Take a look at my words,
See the pages of my life
As I create this image for you to be explained,
While I hide these symbols and thoughts of love in between each word.
This is the truth of the matter
I'm scared of the words
Scared of the truth that seems to slip out endlessly
Scared of the love that seems impossible
Maybe laced with these words is my future
If only I could predict such thoughts.
So here it is folks
My life on a sheet of paper
The pencil in my mouth
And my hands on the keys.
Author notes
havn't wrote in awhile, not my usual style, kinda anywho. hope it's good
Written March 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- inspire me by no more forever.
450 points, ended April 17, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Poetry is but thoughts and feelings of a subject lightly touched. To be graceful and modest is to know you are a writer... Lovely write!
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I like this. Simple but it got the point across. You paint a picture with your last few lines that most users on AP can look back and see themselves in.
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Very nice
I know the feeling
"Maybe laced with these words is my future
If only I could predict such thoughts."
Those were my favorite lines
Hope to see more from you soon!
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Very good! I liked this piece! Please comment back!
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I told you I'd applaude!!! great job once again!! i absolutely loved it!! i look forward to reading more of your work!! great job!!!!!
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hmmmm yes i liked this specially:
I'm scared of the words
Scared of the truth that seems to slip out endlessly
Scared of the love that seems impossible
probably becoz i get scared alot lol n e ways i liked this
keep up the good work hun
Luv Chris -
we are not caught in a rehearsal and the words spoken can never be taken back. The magic is in speaking well and letting dreams awaken. Suffering is a choice when bad things happen, so is letting go and moving on. I think the third line is a little awkward and needs little work. Otherwise your poetic conceit works rather well and you have a delicious way of carrying us through the images.
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SUPER!
Great job! i really loved this one! Great comparision!!! i love the way you've described your life as a book...or maybe evn a diary from my viewpoint...you seem to have a secret thats yet to be explained! very good write i really enjoyed it! i would applaude it but i have no more left! alas i shall have to wait until to tomoro! great job!
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