Screaming, Shouting
Shaking, Crying
Don’t give in
Keep on trying
Spinning, Aching
Blackness, Falling
Don’t look at it
The blade is calling
Scared, Coughing
Gasping for breath
ANYTHING but cutting
There’s no option left
Stare at the blade
DON’T give in
It’s Unproductive
You. Will. Not. Win.
Noise gets louder
Internal sounds
Endless, deafening,
Round and round
Clenched Fists
Shoulders shake
Oh no STOP IT
You had to break
Quick, grab
Cut, slice
Press
Scream
Blood
Nice…
Instant Silence
Relaxed, calm
Sinking disappointment,
Stupid self harm.
Author notes
Contest: picture link, http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs22/300W/f/2007/342/3/1/Darka__Cutting_by_sonar_ua.jpg
A contest entry
- Make me feel dark and emotional. Lots of options!! by Kia Tenshi.
600 points, ended December 13, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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My favorite lines are "Stare at the blade. DON'T give in" It reminds me of so much.
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I really like the way you wrote this poem with these short, almost hasty sounding lines. It has a nice touch to the feelings you're creating for the reader!
Well done - I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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awwwww well we have this in common! cutting is horrible and once you start ya can't stop, but recently i've been steady with the best guy in the world and the cutting has stopped! you gotta be strong and not fall in to the dangerous temptation! great poem!
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this is a really great poem i liked the rhyming and the short sentences they work really well. i was hooked to this from the begining, and i too share this habit.
its hard to stop once your hooked i have been trying to stop but the temptation is too much.
this was an amazing poem,
keep writing
Faithless Angel xXx -
thanks sis xxx
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Awwww meri
i know what this used to feel like, it's a really hard circle to get out of. But once you are out of it, you feel so much better.
This is really well written though, the short stanzas were really effective, i like the lines
"Quick, grab
Cut, slice
Press
Scream
Blood
Nice…" very nicely done. Keep the ink flowing hun, and i'm here to talk if you need to
xoxox
-faerie-
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