Life: it is not permanent
You knew that from the start
And so you took each breath, each sigh
That captured your own heart
Then penned it here for us to read
Long after you were gone
Your very own remembrance left
So you might carry on
Life: it is not permanent
Though you will always live
For in this greedy world of ours
You took the time to give
A fragment of your very life
A glimpse into your soul
Composed in words of poetry
Your loving hands inscrolled
Life: it is not permanent
Though not for death I yearn
I still can’t help but smile to think
That when it is my turn
You’ll welcome me in open arms
With Shelly, Byron, Yeats
And all those poets gone before
Inside of heaven’s gates
Author notes
"I send out a prayer for those left behind"
This is for all those poets gone before, but never really gone.
Written March 28th, 2006
A contest entry
- For Those Left Behind by Ink4Blood.
600 points, ended June 18, 2007, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This hits close to home for me. WOW!!! What a great entry for this contest! Best of luck in this contest that we are entered in.
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Very interesting. I really like this. I like the style you wrote it in and how in each stanza you put life: I really enjoyed the second stanza. Bravo!
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Beautiful
I saw it written before, but this poem is beautiful. It hits the core of our existence-- the way life is, and will be. Life is too short, time, fate, and chance can cut even the most promising life short of its full beauty.
"Life: It is not permanent" The repetition here reinforces the message of the piece, and the reader never loses that overall impression.
The rhyme scheme keeps the poem flowing, and the word choice keeps it interesting and adds a lot to the image.
"A fragment of your very life-- A glimpse into your soul" beautiful words, suggesting love... Loyalty...
"You knew that from the start
And so you took each breath, each sigh
That captured your own heart
Then penned it here for us to read"
Once again, beautiful imagery... Touching, and passionate. It suggests love and compassion for their writings.
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Hey, this is great! A really original piece. There is something funky going on in this one line though, "Then penned it for here for us to read"
I think that first "for" was an accident? Check up on that.
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I don't know about the others Ruth but I will be there to greet you. I am older than you.
A wonderful poem and another excellent entry into this contest.
Jim -
A very lovely and thoughtful poem, Ruth. Your words seemd to flow from the thoughts and hearts of those long gone but not forgotten poets.
I enjoyed this wonderful piece very much
Thank you for entering
Dee
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thats a great write, i liked how you kept up the repitition, and foud a way to fit it in, not just put it there, good job
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Awesome
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And what would we do if no one left behind a record of what they've done? Can you imagine a society without writing? Without reading? Without stories? Bleak. But some writers truly give a LOT. I watched a documentary type thing about Eugene O'Neil, a writer who truly suffered for his art. He had a disease like Parkinsens, and for a time his hand was so tremored that he fit a thousand words to a page. And this is written, no computers yet, apparently. And tragically, for the last ten years of his life, he couldn't write any longer, and lived only for the hope that he might do so again.
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This is beautifully written and a true poets poem. I love the rhyme scheme, and i think it flows soaringly. great write!
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i tell people i can't wait to go just for the haunting end of the deal i told my friend that i want to make peoples to over flow loved thi write keep doing well
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What a wonderfully deep poem, that just went through the poets I love. And, if I remember correctly, they died young...well, Shelleyn and Byron did anyway. It's sad, beautiful and just a wonderfully tribute to this Thanks for sharing it with us all.
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It's amazing how these writers can leave this world, but yet still be here at the same time. Their deepest thoughts still linger down here and it's great to be able to read them still. Nice poem.
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