There痴 a single smiling stranger standing on the street alone,
His eyes are made of frosted glass, his heart is made of stone,
Though his hair is twisted wire and his clothes are torn and grey,
His bare footsteps are lively as they dance the day away,
Beneath his concrete armour lies a soul once thought to live,
A piece of copper heartbreak and a golden love to give,
He値l pace the tattered pavement and he値l sing his broken song,
You値l show him plastic smiles but this man痴 done nothing wrong,
He値l catch your careless money as he settles for the night,
A lonely park bench dreamer who is lost in fading light,
Come tomorrow, he値l be waiting, with a single dollar only,
And he値l spend his hard-earned money buying roses for the lonely
Author notes
In the contest "Anything, anything, anything!!" held by augustconfession.
The selfless acts of one person can make another person's day a whole lot brighter. This poem is a little strange, I suppose, and rough around the edges. Though I do like it's message.
Written April 4th, 2006
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Awesome!!
The meter was awesome! I loved the style, message, and overall writing. I'm gunna make this short so that I can read the rest of your poems. Keep up the awesome work!! Kudos to you! ^.^ -
You are absotively-f*#$ing amazing girl. This is it... This is what I LOVE. This reminds me of the song Aqualung by Jethro-Tull (you might be too youn) But I love it just the same...Totally keep this sh!t up
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Amazing!!!
That was amazing, it has such meaning. Another poem written by the best. Amazing work! -
Wow!.. This is amazing, I really liked this.. It was so powerful and it was just so beautifully written.. Brilliant job with this, keep up the great work!.. I hope to read more from you soon!
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excellent
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This is a beautiful piece!! I love the whole thing, but the last line really moved me. I feel you spent the whole poem building up to it and it was really great. Its such a powerful message and you wrote this beautifully.
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The use of alliteration, ryhming and concrete words creates a vivid picutre
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i love it. the ending pushes this piece from good to wonderful.
i love the rhyme scheme, and i hardly ever do.
your descriptions are so vivid and uncommon. and so fitting for the life of a homeless man. you never have to say in this piece: 'the homeless man'... you just know.
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This is a really beautiful poem. It flows very well and the rhyme works great. I love the content of it too, about someone's selfless acts.
"Beneath his concrete armour lies a soul once thought to live,
A piece of copper heartbreak and a golden love to give,"
That's probably my favorite part.
I really like it, great job! Keep writing!! -
this is so sad .. creative words with good flow .. powerful imagery
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WOW!! I don't think mere words could come even close to complimenting this poem enough. The places pple fail to look and you depicted it perfectly. I love this poem, and I am deffinatly going to be reading more of your works.
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Very Cool!
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WOW this is excellent the message in this is strong and meaningful brilliant you have done wonders with this fantastic Much love B xxx
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The message in this poem is brilliant...You've written it really well... I love the way you write... Great rhyme and imagery... You really have a lot of talent... Keep up the good work
Take care...
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You amazed me with the way you conveyed this message with such powerful emotion and imagery. I am anxiously awaiting to read more of your work. -
i am going to cry as this reminds me so much of someone i know. you wrote this very well. thank you for sharing this wonderfully written and sad story with me. sad but also not at the same time. if you can understand that. viyanna r langager
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I hope you feel better in the future. It makes me happy to know I "kind of" made you smile...hehe Thanks for your lovely comment.
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this is sad but cute at the same time. i feel lonely and sad right now but you kind of made me smile. this is very heartfelt and warming. I love the rhyme sceme and the flow was very smooth. i commend you on a great poem. keep up the good work
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beautiful
Lovely and accepting x -
In a way I apologise for making you feel so sad, momuv3. Then again, I'm glad my message came across through this poem. Hehe, thanks for your comment and applause.
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Thankyou so much for your applause and comment, Bronwyn. I'm really happy you liked this poem.
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great
oh God, this is so sad, a great write, so heartfelt, I just loved the rhyme even though it left me feeling sad...I loved it -
*AWSOME* ...
this is really a great write and think that you did a awsome job at writing this..
this flow and words all go together so well..
B
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