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My mind!

My Mind!

My Mind holds information...
My Mind searches for information
My Mind urgents searching
My Mind is a admiration
My Mind is to have aspiration
That comes from my spiritualism
That would take me into refining
My Mind designing who I am
Combining the mind of others
Reassigning only the negative
To bring My Mind only positive
For the things above
Seeking of others that cherish
The things above
Things that swings like the spring
My mind sings on beautiful things
No one can compare those wings
My Mind waits
My Mind waits for the modest day
That day My Mind will be free
Free to give me those wings
Taking away all worries
Of all the sins
My Mind will be prefect and free

                   

Author notes

I thought of making a poem about the mind... Went with how I felt so take look and let me know what you think.
Written April 6th, 2006

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  • LittleAnn
    May 4, 2006
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    I'm a bit slow today and don't get everything...
    never heard that word before... what does it mean?
    My Mind is a admiration -> what do u mean by that? don't understand... and isn't it ?

    I should come back tomorrow or whenever, read it again and write a "real" comment I think... I can't think clearly today...


  • Hidded Within
    May 4, 2006
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    nicely done. a suggestion though you could break up the poem a bit by adding , and . or just putting another enter between some of the lines. like i said though just a suggestion either way it was nicely done. thanks for sharing Peace to ya