I wake up crying… tear marks are on my pillow,
I just had a dream,
I about him,
That’s all what I remembered.
I dreamed that it was a sunny day,
Full of birds chirping in the trees.
I looked into his eyes,
Oh how magnificent they looked flashing before me.
His hands were warm,
His chest was soft…
We stood there hugging…
Hours passed, as though it may seem.
I would never let go,
My hands were holding on tight,
I started to cry,
How embarrassing that was.
When he started to let go,
I held on tighter,
When he started to push me away,
I wailed even louder.
I could never let go,
No I can’t.
This was my only chance,
To feel his love and see his face just once more.
He’d been gone…
I don’t want it to happen again,
I don’t want to be tortured like a widow in a den.
I don’t want to remember those images…
The one where he met death.
The dream started fading,
Everything turned to black,
Until I saw my room again,
How cruel was life.
I wanted to dream again,
I had no pictures of him,
I burned them all,
Thought that I could move on that easy.
It was hard to take the memory away,
Especially when years were celebrated with him,
It was hard to accept,
Though I know it was real.
I feel him around me,
His hands stroking my hair,
I feel him whispering,
Oh how ticklish it felt.
It was hard to agree that he is gone,
Oh God, take me with you,
I wish to die,
I can not continue my life with this horrible past of mine.
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Written March 31st, 2006
A contest entry
- Wondering Mind by pimp daddy satin.
300 points, ended April 29, 2006, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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aawesomly done!
very strong poem I loved it though in the fourth line I do not think you neede the word what, just a suggestion. Thankyou for your comments on my poems and wow I cannot believe you liked it that much!!!! -
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Excellent work done here, it has a very sad ending but never the less it was well written. Not many can capture the scenes of love like that so well. Continue to write and more works like this will come forth I'm sure =) -
love it
Wow. Sent chills down my spine. I like how you write, I can almost perfectly see myself there watching. You are very talented. -
well written
wow. a very well written piece coming from a 12 yr old. i agree, u are indeed the most talented 12years old.
and ur a fellow filipina. i like this piece. its tucked with love and yes sadness. im sorry about your loss, everything will be different someday just smile and think that theres always a bright tomorrow for u . take it easy lil one, and hope to read more of your piece.
much love
~tish~
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what an amazing poem
its so sweet and sad
and i just love it!!!
you're the most talented 12 yr old i've ever met (well... uno) -
hey... no worries. you are soooo welcome
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That's really beautiful and original, I really love it. Keep on writing. It's very personal and that's always best and makes the readers feel closer to you. Thanks so much for complementing my poem. Wonderful!!!!! -
this was an amazing poem full of love and grief i am sooo flatterd u enterd it into my contest it is soo amazing i loved every word of it i am sorry for ur loss but i love ur inspiration u have a wonderful talent i really enjoyed this
thanks 4 entering
lil -
really thanks... gosh you make me blush!!! thanks again!!! i really appreciated it.
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woo!
I love it!
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