I am a deep royal blue
Curls and ringlets, slants
And drips
I shake my hips
And the page wiggles
He starts to read
And I plant a seed of curiosity
Word by word
Stroke by stroke
I sing for him in cursive
I doodle in the margin
An elusive spring
A thirsty flower, the art of lusting
As the tip of my pen
Spreads its wings and flies
Brushing rhymes against my thigh
Teasing hem from line
And parting
Crossing the borders of his mind
Until I’m vivid and defined
The paper lifts
As if it comes alive
And he smells my perfume
Like the mist of morning
In the heat of july
As I write him
The smooth touch of my skin
Pressing against his
With the ink of my pen
And my tongue
This is a poem
Unbuttoned
Undressed
It curves and slants and drips
Down the page
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Written April 8th, 2006
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Excellent! A great piece of work.
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OMG! THIS IS FANTASTIC! You are hands down a genius in the world of words. My dream is to become a great poet some day. Its all i could ever desire! I read such incredible work like this and I fall to my knees! plEASE DO MY THE HONOR OF ADMIRING my work and let me know what you think!
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GOLD!
I believe you have done a masterly write here. It's not only seductive but displays some of the intoxicating secrets usually unspoken.
EXCELLENT!
What a gift!
Sol
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.
~ w
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this is really light and hard to rea
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finally!
Finally, an adult who speaks and knows as an adult the world around her/himself. The tease is nice, but the sentiments, the mastery of technique, is far more seductive. The final stanze takes me where I have been trying to go all week--finally, I have been made to read and read once more. Thank you.
Now, what I do not feel comfortable with, the lines: Painting rhymes across my thigh
Gusting up my skirt
Between the lines....
Sure, "gusting," but with so much at woprk hear, this word lets me down, and does so fast!Brushing rhymes against my thigh,
teasing hem from line
and parting. . .
Okay, enough. But you see that I would like a bit more play here. This is the weakest stanza of a very strong work. HOw can it possible stand and take me to that final stanza (and I truily love those last lines)? It cannot, I think--but it should? NO?
PS) Do I think you could have played more on the seductive aspect of words? Yes, of course. Is this the proper arena for such bold expressions? Well, I am not exactly the persona to ask.
Jim
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I almmost deleted that stanza completely, might still do that, it reads better i think without it... hmmm
great input, i really appreciate it. thanks so much,
~ w
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You do seduction so very well. This was almost like tracing you with ink and words... much to envision, with just enough to keep the readers wanting more. Loved it!
Prince
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excellent and appetizing
This is Wendy. Delectable excellent vivid poem.
The words each a treat for mind and imagination...
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Bravo!
Normally I find these types of poems boring, because they leave nothing to the imagination. But, in this case, you have penned it in such a way that there is at least a hint of interesting imagery, or at least brief flashes of it anyway. Very nicely done my dear fellow poet. ~PeacE~GarY~ -
left me speechless
Great write, deffinelty twisted the ink and drove one crazy as they seem to say around here. Awesome write. Well done, I just dont know what to say. The style, unique, the form, well done, just wonderful. I dont have a clue as to what to say. Dawn -
superlative!
Oh, this is a very impressed and aroused comment. The fingers are all sweaty as they caress the keyboard. The pulses of energy moving through the wires are ecstatic as they bring these keystrokes to you. What great fun! -
amazing
i love it and applaud thee -
great!
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Wow, wow, wow, This is outstanding: "He starts to read
And I plant a seed of curiosity
Word by word
Stroke by stroke
I sing for him in cursive" what a descriptive stanza, beautifully written keep up the excellently seductive work...Scott -
Very well written
I doodle in the margin
An elusive spring
A thirsty flower, the art of lusting
As the tip of my pen
Spreads its wings and flies
This reminds me of how I write. I like the way you added elements of writing to your sexual fantasies. it's nice to see poetry that has love/nature qualities like this one, honestly, I loved it.
GOD BLESS,
Carino -
Most wonderfully and awesomely written; very much enjoyed this piece
Thank you for sharing -
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Good use of word-play here, Wendy. Very evocative -- I think your muse must be somewhat breathless, too
Love
Myra
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APPLAUSE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I do believe there is more to this than just an attraction. You did a great job. Loved the last stanza. Well written and very hotttt...
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Oh My god... what a poem... I envy you because I have always wanted to write something like this! I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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It's settled then, I've fallen in love with you. It's your own fault, really. I am simply at a loss for words in the presence of yours.
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damn this is good,,as if he were the paper reacting to your pen---this poem reminds me of denise levertov---one of the beats, who wrote such sexy pieces, yet matter of fact--
i love metaphor and this is very clever in its use,,,
by the way,,,in your bio page,,love the galeway kinnell piece,,i am very fond of him,,,in my poetry life,,grew up with the beats,,,first modern american poetry class in 1970---studied most of them--creeley, ginsberg, ferlinghetti, sexton, etc...and levertov was one of my favs,,,nice reminder here,,now off to read more of you,,
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yes,yes,yes...
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Awesome
The world explodes these days with tools for us Disciples of Communication - with the use of which you inspire and delight, your words as the title so accurately describe, form Art with a capital 'A' . . . so work your magic, leave us hang on every word, grow dizzy with excitement for what where your words can take us and deliver us into temptation in biblical fashion...
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it spreads like the very word
it seeks to conquer
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wonderfully seductive! no one mixes literary and sensual as skillfully as you do wendy. I LOVE this!
~travis
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Amazing!!!!wow wonderful write! The flow was wonderful.
This is beautiful, lovely.
very sensual and very well written
I love this poem. Great work, absolutely fabulous.
Loved the rhyme and the form too
thanks for the read and keep penning -
... and you would know :-) thank you !
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One of your best seductive poems I've read from you, and you write a lot of them.
Good stuff, Wendy.
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Wow.
This is awesome. I felt alive when I was reading it, It is wonderfully written and you can see theres more to it then just attraction. Its amazing. -
Wonderful personification of a poem you have penned here - make it seem to easy, like there is nothing to it. Really a very creative poem - flows well and reads well when read out loud.
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Oh my god you are so good, I honestly can't believe how well this poem was written! I am sooo jealous of you right now, lol! Just keep writing poetry as good or even half as good as this and I'll be happy for the rest of my life...gosh! I cannot get over that! You're doing really great things with your talents, and I know it's cliche but keep it up, ok? Love always, Jaime.
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brilliant
brilliant and so very true poems do this and then some....nice flow and feel just one very good write.
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