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Maybe Someday~

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Baby you amaze me,
when I look into your eyes
I dream of being yours,
yet I still won't realize
You close and lock each door,
and my heart begins to cry
You're the one I adore,
please sing our lullaby
 
Darling understand me,
love happens for a reason
Feel the love I do send,
I gave my all this season
Embrace afar my friend,
dream not your own delusion
Pick yourself up and mend,
I'll help be your solution
 
I love you even if,
you can't give to me your all
Baby, I'm needing you,
please catch me before I fall
Don't tell me that we're through,
the next time baby I call
For I'll always be true blue,
because you're my baby doll
 
Darling, my emotions flow,
many left me jaded
And all I can say is my,
love is over rated
So if your dream will not die,
win my heart, though faded
And I'll never say goodbye,
to the years you've waited

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Thanks for reading Tori and Me, Much love, Timothy~
Written March 31st, 2006

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  • siahaan
    March 14
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    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=osbd2_wFFQs&feature=related
    hope you like it
    <3


  • Aurielle
    August 31, 2006
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    I like the poem but I wanted to hear some orginal metahpors and similies just seems cute or sweet but not excellent. Please do comment on my poem called Memories Dress Our Days

  • hislittleannie
    April 12, 2006
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    Beautiful poem. Well done.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 3, 2006
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    this poem is so very beautiful, i just loved the line, " I love you even if, you can't give me your all ". that was just so very touching to the heart. this is an outstanding write. very wonderful job.

  • goldilocks
    April 2, 2006
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    magnificent

    Wow, this is so beautiful. It really captures love. It makes me feel the emotions around the reason for this poem. I felt every word of it. It described what I am going through perfectly. I hope that for you this is not real. Well only the losing love part not the losing. Love is a wonderful thing. This is fantastic, well done!


  • Veronica Leigh
    April 1, 2006
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    Beautiful!!! You are such an amazing writer!!! Your words are filled with such grace and beauty. You are SUCH an inspiration to me!!! Thank you!!!


  • Sandygram silver member
    April 1, 2006
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    WONDERFUL POEM

    You have captured what love is all about. This was so beautiful. A pleasure to read. Awesome write written from your heart. Take care, Sandy.


  • MorningWinds
    April 1, 2006
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    This is beautiful. I enjoyed reading this alot. Wonderful job

  • PrettyTears
    March 31, 2006
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    aww, this was adorable. I love love. Thanks for sharing. =) It was wonderfully writen.


  • irene plunkett
    March 31, 2006
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    hey tim great piece. it tells me u have poured ya heart out in this wonderful piece. everyone knows u have a great personality and alot of love 2 show and give. thanks for sharin love irenexxxx

  • Wordweaver1
    March 31, 2006
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    mooshy gushy greatness

    Dear Tim,
    beautifilly romantic write. I love love and reading your words of heartfelt release are awesome!!!!
    Really enjyed this poem, that is worthy of acknoweldgement.


  • March 31, 2006
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    excellent

    Another nice one. Bravo!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Thanks for reading, and your always so kind words sweet sis!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    March 31, 2006
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    Most beautifully wonderful, you two! Very much enjoyed the reading of this as it's soooo romantic and I'm a HOPELESS romantic! Pen on, poet friends!!!


  • McKenzie
    March 31, 2006
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    Enjoyed it

    Now I think that you deserve someone who will love you with all they are worth and you can return the favor!!! Good write- nice to be able to pop in and read you again. Your poems go back to the good old feelings of romance, calling people darling and baby. i like the images that brings to my mind. Good read. Thanks.


  • DrmGrl
    March 31, 2006
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    The peice has a great flow and rhyme to it. Its very sweet and I realy enjoyed reading it. Although I am possitive that love is not for me...you make it very appealing.
    Darling understand me,
    love happens for a reason
    Feel the love I do send,
    I gave my all this season
    Embrace afar my friend,
    dream not your own delusion
    Pick yourself up and mend,
    I'll help be your solution
    Great write!

  • PalmettoSky
    March 31, 2006
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    great

    great poem. i liked your words. i believe this poem will appeal to many as the lANGUAGE of love is universal and easily understood. thank you for sharing . keep up the great work. best of wishes to you. thanks again. peace always in all ways!


  • Blood Wedding
    March 31, 2006
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    Wow. Amazing. The flow, the rhyme scheme. I can just sing it. Beautiful. I hope to achieve somthing as astounding as this one day. Many thanks for the inspiration, and keep the writing up!


  • Inside and out
    March 31, 2006
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    Tis is beautifully written and an enjoyable read. I would say it is a successful collaberation. Nice flow, rhyme and rhythm in this tender piece.

  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Thanks for your time reading us two, many blessings to you and yours! -Timothy

  • Revwilliamfoos
    March 31, 2006
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    nice love is love if you want it or not keep the pen on the papaer and the fingers to the keypad
    love the papa


  • mzladyt
    March 31, 2006
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    Great job you two. This has a lot of meaning behind it.

  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Thank you for your very kind words, we appreciate them dearly!

  • Grave digger spade
    March 31, 2006
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    just what I needed a smile put on my face
    this is a great write and has captured many feelings and emotions. You did a great job.


  • Celticpoet
    March 31, 2006
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    I like it!

    a very slick, smooth write expressing a lot of sentiment, sweet but not sickly!...has a nice flow to it and would probably sound good if added to music!...well done!


  • Jenn-Swenson
    March 31, 2006
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    wow beautiful and sweet poem i like it i can relate to it in a way great rhyming and flow great job keep it up


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Dear janet mary, yes love is grand, when two can pen together and weave a piece of beauty to withstand the test of times, It is always divine, even in poetic fantasy, we can dare to dream as the rivers still flow down stream. Thanks for sharing, always nice to hear from you. -Timothy


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    I'm so glad you enjoyed penning with me
    As we reach across time eternally
    May our poetic ink flow once again
    And I'm proud to call upon you sweet friend

    -Timothy


  • March 31, 2006
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    this was lovely. Isnt love great.


  • Wandika gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Sometimes love can not be denied and other times it just runs away with your heart, leaving you lost and alone.

  • stayer
    March 31, 2006
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    good

    well worded lots of meaning


  • Whispering Winds
    March 31, 2006
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    Beautiful, Bravo!!!!

    Oh, the is beautiful you two. I really loved it. The pic and the background works great together.
    The last part of this poem really got me, for its something that comes to my mind often about a really great guy, and my BEST friend . Thanks for sharing this with us, and may your pens flow together again.



    Much love always,
    Tammy
    Edited on Mar 31, 4:12 because 'I cant spell..lol'.


  • Lionslove silver member
    March 31, 2006
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    awesome line!!

    many left me jaded
    And all I can say is my,
    love is over rated
    So if your dream will not die,
    win my heart, though faded
    And I'll never say goodbye,

    my favorite part...

    wow. embrace afar my friend...

    beautiful tori. beautiful... Lionslove,

  • unbroken5
    March 31, 2006
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    excellent

    Sorry i wanted to add the applause.

  • unbroken5
    March 31, 2006
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    Such a beautiful poem. I love the vivid expressions of care for the other person. The flow is almost perfect. This is a great love story wrapped up tightly in a poem. ... Thanks for sharing
    Loventutu/love inspires me


  • victoria Secret
    March 31, 2006
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    woohoo Looking good darling, looking sharp. lol. Fun writing with you once again. Sorry I had to bail for a bit, but glad it's up and going. Looking mighty fine cup cake Thanks for the penning. You're simply the best. And I'd do it all over again. Just pass me the pen, and I'll jot down my ideas, I'll toss the pen back to you, you'll jot down your ideas, and like a blank canvas and our minds like painted ideas, will create a master piece once again. Take care. Much luv of course.

    Only one of my kind:
    victoria


  • Manoj Sanyal
    March 31, 2006
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    very sweet poem and straight from heart.
    Liked the rhyming and flowery language.
    Best wishes and good luck,
    manoj

  • Aries27414
    March 31, 2006
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    Two of yours read in a row and both good writes. Good emotion, honest with being over the top in its expression. Looks like I am well on my way to finding another favorite writer.

  • Harry2cool
    March 31, 2006
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    Great job done on this piece......keep up the good work


  • sanmdr
    March 31, 2006
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    good write ... again good flow of emotons ... with a matured feel


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Really two hearts not feeling the same way at the same time, kinda a struggle of sorts. We appreciate you reading, thanks, glad you liked the flow.

  • AnEskimoMarine
    March 31, 2006
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    's good

    I like the piece, but I did find it a bit confusing. I interpret it as two loving each other but not being able to express it?
    It does flow well though

  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Thanks alot Nicole, much love to you and yours!


  • Angel Goddess
    March 31, 2006
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    Aww...this was so sweet and beautiful...You two write well together, you compliment eachother. Keep up the great work, you two....Much love to you and yours,
    Nicole

  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Thanks my sweet poetic sis, I love you too!


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 31, 2006
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    WOW!!!! now that was enough to make my heart skip a beat. i do not know what to say other than that was terriffic. you two did this one very well. love you timothy viyanna r langager

  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 31, 2006
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    Thanks alot, glad you enjoyed us, much love, peace~


  • Jacinta Lee
    March 31, 2006
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    wow that was an amazingly sweet poem and such a joy to read. great collaborative work!

    -Jacinta

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