An eerie feel of drowning I felt
As death seemed to be in very near grasp
And sharp bites like dreaded piranha
Wound me out as if with octopus clasp.
Darkness descended with hissing cool
With fear of unknown engulfing my mind
While brain appeared to be void
As my time was over in this earthly grind.
Eyes were closed and devoid of any thoughts
Amidst sensation of travel against gravity
And even blurred vision seemed out of control
As I breathed my last for journey to eternity.
I was on the lap of angel of ether love
With clean and pure breezy swing
And floating with meditative tranquil
I was then only a celestial being.
Author notes
option 3.... death, in some form. dead or dying. but make it feel real.
Manoj Sanyal
A contest entry
- Write down your most exciting dream, in the form of a poem.POINTS WILL DOUBLE IF I GET ENOUGH ENTRIES, SO GET YOUR FRIENDS TO ENTER.pw pw pw by echo-ink.
1200 points, ended September 1, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Beautiful dream you had.
And I loved the rhyme, straight to the finalists with this one, loved the imagery....was it realy a dream you had?
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Interesting look on what it may be like to die. Nice rhyme and imagery...fits the tone. Well done!
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wow, this is a very cool piece. You are definitly a talented writer. Your imagery and tone just fit so well with the topic. Thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest!
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You write with good command of this subject. You express your perceptions well. You bring your desire for the known unknown out with vivid image.
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