and kissing me
the power of the sun
the sea teases my body
making me cecum
deeper and deeper in to ecstasy
My body and soul are setting free
reaching my climax
oh how I yearn
the power of nature
and longing of the sun
nature the capturer
my body the slave
lapped up by lovers waves
grabbing my towel
I rise to my feet
naked I walk along the sea
Author notes
I think my mind ran away with it self
Written April 8th, 2006
Stardust100
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Wow! that was good. it has a really nice flow to it and everything. i like the line hugging and kissing my body the power of the sun the sea teases me. wow! great job. keep up the great work!
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Wow,
this is beautiful.
I'm not big on nature or rhyme, but this is such a nice change! It's refreshing.
I love the lines :
hugging and kissing me
the power of the sun
so pretty.
Well done, a truly enjoyable read.
ElectricBloom -
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Very much appreciated! Glad you liked x
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WOWWWINGLY AMAZING way to incorporate Nature as seducing your bodies lust....
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Wow! I don't think I've ever read a poem like this before! Nature and love, mixed together - and it actually works. I really like that. Good job!
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that was so good. good luck on the contest
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Oh Wow this is really great,
i loved this write a lot,
just an amazing piece of powerful poetry
yes you mind ran away with itself,
but you sure took a lot of us with you.
honestly this is truly very beautiful.
great job and thanks for sharing
joyce
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LOL Sometimes it's good to let your mind run away for a little while ;-) This is certainly a unique piece. I liked that this could be taken quite literally, that this scene could happen as shown, but also that it can all be taken as metaphor for sex with a lover you feel strongly for. Pretty language, really nice ideas...I think this turned out really good :-)
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Your mind may have ran away but it took me with it. This is very very good! A wonderful read so much imagery penned. Great job. You have a lot of talent.
Jeannie D
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i did get the impression that you ment 'let go'..thats why i though of Succumb meaning "surrender" or "give in"
anyway, have a great nite
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lol I know what you mean thanks for comments i think th eword is spelt differently it means let go. thanks for your comments glad you liked it
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oh my god..this poem is amaizng...the slight randomness, the emotion, the innuendo, the sheer amazing talent that you have in poetry..
this poem, unlike your others does seem to have a more set out rhyming style, and it suits the poem very well...
"hugging and kissing me
the power of the sun
the sea teases my body
making me cecum"
..great paragraph...
but what does teh word cecum mean... do u mean succumb.. i must say... the first time i saw it..i thought u wrote 'cum'.. and i was thinking to myself... "didnt know the sun had that effect" lol
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thanks sweetie means a lot glad you liked it
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Amazing!
Oh My Gosh! AWESOME!!!! Wow, you did an excellent job with this, i applaud!!! It leaves alot of room for the mind to take over and just imagine and fantacize!! Well great write, im glad i got to read it, keep it up!!
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wow thank you so much for your comments they mean a lot
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I think your mind ran away with itself as well...LOL. Nice write anyway...I really liked this line: "laying bare as the day I was born", I think it has something sweet about it. Keep it up and thanks for sharing. Take care. =)
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Thank you so much that means a lot I quite enjoyed writing this piece glad you liked it.
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Thank you for your comments they are very much appreciated as always. Glad you like this piece
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Oh my goodness, I don't know if your mind ran away with itself, but whatever happened, it was something good! This poem is so creative, it's just awesome, I was perplexed while reading it. It just made me feel, I don't know, but this is a very well-written, very creative poem, and I'm not sure what happened if your mind really did run away, but what I do know is you have major talent, and you are a very skilled poet! Once again, great write!
Wish You The Best,
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this is quietly romantic in its sensuality, the metaphorical rolling waves of innuendo being reduced to participating ripples, one can feel the sensation as the encrouch into personal territory, the warming sun ensuring a lovely glowing picture, a lovely poem, well done, Broad
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Thank you so much your comments are much appreciated glad you liked it so much x x x
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WOW The ability to paint such vivid imagery...you are blessed! This was a very beautiful write and eloquently penned. Keep up the great work.
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Thank you so much for your comments glad you liked it thank you for your applause it means a lot.
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wow...this most certainly is a wonderful poem. the different types of imagery and the sensations you create through your words are absolutely incredible. the subject in which you touch on of lust and nature and the natural human body and pleasures i think is awesome, i applaud you for thinking of the subject and capturing it so well. write on.
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lol relaxing
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a very nice read, beautifully penned. This piece has lots of great imagery. An enjoyable piece.
Rory -
I think I should just get my kit off and head for the coast
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thank you so much for your comments they mean a lot I love this poem it a happy one
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nicely done
this takes me back to when i lived at the coast and enjoyed many visits to the sea loved the imagery and has a nice feel and flow to your words yeah and to walk naked along the sands at dusk brilliant... -
Thank you so much that means a lot Glad you liked it and felt you were there it was a pleasure to write
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As I was reading it, I could just feel myself being at the beach just as you described it.. You are so talented keep up the awesome work.. I felt it had a great flow to it also.. very beautiful work here..
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lol sorry hunny I just write whats in my mind
Thanks for your comments
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very cool...(and hot)...
wow, star..you have some brilliant lines in here. and the whole thing is...once again, some kind of wonderful mystery (damnit - lol). no, but seriously..wow! sensual imagery..
so well done, sweetie. so well done.
you rock!!! ...
....wml......Lionslove (goddamn mysteries...crap . lol)...
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I will change font thanks for comments much appreciated
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A good piece of poetry. I wouldn't mind heading off into the sea for a splash and a swim right now. A little hard to read the font, I had to highlight to actually read your poem.
Edited on Apr 08, 5:13 because ''.
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