remember; a little girl’s joy.
Remember the time?
the little girl said
we went to the circus
and we saw all the clowns?
remember the clowns
and their jump up and downs
when candy was cotton and
balloons were for free?
remember the ice-cream
it dribbled all down?
and I was so happy
remember? remember?
Oh, I remember, little one,
for ever and a day
I will remember;
how you smiled
at the circus when
you saw all the clowns
And my heart soared when
you jumped up and down
with sugar pink cheeks
and a red balloon
tied to your arm
along with my wishes
mingled with tears
dribbling all down,
that your joy would not end;
little girl, I remember.
~r.
All rights reserved,
© April, 2006 R. Braley
(astralshepherd)
Author notes
Written April 3rd, 2006
What do YOU think?
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Simply adorable!!
I love the excitement in your words here! You get a clear vision of this lil girl when you read this! What a neat thing to write about bty!
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Loved it!
Ahhh..I felt reminiscent and teary!!! Beautifully written. First section, last few lines...completely dug it. I lean toward more sing-songy poetry and I felt this one was!! If I could give it a 5, I would-lol. Take care of you!
Tara
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ah, this poem is so true. isn't it amazing how little children get fascinated with the most simple of things. its very cute to see them play together without fighting, and doesn't there world seem so inocent. but i think we grow up very quickly, and forget about how we were like that or laugh at it, when we shouldn't, because there little world seems so sweet and perfect.
i really liked this poem, it flowed well and i think the language used fitted well.
keep writing,
holly x
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it is so often the simple things that bring us to tears about children.. I had 3 five year olds doing crafts yesterday, and just watching them; how they spoke with one another there was no anger, no ugliness came from their lips. I could live in their world forever.
Thank you for reminding me how the world from a childs view is better.
Take care,
Catressa
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i really like how you remember this wonderful exspirance and how you decribe it so well taking each fun part of the circus and telling about it, i love the picture you have added to this wonderfuly flowing poem, keep up the great writing, -Amy
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omg great write i love how happy children are and you just reminded of me of the many joys that beign a mother brings!! great write i love it!!
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precious.
after spending the day outside with my 3 year old nephew and 2 year old neice, watching them laugh and frolic through tall grass and dandelions, this poem was a fantastic read.
i especially like the tears 'dribbling all down' just like the ice cream.
fantastic.
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so sweet!
I love this poem. It puts me into her eyes and I see what she sees. My favorite line is "sugar pink cheeks" I wish I could summons a line like that.
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looking back into your childhood are you. yup it is a wonderful land where nothing can hurt you.
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very cute, very basic, simple yet suggestive, Sweet.
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What a lovely poem, such a sweet picture too.hildhood is such a carefree time - we wish we could go back, but can't. Memories are nice though.
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Very cute. Simple, mainstream, worthy of Shell Silverstein. Nice way to reminesce.
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I very much liked this
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Adorable! Sensational poem, bittersweet and nostalgic. I like how you compared the ice cream and your tears when you said they were "dribbling down". Truly brings out how kids enjoy simple things.
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Wow!
This is such a great poem! The first part of it is written just like a little girl would have said it, all bubbly with the wonder of such simple things as clowns and free baloons.
What a beautiful piece. You really do have a gift of using your words to paint a picture for all of us to enjoy, and I am delighted to find your poems.
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wow once again, i have been too long from your work, this is a beautiful poem Richrd, i felt like I was there on that day, it came alive with your words xxx
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Ahhh, the joy of simpler times. The picture you paired with this is adorable! I especially love the bit
"remember the clowns
and their jump up and downs
when candy was cotton and
balloons were for free?"
It just sounds so carefree and happy
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cuite
it takes you back to a simpler time when everything was beautiful and happyness back when you didnt have to worry about all of the problembs of everyday life its very relaxing
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this is so, so sweet. I like
'a red balloon
tied to your arm
along with my wishes
mingled with tears
dribbling all down,'.
'Forever and a day' and 'my heart soared' are a little cliche, but it's ok. Good job.
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This is a beautiful poem... and I really like the picture that went with it... the whole thing seems wistful and makes for brilliant poetry... I really enjoyed finding this piece
Keep writing
Polly -
I remember days like those.
I miss those days,
but then again I don't want to turn back,
anyway,
Good poem,
I liked how you started
and ended with the same idea,
and never wen astray from your point.
Well done poet.
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thank you so much for stopping by and commenting on "remember; a little girl’s joy" i appreciate it very much. blessings and best wishes, astralshepherd
~r.
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I love this poem!!!!!!!
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love it
wow...wonderfully crafted, beautifully expressed.
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this brings the sweet childhood and innocence to my mind that i have so missed.... thanks
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awwwe this is so sweet! i remember days like those
GBY
Silverbutterfly
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This is touching, a child's joy and how we recognize how fleeting yet eternal these kinds of moments can be.
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ea, i just now am getting around to comments, the contests eat up so much time. Your comment here on "remember; a little girl’s joy" is greatly apprecaited. I wish i had the sense to realize just how important that memory was when it happened, so i could have paid even more attention to it - it went by all to quickly.
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Remembering our children's childhoods are bittersweet indeed. We treasure them and yearn for them while not wishing to change a thing.
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This is still one of my favorite poems of all times. Maybe because it is so personal. I just love it.
Cheryl
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This is so sweet.I remember when my mom to me took me to the circus it was amazing.Thank you for sharing this piece with me.Best Wishes
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How this brings back some wonderfully endearing memories. I often long for days of innocence and laughter, but have accepted aging gracefully.
A precious write!
Sam
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This is very sweet, however I wouldn't consider it a poem full of talent... The i9magery is beautiful here though.
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aww!
This is soo cute! It reminds me of when i was a little girl! -
There's no helping the sadness at knowing that little girls have to grow up, and simple joys like ice cream and clowns aren't enough to chase away sadness after that. Beautiful memories that invoke a smile and a tear. Wonderful write.
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this is a very nice childrens poem, very light hearted and innocent you really captured the joy of this little girl in the words of this poem
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Beautifully written, a true delight to read, a joy and a gem, nonetheless.
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stunning and heartfelt...
the kind of poems that brings tears of joy to the eyes... but deeper, there seems t be at least a slight tone of sadness underneath the brightly colored exterior...
beautiful... you've written with your soul
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW I love the imagery you give telling this recount of days gone by, what an awesome memory to have of a childhood outing... I hope to oneday give my daughter these same kind of memories ones that last a lifetime, God Bless you my friend. Thanks for sharing this
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I sense a deep sadness hidden between the lines, as if the future was not to hold all the dreams and wishes that were wished for. You have painted a wonderful scenario of a child on her special day. I would like to give you a
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aww this is so sweet,great imagery this gave me goose-bumbs its so beautiful.a lovely way to show the love between parent and child.
all the best
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Such an emotional slice of life, carefree but laden with a parent (or loved one's) emotions and memories. Well done, beautiful descriptions.
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wow this piece is absolutely well said. it really does express a beautiful sense of parental assistence. =)
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Wow! Innocence shines through in this piece.
Aden
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The image you paint with your words is so sweet and nostalgic. I felt as if I WAS the child there for a minute. It's lovely. Well done.
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How Fun
So refreshing and fun! I felt like a little girl for the moment and the visual is perfect! The title and first and last line flow very well. I'm still having so much fun at the circus so thank you so much it was just what I needed!!
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This is so pretty! And full of charm and happy memories. The colors are captivating. A poem full of boundless joy and spirit
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Thanks for the happy memory,
this takes me back.
lovely poem that would make a child smile.
D. x
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Really enchanting, a pure memory here. Full of grace & pure happiness.
Thank you for sharing!
x
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So sweet
I love it. Very well written, i feel alot of love in this poem.
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This is a delightful childrens poem. Made me smile
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That's really good! It made me remember what it was like to go to the circus and when I lost my balloon when it flew out my mom's window of the car. I really liked it! -
Well, I guess you knew this one would strike a chord with me. Beautiful. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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thanks, Steve, i am glad you liked it, but, really now, yours is so much better.
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Beautiful
and a pleasure to read, it is written with such innocent memories, a truth underlying in each sentence which seems so devoted to the child. I particularly loved the part:
"And my heart soared when
you jumped up and down
with sugar pink cheeks
and a red balloon"
Well done, really wonderful poem.
-blackburn
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Such a pleasure to read
Yes the child in us all can come out to play as a child shows such happiness in their own way .
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So sweet. Like a parent looking back on childhood when their child is grown and moving on. Sounds almost like a conversation my mother and I have had when we see my son doing things and we remember when...
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So touching and sweet to read, a really tender poem. this is great.......Oh, I remember, little one,
for ever and a day
I will remember;
how you smiled
at the circus when
you saw all the clowns
what a site to see
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lovely...great imagery filled with joy and passion...so cute and made me remember the important things in life and the blessings of childhood-well done
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So sweet.
This poem made me smiiiilllee!
It reminds me of a parent or granparent talking to thier children.
It's adorable.
Thank you for sharing this piece!
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wow...thats really sweet... true happiness right there
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Beautiful
I loved it! It reminded me of being a child and how that maybe one day I could be that adult.
The first verse would be my favourite because its exactly how I remember being a child. I think it is honestly beautiful. A good write ^^
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Very touching and sweet. The first stanza holds the innocence of a child; the rest of it holds the more complex emotions of an adult. An enjoyable piece! Thanks for the read... keep it up
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Beautiful. I cannot think of anything else to say. For once. Loved it!
Jin
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Gorgeous vibrant write!@ Thoroughly enjoyed. You are a sweet soul.
Blessings and *stomps
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thanks, its nice to see you 'stomping' by once more, you've been missed.
~r.
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Wondrous words of innocence ...
shared in memories and in being. You will always stay the empath and the poet with the gentle touch, turning dust to stars ...
Love you and your work.
Myra
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this so makes me miss being a little girl. good write you nailed the essence of little girls
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Those memories come back now and again and are so sweet to remember our children when they were kids. Those years go by so quickly and we know not how much we miss them till they are gone. Seem to come back when grandkids come to visit though. Liked the flow and the message shared in these lines. Easy to read and understanad these feelings expressed so well here.
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that was very good, i liked it alot.
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Very pretty! I remember those days myself.Time when our innoscence was still there.I miss those days.Thanks for the reminder.Enjoyed.
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EXCELLENT! so simply written and yet so touching.. tis has a very raw and honest emotional feel to it.. very very beautiful.. lots of love and cheers, take care, shuvi
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ohh such a sweet poem children little girl so sweeet im bookmarking this
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Takes me back...
Some great personal memories in there wrapped up by some very strong writing. Great descriptions, made this very visual for me as well. Nicely done!
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Fascinating!
This poem was sheer enchantment. It took me
back to a place in time where everything was
magical. The age of innoncence is the best time
in a person's life. No worry. No cares.
Just fun and adventure. A brilliant reflection
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My first impression was "What a precious poem". The wonder of children as well as the parents' sense of loss as childhood ends are both caprured very nicely. Good work!
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Rereading this poem, brings me so much joy. Thank you for writing this. Your writing is always so enthusiastic and personal.
Cheryl
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Thats a very beautiful poem...I only wish I had a happy childhod and wasnt afraid of clowns lol...Good work keep it up
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this reminds me of my father and me.
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It looks like I got here way too late to be original. So I'll just leave it at this could be in any great book of poetry that one might pick up and read. This piece would not only be a favorite, but a favorite to be read out loud to the little ones and adults. 'nuf said. RC
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amazing
awww how cute thats so sweet. I couldnt tell you about the joy of that since I dont have any kids but I do remember when I went to the circus with my little brother and seeing his smile lit up my heart and my week so much so I know sort of where your coming from great job and great write!
always
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Such a fun poem and beautifully written, it take me back to when my kids were little - well done
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That's soooooooooooooo sweet. Brilliant, well done
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Wow fantastic. It showed a lot of feelings and it was very well put. Good job keep it up.
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This is brilliant, i enjoyed reading it.
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This is a lovely poem. I liked the imagery - the child like questions of 'Remember when....' My daughter and I have conversations like this...'Remember when we.....' Those kinds of memories that they bring up are precious. It is funny sometimes the things they do remember and we don't....and the things they forget that we remember.
Reading this has me thinking of the things I remember from bei
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