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I Speak, I Sing, I Sink

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I'm nothing but the words I speak
A curling tangerine around a shivering little spine
Drooling juicy innovations like saliva marinade
Atop a lemon-layered birthday cake
In cursive icing letters
That spell out

"I'm Still Here"

Though sometimes I'm the songs I sing
The water-colored whispers in the wind
Swaying deliciously in strawberry sin
Nodding forth through thickening fog
Slicing life apart so it can be served in edible portions
That taste like

honey-glazed sobriety

But mostly I'm the things I think
Angry little watermelon seeds
That spit themselves into red brick walls
Bitter ammunition of a similar-winking fool
That could fly as high as his words do
If they only simply realized

that they matter too

 

 

Author notes

"façades will fade like footprints on the beach the oceans seek... but underneath the shore my dear, a face is there to peek"

---me, 2006
Written April 7th, 2006

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  • Ellis gold member
    December 5, 2007
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    Excellent

    Language is it.


  • My Nemesis
    November 28, 2006

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    I love the imagery. I love the last stanza. The anger expressed as watermelon seeds....that is not an image I would ever have thought of using. It is brilliant. Great job.

  • Rainbow Eater
    August 15, 2006
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    another excellent poem.


  • MissStranger
    July 15, 2006
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    You don't need MY comments...but is your fault Don't read them,I'll just pretend I'm speaking with your poems!

  • marrow
    April 22, 2006
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    you're on a role lately. these are all "best of the bests." i also note that you are writing more frequently again. that makes me happy inside... kinda' like the whole fat kid & cake thing.

    bravo, bravo.
    justin


  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    April 21, 2006
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    You can order it on their computer system and have it sent to the store you want to buy it from. (Borders or Barnes and Noble) But they don't stock it in places I can't travel to to help it sell.


  • BloodSoakedSin
    April 21, 2006
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    I lke how you worked in the different fruit into the poem they give it a fell that Ive never read in a poem before. Can I pick up your book at Barns and Nobles? Kelsi


  • transcendental baby gold member
    April 9, 2006
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    Wonderful and imaginative way of describing that invisible spirit that hides behind the ordinary ... you display your soul in words and your life in metaphoric images ... the writer's luxary


  • stompsalot
    April 9, 2006
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    Very poignant write! I loved it. your words speak volumes. Damn this is good. I wish I could just get the words out of my head and onto the page. they would probably come out crap, but oh the release woul d be nice.
    Blessings and *stomsp


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 8, 2006
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    interesting poem you have here. very different style. and i liked it very much. seems to me that you have done a great job. glad i stopped by to read, i enjoyed this write.


  • April 8, 2006
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    Absolutely amazing! This is written from the heart and your emotions shine through. I love these lines!

    Slicing life apart so it can be served in edible portions
    That taste like

    honey-glazed sobriety

    Just wondering, how is sobriety honey-glazed? Peace be with you.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 8, 2006
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    You are all these things - and wirte them so well too. Wonderful lines filled with glorious images that tantalize the mind, great metaphors - reverse personification. Really enjoyed this one.

  • blessedbeyondbelief
    April 8, 2006
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    Self-imagery, interesting way to pen this piece...good job...Many blessings to you, keep up the good work.

  • recklessgrace
    April 8, 2006
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    I think this is a good write.....I really enjoyed reading it...keep up the great work!!!

    **reckless**

  • ocerus
    April 7, 2006
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    This is pretty good! Welcome back! - oce


  • Claide
    April 7, 2006
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    Wow. A new favorite .


  • TangerinePuddle
    April 7, 2006
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    Well well what have we here. Fruit speak trod,flatten, spring up once thrice.


  • Blind-Ambition
    April 7, 2006
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    fantabulous

    You have always been the best at turning yourself into a metaphor. I'm so glad you're writing again, have I mentioned that yet? This has great progression and perfect descriptions. The picture is amazing as well. Great write once again, you should own that contest.

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