Angelic beauty, angelic radiance
Snug within the warmth of
All her heavenly brilliance,
Cosmically aligned,
Carefully refined,
She's perfect by design.
No clandestine mystery
Or "woe is me" philosophy,
She's the poets muse, destiny
The dreamer's fantasy.
Her every word is poetry
Perfected and personified,
In an age destined for demise
She neither runs or tries to hide.
Her every move releases me,
She's everything you'd hope to be,
Flawlessly pure of heart and mind,
She is perfect by design.
Author notes
I'm a sucker for romance, and I like to pay tributes to people that positively influence me.
Thanks for being my muse, Julz
This one's for you
Written April 5th, 2006
What did you think
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Well done.
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I'M VERY SORRY BUT I HAVE POSTED THIS CONTEST TWICE. AS A RESULT, I AM GOING TO DELETE THIS COPY OF THE CONTEST (AS IT HAS FEWER ENTRIES). I WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE IT IF YOU COULD RE-ENTER THIS POEM IN THE OTHER COPY OF THIS CONTEST.
THANKYOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR HELP! DO NOT REPLY TO THIS MESSAGE. -
well not nearly as amazing as the person that inspired it.
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WOW!!!! SO many comments
Told ya it was A M A Z I N G lol.
Great Job Hun
Again
LOL
!~Julianna~! -
another comment, i am most appreciative...thanks for dropping by.
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beautiful tribute thanks you for sharing
michele -
Are you talking about your mom. You are very caring to people in your family probably. Nice piece of work. Thanks for sharing.
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What a way to pay back such a friend/inspiration! This is one of the nicest tributes I've read! Wonderful work! Sincerely, Mary
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great job
What a wonderfully expressed sentiment for someone you obviously care so deeply for I look forward to more of your work You hold the key to her heart
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Rhyme and Rhythm in perfect harmony! Wonderful piece of writing!
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Truly a breathtaking and precious dedication...
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this one is sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo tres beautiful, i just had to read it again. seriously, bravo! i don't know if you get it, but this one seriosuly affected me in a way, it's just so darned beautiful!
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lol you didn't make my day...I'm STILL reeling, so you pretty much made my week
Thanks (Again)
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Awww! This is so sweet that you would write something so beautiful for her. Great!!! Hugs & Kisses - Cayla
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wow...this is so lovely and nice dear cousin.You've done a great job and I'm sure she'll love it.
Shahrzad
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You like? It always brightens my day, when I can brighten someone else's. Glad I could be the sweetest guy, but the credit goes to you, you inspired it...
rich
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OH MY GOD...oh my god....this is so0o0o sweet...I don't know what to say...thank you...SO much. Oh my god, you are the sweetest guys I"ve ever met, thank you!! You're a m a z i n g. I don't even know how to say "thank You" lol, the words are so smalll..
you
A thousand kiss*
a MILLION
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Awww...big bro...this is beautiful. You write swoon-worthy romance poetry. Geez, I wish I had someone who could write like that for me. I like it so much I can't even choose a favorite part!
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A Little Masterpiece
"She is perfect by design"
And this is a PERFECT POEM
A perfect tribute to her
I say, My Man, you really can
Make this lady cat purrrrr
Tiki Cat
Yes, I am a real cat
Cats are all the rage
Visit my author page
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Gprgeous write, I love the flow that the rhymes provided both as end and internal rhymes. Beautifully penned... and the lady who has had this penned for her should be thrilled and flatter
Great write. s ~genielassie~
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so very beautiful. this is an amazing write. just down right perfect. you have done an outstanding job. so lovely peaceful even, smoothing just so wonderful. an excellent job. i really enjoyed this write of yours. keep up the great work.
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Perfection is a strong word... but muses are that, at least in the eyes of the inspired. However, in this section:
No clandestine mystery
Or "woe is me" philosophy
She's the poets muse, destiny
The dreamer's fantasy
I would strongly suggest replacing "poets" with either "poet's" or "poets'" which, of course, depends on whether you wish it to be plural or singular.
I would also suggest punctuation at the ends of the lines. In my opinion, a semblance of grammar adds strength to the work. -
I really enjoyed the way the words were formatted on this write. It was allowed to breath but not hyper-ventilate. Your choice of the lines that went with the design theme were natural and not pushed to make things happen that really weren't there. Also the conveyance of affection was pure and honest not ushy gooshy. Actually, its kind of a mature romantic piece. Thanks for sharing. RC
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Beautiful view mind, may it be use by God itself. God bless you!
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How wonderfully beautiful this is! Soooo very awesome! You have an amazing talent and this is just so wonderfully written! Thank you for sharing this! I appreciated the read!
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romantic and fantastic!
oh so sweet. lovely writing! it flows so nicely and has a great rhythm to it. it could be that your subject helped you out, but this seems flawless! the rhymes do not sound forced and the emotion shines through! wonderful piece, best of luck with your writings in the future!
~love-music-darkness
"these words will fade when you explain, why you hate them..." - "saying sorry": hawthorne heights -
That was so sweet! Beautiful! Graceful and gentle and great. Wonderful job.
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this one just made me feel like i was at peace...i kind of wish i was like that...i'm too clutzy though...ha!
anyways, back to the poem, it was just simply marvelous. their was such a subtle beauty to it. i wasn't overwhelmed by it, thus i feel as if she's a good thing, not a bad thing for the rest of us to be compared to, in a sense
everything about it is so PERFECT, there's just that something about it, i don't know...i'm wish you knew what i was trying to say, but i can't put it in words...just know this, this is probably the most beautiful poem you've written that i've read, in my opinion of course
by the way, any girl you had in mind while you wrote this, because she must be one heck of a muse! lol.
love ya tons and tons babe,
nadia
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awwwww I loved this one. So romantic, and lovely flow of words. Just what I needed to read today.
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Beautiful Beyound Compare
Oh how lovely and beautiful. The flow in itself is sweet to the ears and flutters before the eyes. Your emotion drips like honey from the comb, it fills this piece so wholely. This is perfect, and just the poem to read on such a beautiful day. Please never stop penning words with ink from emotion.
Extraordinary write Love,
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Excellent
This is absolutely beautiful writing. Truly wonderful poem. You express your thought very well. Great imagination. Incredible use of words, so descriptive. I really enjoyed reading this. Keep on writing.
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