Promiscuous antics and meaningless lies,
Make heartfelt apologies and endless goodbyes.
My dearest possessions all gone in one blow,
My heart made of ice in this murderous snow.
Self obsessed thoughts are an addiction to me,
Drowning alone is this treacherous sea;
Of deception and bitterness that my head only knows,
Alone in my bed my depression just grows.
Intoxicating my body to forget all the pain,
I wake in the morning and the thoughts still remain,
Of wanting to change, yet wanting to die,
And once again I hide away, alone and I cry.
So I think to myself, that this is my life,
Good times and bad times at a roll of a dice,
But I still want to die, but I don¡¯t let it show,
As for as hard as I try, the pain will not go¡
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Written March 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- On The Brink by cookie crumbs.
300 points, ended April 29, 2006, 10 entries
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i really love this. i know so many people feel like this. i use to. but but the pain will eventually leave you and be just another memory. i really like how much emotion you have put in this. my favorite part inthe poem was
Promiscuous antics and meaningless lies,
Make heartfelt apologies and endless goodbyes.
My dearest possessions all gone in one blow,
My heart made of ice in this murderous snow.
Self obsessed thoughts are an addiction to me,
Drowning alone is this treacherous sea;
Of deception and bitterness that my head only knows,
Alone in my bed my depression just grows.
but thats just me. i like them both i also like the line
heartfelt apologies and endless goodbyes
it is os true with so many people. i think you really hit home with your poem for me. i use to feel like this forever. one of my close froends committed suicide. it happened about 3 years ago now. but after that i got really depressed. and what i learned through that is if your not going ot think of yourself. think of all the many people your leaving behind and how they will deal with your loss. when people are so depressed they reach a point where they think know one cares. but when they leave , they leave behind countless friends, family, motherws , fathers, daughters, and sons. and they are left to pick up the pieces. so try to deal with the pain. it will eventually go away. again great poem
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Awesome poem. The rhyme and flow is so steady all the way through - I can tell a lot of time and effort must have gone into this piece.
"Intoxicating my body to forget all the pain,
I wake in the morning and the thoughts still remain,
Of wanting to change, yet wanting to die,
And once again I hide away, alone and I cry." - I liked this third stanza the best. Great work.
You mustn't forget that what doesn't kill will only make you stronger. Keep writing fellow poet!
DancingRed.
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I really liked this poem so much.And yes the hurt does eventually go.And we become better people for it.Lovely poem.Thankyou
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Heartfelt goodbyes and endless apologies. that was an awesome line. the poem was very deep and meaniful and it reminds me of my own past. good shit man, keep it up.
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Great
Very deep and dark thoughts I have fought for years. Great writing. Terrific use of words to express the sadness and pain.
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