We perceive enlightenment
from a shadow~strewn path,
pursuing grandeur with passion unmatched
by starlight's echoing dance ~
we stumble in valleys of our own demise,
cursing the mountain
we eagerly seek ~
there is an easier way
to reach the subtle embrace of Truth,
if we'd only open our dreaming eyes
to the glistening horizon ahead...
If we'd only quiet the whispering defeat
that edges its way into consciousness,
perhaps we'd find our journey
to be one of pleasure,
not pain...
We ponder our existence
with ingratitude on our lips,
instead of allowing Life
to filter through our aching Souls...
~ April 3, 2006
8:30 p.m.
Author notes
Picture credit: 'Grace of Alpha' by Rassouli
www.rassouli.com/
Written April 3rd, 2006
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Emotionally Expressive
An aspiring poem and profound in its simplicity. You have taught me so much about thinking positively and to meet any challenge. That we are capable of accomplishing anything we truly desire, if we put the effort and work into obtaining it.
"we stumble in valleys of our own demise,
cursing the mountain
we eagerly seek ~"
So True!
Awe-inspiring write, Scribe.
~ Nicholas ~
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Yeahhh, like we'd have known what to do with that bit of information, ehhh??? 
Thank you, Frogsters40...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... 
Wanda
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Perhaps you are correct and we can simply choose the journey to be filled with pleasure and not pain! If only we'd known that long ago... Thanks for sharing this beautiful peice and the pic is great as well! My best to you in the contest!
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Thanks for volunteerin', Click Here... Some of us ain't got gumption 'nough to climb anymore...
Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Silly Scribe...I know why...fishies gots no fingers, Ian...How would you write your magnificent verse with fins???
Wanda
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We ponder our existence
with ingratitude on our lips
that about me sums me up really i love to sit here cussing and moaning thinking why me, why couldn't i have been a fish like i asked for initially
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Inspiring.
Yep, that just about says it. We are guilty. Some of us valley livers need to belly up to the mountain and give it a climb. We should stand defeat on its head. And be inspired to meet any challenge. Who wants to go first...I will follow. -
Thank you, Viyanna...I'm pleased you think so, Lady...thanks for your always kind words...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you very much for your kind words...I'm pleased you enjoyed it so much & think so highly of my lil' scribblings... Thanks for the psychic boost...hugs back atcha, Babe... Wanda
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oh my gosh!!! that is about it. this is the most beautiful write i have seen of yours to date. wow!!! viyanna r langager
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Ah, valleys of our own making....you, my friend, are an exquisite poet. You only get better with time. I am proud to call you friend. Now, I best twist outta here. *grins and quick hugs*
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Thank you for your kind words, jbfisthebest...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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very nice
an amazing write. what a outstanding job. this is just so beautiful. and the background goes well with this write. i enjoyed this write so much. -
Thank you for your gracious words, Rory...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Very beautifully penned. I particularly liked this line..."If we'd only quiet the whispering defeat
that edges its way into consciousness"
It speaks to me of the subtle difference between a good choice and a not so good decision. A very strong message, written with eloquence. I thoroughly enjoyed this.
Rory -
Thank you for your kind words, MyBeautifulDemonBoy...
Geez...words I never thought I'd utter... I'm glad ya liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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It do??? Hmmm...interestin' revelation, Scribe...Thanks for leavin' me a smile, my Friend... Wanda
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Thank you for hosting such a grand contest, Frozentearz...Also, I wanted you to know, this one was directly inspired by reading the two entries by johnh94...I'm pleased you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you for sharing such beautiful words with us,
The cross road for me within this write would be
"allowing Life
to filter through our aching Souls..."
Thanks for sharing.
Love and Light
FrozentEars
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Geez, Poet...careful where ya aim that thing, willya??? Ya made me stammer & blush for a minute... I'm glad you liked it, considering your two entries inspired it...I appreciate ya, Poet... Wanda
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Thank you kindly, Moon Girl...you're pretty sparkly yourself, Helen... Love ya, my Friend... Wanda
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This is divine Miss Wanda as are you. Your words flow like a summer breeze and capture all that is good and reflect how we are blind to the good sometimes. .
love ya
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This is wonderful! Nice language, and a great description of how we all get so superficial and crazy. I really liked this; especially the line "whispering defeat"... very nice! Keep up the good work!!!
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Beauteous!
Amazing! Your phrasing on this is wonderful and so true! It seems at times that we get so caught up in the superficial, fleeting joys that we do "curse the mountain we so eagerly seek!" This really touched me, and I love the picture and the background as well! Also, happy early birthday! Good luck in the judging, as for me, I kneel humbled by your grace!
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