In my yard under a tree I like to be, there is hidden a quaint fairy garden,
A magical land quite close to hand, where the fairies live carefully hidden.
If you are not shy and really try, you can be friends with the Fairy Queen,
She will invite you to her land to view, the best that you have ever seen.
Come with me and very carefully, and we’ll meet my Fairy Queen friend,
And visit as planned to her beautiful land, before today comes to an end.
The way it is done there only one, for we must voyage with only our mind,
To visit them there we must take care, that we are of similar size and kind.
So rest on your bed lay down your head, on your pillow so fluffy and soft ,
Then we will soon begin with a shy grin, into deep slumber we gently waft.
Now take hold my hand until we land, as we will fly in the evening gloom,
During our trip we will leisurely skip, and wave to the old man in the moon
Stars shine bright in soft glowing light, I scoop star dust to put in your hair,
You laugh out aloud while passing a cloud, full of fun without a worldly care.
The stardust twinkles and gaily sparkles, surrounding you in a soft blue light,
I hear you say so contented and gay, as we journey into the awaiting night.
The fairy land is now close at hand, and we see them waving welcome to us,
Then as we arrive and proudly strive, to join in the loud commotion and fuss.
We begin to walk and excitedly talk, as we see a big castle on top of a hill,
The fairies abound and are all around, laughing excited and cheering us still.
In the gloom we see a giant mushroom, as a house with a deep yellow glow,
And all around mushrooms abound, with very pretty colours above and below.
Gardens surround and bright flowers abound and they are smiling happily too,
This happy land is elegant and grand and there are numerous fun things to do.
A slippery slide lets you up and down glide, on a rainbow to the stars overhead.
Our ears start to ring as fairies joyfully sing, while up to the castle we’re lead.
We’re taken inside in corridors wide, to meet the Queen of this brilliant retreat,
Taking hold of your hand in a gesture grand, she invites us to the table to eat.
There are cakes and shakes, lollies and buns, chocolate and drinks everywhere,
I eat a bun grinning and giggling in fun, as we eat laughing aloud without care.
The Queen then slowly arises and is seen, to give you a hug to end this sojourn,
She says out aloud to the watching crowd, that it’s time for our homeward return.
I take your hand while before you I stand, watching the bright smile on your face,
And off we both fly into the twinkling sky, on our way home at a leisurely pace.
Back to your own bed lay down your head, on the pillow of dreams now at home,
Dream on my Sweet until next time we meet, and go up to the heavens to roam.
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Author notes
Written March 31st, 2006
Fantasy
In a list
A contest entry
- Take me to a beautiful place by Yellow-Rose.
600 points, ended May 15, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow!! this is a fantastic well written poem. You have a talent for engaging the reader. Well done and thanks for your entry
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Awww, that was so sweet. Well done!
Thanks for entering and best of luck,
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Very cute write.
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this isn't exactly what i was looking for...
but it's very sweet.
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Fair enough but I suggest you be a little more specific in what you are expecting so we don't waste our (and your) time.
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This is a beautiful piece!!!
Magical, gentle.....wow! I'm left speechless with this one! Thank you so much for sharing such an awesome piece and for being a part of the contest! I loved it! -
I love this poem. The feeling in consistent through out and I enjoyed reading it.
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Glad you liked it and thank you for taking the time to comment
Bazza (Barry)
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"Back to your own bed lay down your head, on the pillow of dreams now at home,
Dream on my Sweet until next time we meet, and go up to the heavens to roam." is my favorite part, even though this is a really good poem im rather disappointed because my contest is about angels and not fairies -
such a pretty poem, just the at with the fairy queen sounds like fun, so well done. thanks for sharing this piece, keep up the awesome poetry, best of luck in my contest.
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This is a very good write that you had penned here good luck in our contest
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drizzlingrain. Thank you for your comments but out of thirty five comments you are the only one to think that some rhyming is forced. Practice has nothing to do with rhyming .. nothing at all, I have been rhyming since before you were born and am yet to think that.The overall rhythm and flow are also important and so a lot depends on how you read it and at what pace. It is not meant to be rushed, but slowly read so that the "pictures have enough time to flow smoothly in the mind". This is a picture poem and thus the above notes are important.
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I like your story it's very cute! I think some of your rhyming is a little bit forced. That comes with practice so don't stress it. Thanks and good luck! ~rain
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wow this is very magival i love it!
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Awwwa. This poem was VERY SWEET AND ROMANTIC. I really enjoyed it. Very fantasy-like and pleasant. Thank you and Good luck.
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very good job i had no problem with the flow maybe becuase i am a child at heart i like it and i will applaud it
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Dear Barry,
OH this is very enchanting my friend, such a delightful story of the fairies, one that young children would delight in reading. I'd love to make one in my backyard, but with three cats, two of them who chase the Elf I have in the house now I'd be afraid they'd catch him.
Hugs Joan
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Fabulous write. Doing me out of a job here lol. Lovely flow again, and easily read. Not a stumble, no problems with 'so called' half-rhymes. I think they worked well enough. Lovely story-line too. Construction works superbly well in couplets, keeping the overall feel light and accesible. Background is just spot on too.
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This has its problems, but they really don't seem to matter much. It's just so cute! You might want to watch your rhythm here and there, maybe using shorter words and/or phrases from time to time. But that being said, this is lovely! - oce
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I am not a great enthusiast for poetry written specifically for children - any more than for separate "children's menus" in restaurants (I was brought up on the idea that children should be reared on smaller portions of "the real thing"). And I am very ambivalent about the concept of fairies as what Kipling's Puck called "little buzz-flies".
However, putting such reservations aside, this piece is certainly good of its kind - and I relish the use of the internal rhymes. I am not sure, however, about the end half-rhyme "garden/hidden" in the first couplet, as small children - in my experience, and at least in the Anglophone world seem to like their rhymes perfect. And the presence of "hidden" in the first line, shortly before "garden" is, perhaps, not entirely felicitous.
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Mystic Moonlite Thanks for the lovely comment but they have not seen it yet and my sons are not interested in my poetry so it will be found one day and then maybe it may mean something to them as my poetry and painting is for them as I want to leave something of me to remember me by.
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now this is precious and each of your 10 grandchildren, I bet adored this..you know how to occupy their time with these precios writes thats for sure, that you for sharing with us big kids too..lol
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Thank you Angel of Wolves, but wiyh 10 grand children it is nice to dream of the things one would like to do for them and also to be part of their own separate world that we have forgotten for they see things we don't, in so many ways, so it is still possible to be taught by them.
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Shaz thank you my sweet daughter for those lovely words. Imagination is the chief tool of the poet for without it we only make statements.
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How very sweetly written! Very much enjoyed reading this!
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wow...you have a great imagination my dear daddy.
It's wonderful to see this beautiful piece here.
Shahrzad
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WONDERFUL COMMENT
It is always a pleasure to read your poems.
They always bring a smile. 
Sandy
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I forgot to mention in my comments that this poem is dedicated to my Grand Children. Thanks Dear sandy for such a lovely comment and applause. It makes it wworthwhile staying on the site . Be in touch later, going shopping now.. Bye.
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AMAZING POEM
Oh my oh my Barry, You have penned a fantastic story here. Any one would be delighted to read this poem. Your rhyme and imagery were amazing. It was a pleasure to read as all your poems are. This would be wonderful in a story book. I love these lines about the stars.
Stars shine bright in soft glowing light, I scoop star dust to put in your hair,
You laugh out aloud while passing a cloud, full of fun without a worldly care.
The stardust twinkles and gaily sparkles, surrounding you in a soft blue light,
I hear you say so contented and gay, as we journey into the awaiting night.
Bravo. Thank you for sharing. Take care and God Bless you, Sandy
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great use of imagery..it was a pleasure to read. It reminded me of my childhood
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Another of my 'picture poems' which I claim are more imaginative picture wise than ordinary free verse, because you are seeing the picture I paint.... not trying to comprehend what I am tryng to say with a few words. I dont know why this rationing of words is regared as good poetry because it conflicts with the true definition of poetry.
Thanks love for your kind comments and I am glad you enjoyed it. I was just going to send you the link as a Cheer upper !! lol/ And thank you for the applause. Hope your project is coming along OK.. I thought I had better practice what I was preaching .... -
I love it!
This is the cutest poem I have ever read. I LOVE faeries and elves and pixies and the like, and your description of faerieland was awesome, very detailed, so that I could see it in my head. I am so glad I clicked on this, it brought a BIG SMILE TO MY FACE. THANK YOU BAZZA!
Sig
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I used to dream of a fairy land when I was younger. This is a really cute poem, I loved it!!! It was kind of long, but I took the time to read the entire thing, and I'm glad I did. Kepp up the wonderful work!
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Rainbow Dreamer Thank you for the comments ... With a name like yours, you would swear I had written it for you !! lol.
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You have quite an imagination. I liked it!!!!!!!!!!!!
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