I stood there listening to her words,
being pulled in by her vivid eyes.
Further and further I lost touch of reality,
the world around me slipped away.
Falling deeper and deeper,
I fell into the chaos.
Suddenly flames erupted,
except they did not burn, I felt alive.
Grasping onto my own awareness,
I managed to escape.
Then I realized,
how much I miss that fate.
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Written April 3rd, 2006
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awesome
wow, wonderful imagery and emotion in this piece well done!! Ir is also powerful ,and i like that in a poem, it is beautiful (if you know what i mean). Well Done. X -
Wow, this is really good! I really enjoyed reading it, it was really interesting. I really love the way you wrote it. Your descriptive skills and imagery are excellent, and I can really feel the emotion behind the words. I like this stanza:
"Suddenly flames erupted,
except they did not burn, I felt alive."
I also like the way you separated it, it makes it look more interesting and seem longer. Great job, keep it up! -
I am assuming, by your title, that you are comparing this woman to the old drug rush. I like the way you suggest your addiction to her at the end of the poem. Very nice write.
John -
" I stood there listening to her words,
being pulled in by her vivid eyes." what a ver strong opening. i love this. it is just... great. wonderful.
i think this is very well written. very strong imagery, and great word choice.
well done
best wishes,
L4L
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