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Cookie Crumbs (Cinquain)

Crumbled
Scattered about
Like how life can become
Don’t let your life lose its meaning
Like crumbs

Author notes

A cinquain has 5 lines and a syllable count of: 2-4-6-8-2.

I wrote this for an assignment in the class I'm in here on AllPoetry. I haven't finished the entire assignment, but this is one part of it. A simple poem with a powerful meaning.
Written April 5th, 2006

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  • Abreadcrumbandfish
    April 7, 2006
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    WOW,,Excellent write here my friend. I love this.


  • M0ofi3
    April 6, 2006
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    Smacks of wisdom, with its simplicity and straightforwardness, just as this write reveals so clearly.

    Like I said, "You'll be an awesome man!"


  • Mekhala
    April 6, 2006
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    Its really nice, I like it!


  • Vorondwen gold member
    April 5, 2006
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    Mmmm...cookies! I like the metaphore. See, I've always considered myself a "tough cookie", but even cookies crumble! And that ties right into your poem. Good job!

  • SlasherInTraining
    April 5, 2006
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    I love it...thats all I can say is I love it!


  • FireyAura
    April 5, 2006
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    wow, this is awesome! I love this form, but have never had luck with it I have never looked at crumbs like this, but I will never look at them the same way now Great metaphore! I think I really understand this one great job
    ~*Chelsea*~


  • noble1
    April 5, 2006
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    Dear son, I think you meant to use "lose" instead of "loose" in the fourth line. What a wonderful start to this assignment. Unfortunately it makes me extremely hungry for cookies!!!!

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