My deepest darkest secrets...
I dance with a goddess sky-clad under a full moon
Crowing the pagan tongues of a beautiful Yule
Gifting my fingertips with an envied magick
Dancing in the shadows of a Christian denial
Lover, a dark secret...
Making love to my own passionate goddess in the flesh
Trailing kisses down her neck as I hear echoed curses in my ear
Forbidden love by naive voices telling me I'm naive, I'm swayed
Naive to my past, to the wisdom an ancient being of the goddess holds
Tendencies to hate...
I love the tyrant that holds me down with daggers painted with lies
I push myself to a sickening stressed state to please her every need
I let her drink the elixir of life from the rich blood that burns me
To hell I love her with my entire heart, but contempt weaves a trap
Trust denied access...
I don't trust anyone, but everyone trusts me
Dancing a foul game of cat and mouse with the world around me
Playing the neutral while I gain power underneath
Teaching lessons to the naive pawns, while their queens fall away
Learn from the best...
Rising power, lover of a goddess
Rebel against a tyrant queen
Witch watching in the background
Taster of the elixir called the world
Author notes
3) Write me a poem about yourself. I want to know everything that you want to tell me about yourself, and i want it in poetry form. I don't just want the basics, i want you to give me an insight into who you are and what your like. Things you love, your troubles, what makes you happy? Anything, as long as it's about you.
A contest entry
- deepest darkest secrets by JustDavey.
375 points, ended January 15, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Complexity Exchanges by 2lullabyhaven.
700 points, ended September 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Deepest Darkest Secret by Ntagatf.
500 points, ended September 6, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest about.....things and... stuff :) by Jaffa-.
550 points, ended March 28, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I really enjoyed this. I absolutly love your choice of wording, i thought it was amazing. I also loved the flow and rhythm that went throughtout the poem. Very nicely done. Thank you for your entry. xo
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Complexity does rule in this one, thanks for your entry into my contest lol
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Very good. A perfect mix of metaphor and form. It really flows well which was a pleasent suprise. I thouroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Great job and good luck in my contest.
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I really like the structure of this poem and the way it flows...very good.
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Very interesting. Some parts were very clear to me..but then some weren't. Blond moment here, but i'm not quite exactly sure on what ur secret is other then you talk about a goddess in your poem. But anyways..good job and i love the wording. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering.
Ashley -
rachel, I'm going to be honest with you, I think I understand most of this, but there is a bunch in here that I know I don't. My head is too full of music right now to even try. but I did understand that this was really, extremely well written. I liked the part about trust. 'I don't trust anyone, but everyone trusts me' I have that problem too.
-gibson
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Wow, this is amazing! This is great, i really really ,loved this poem! This is just great. Thanks so much for entering my contest! this is really just fabulous!
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Hmmm.... Intriguing. I would love to ask questions on this. It seems that happieness lies in wait for the unwary rebel? I am feeling lately that I am losing touch. If you don't mind could you update me every once and a while with an IM. I don't have internet any more,*another gift from the ruler of the house* so it has been hard. Great poem. Hope you win!
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