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The Grey Girl (Sonnet #40)

Missing image

 

She peeks out from behind the six-string neck,
An enigmatic look on still young face.
A nose ring there? I think I'll have to check,
I pray she'll sing before I leave this place.

 

A gentle A string pluck from polished nail,
Vibrations tickle nose and still closed lips.
Me thinks that she'll soon sing an Irish tale,
That echos lusty words and Gaelic quips.

 

The capo up two frets, she's set to go,
If only lethargy would set her free.
Impatiently I sit and wait to know
If this young lass will ever sing to me.

 

She ponders on . . . what dreams now fill her head?
I ponder too . . . could that long hair be red.

Author notes

Kinda fun to look at a photo and think, imagine . . . and ponder a little.
Written April 3rd, 2006

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  • B Chandler
    April 4, 2006
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    In a way this makes you think outside the box which even for a sonnet is something none withstanding

    Rae


  • Claireabelle-
    April 3, 2006
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    Good job, Paul. Youre awesomeee1


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    April 3, 2006
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    Ye know, I was so caught up in your words that I forgot that I'd seen this was in your sonnet collection! This made me smile, especially as the girl in the picture is me, and you pointed out the nose ring. You even managed to see that I was hovering over the A string - that takes skill to see! And, my hair used to be red, it's now its natural colour, which includes a ginger streak down one side of my head. Thank you so much for putting a smile on my face with this.


  • d a f f o d i l
    April 3, 2006
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    ahhh a gentle subtle write with sincerity that runs throughout...i loved the imagery that ran through this...a beautiful write

    Fern


  • Sharcu silver member
    April 3, 2006
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    You do seem to have a talent to write sonnets, Paul I've never been able to write a "good" one, but that's alright. We each have our style. I'm suprised at how you could come up with a poem like this about just a picture... about someone you don't even know. I don't think I could write anything even close to as good as this is. The last line was pretty funny (not sure if that was intentional) as well... really finished up the poem very nicely. Keep up the great work! Good luck in the contest....
    --Tim


  • Melissa Powell
    April 3, 2006
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    Great write!!


  • SexyAngel0418
    April 3, 2006
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    WOW... This is aweosme Grampa!!! IT is a very good interpretation on this picture... I've only done poems from pictures twice... GOod luck int eh contest!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

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