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The Summons

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I stumble & crawl
out of deceptive shadows,

seeking brilliant Truth
to guide my hand,
to sway my heart ~

(I will not give up)

I stagger & fall,

trying to hold
against the weight of the currents
that would drag me under
into unfathomable depths
where subtle whispers cannot be heard ~

(I will not surrender)

I rise from the valley,

climbing sacred mountains,
aching for Glory,
fearing for my Soul's redemption
from the pits of despair ~

(I sing for the innocence)

On the edge of the cliff,

I feel the wind in my feathers
& know I must trust
in the yearning
to soar towards Freedom...



       ~ April 3, 2006
            1:10 a.m.








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Picture credit: 'The Summons'  by Rassouli


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Written April 3rd, 2006

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  • Night Hope gold member
    April 4, 2006
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    Thank you, James...I'm glad you liked it, my Friend...a song??? Wowzer... Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Theater Of Dreams
    April 4, 2006
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    I LOVE IT...

    WOW...thanks for the invite to this...it is EXACTLY the kind of stuff perfect for a song. Clever writing...I thoroughly enjoyed it. The pic is MONSTROUS in it's power.

    Smokin'!

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Thank you, Drifting Away...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Drifting Darktree
    April 3, 2006
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    Keep the wind under your wings and hope at your side. Awsome write! I truely can relate to this... Peace to you and all you know!

    ~Drifting~

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    THANK YOU!!!

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Thank you for your kind words, angelsvoice63...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • parenchma
    April 3, 2006
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    STUNNING!

  • angelsvoice63
    April 3, 2006
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    wonderful

    This is an absolutly gorgeous write well deserving of the gold, and wow the picture included is amazing congrats!

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Thank you, loneArt...I'm glad you liked it...Thanks for hosting...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • loneArt
    April 3, 2006
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    ...... Thank you for entering my contest. Beautiful write

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Nahhh, not that kind of Glory, the other kind...the kind we seek in the spiritual sense...I've always said I didn't care to be 'rich & famous', that 'comfortable & anonymous' would suit me just fine... I'm happy it made ya think...& that you enjoyed it...but my recluse status is secure...no worries there... Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Persian Karkadann
    April 3, 2006
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    towards freedom you soar, yet before that you seek glory, what freedom can you have from glory? once you have made the name for yourself you can not escape it, better to be left unheard of and free, then to be captured by those who seek to use your reputation. Fantastic write, and don't mind the rest of the comment, it's more a thought then something against anything you have written, even if it is inspired by what you have... i thank you for making me think about what you have written, the sign of a good writer that is...

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    A 'pig in pumps'??? Ohhhhh, I can hardy wait... This is gonna be gooooooood... Hmmm...'When pigs fly' becomes 'when pigs strut'... Thanks, Scribe...You always, always make me smile, Ian... Wanda (See??? Ya did it again!!!)
  • ian sawicki
    April 3, 2006
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    aye keep soaring, let the wind gather you under those feathers and shoot you across the breadth of freedom. i have a mad poem to post soon, one about a pig in pumps i did last night lol i saw that poem the other day i did for you in my files i will have to dig it out, something about goal and shoot

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Thank you, Corvidae...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Thank you, Robin Connon...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    Thank you, superstition...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda

  • Corvidae
    April 3, 2006
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    Excellent!

    VEry good write! Hope is expressed throughout the poem and the theme of not giving up is not missed! Great use of imagery and the poem flows very well!

    Excellent!
  • Robin Connon
    April 3, 2006
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    I really enjoyed your poem I found it interesting as i went on.
    Good job feel free to view any of mine.

  • superstition
    April 3, 2006
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    What a beautiful poem, and you've chosen a beautiful picture to go along with the piece.

    "trying to hold
    against the weight of the currents
    that would drag me under
    into unfathomable depths
    where subtle whispers cannot be heard"

    Those lines spoke to me personally the most. The whole piece flows well though and lacks any clutter, in my opinion. Very nice write.
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