Small moments pass as heavens change their hue,
Detectible by keen observer's eye;
The shadows come, and darkness fills the sky
As looming thunderclouds sail into view.
A mistral wind soon greets this firmament
And trees squall for the rain with louder plea;
The clouds move briskly as they cross the sea
Of waving foliage with branches bent.
Deep thunder sounds his entrance in advance,
So ominous beneath the welkin dark,
And beckoned by illuminating spark,
He joins her in the vault's aquatic dance.
A dazzling drama found in every blast,
Magnificent until the very last.
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Author notes
I am so looking forward to more signs of spring, thunderstorms being one of them. There is just something about their wildness that entrances me. When I was growing up, we had a small front porch on our house. I loved to do out there during a rain storm- you could feel the misty rain spray coming up from the ground, and watch the little rivulets travel down the edge of the street.
I can't wait until we get more of these!
Written March 28th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Write me a good Sonnet! by Cwm.
400 points, ended April 6, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thunerous Applause!!!
I like particularly the form. It seems as if you written 1 1/2 octaves and concluded with a couplet. Perhaps a hybrid of the Perararchan and English sonnet? I also like how this this line, "The clouds move briskly as they cross the sea," means one thing when read by itself and another meaning when you add the next line: "Of waving foliage with branches." I am in the process of having a book of sonnets published, called "Sonnets for Messiah." I love how can be said in 14 lines.
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heismysong, I think you are wonderful at writing sonnets. They are not something I have had much practice with, but I can appreciate a good sonnet when I read one, and this one is very good.
Keep up the good works!
david -
I have studied sonnets and there are quite a few rhyme variations that are perfectly acceptable. This was a beauty, though!
-Belle P.S. I have made friends with your sister. She is a beautiful person and pointed me in your direction; I'm thrilled I visited.
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Thank you very much for the comment. I enjoyed writing this, too. I was a little disappointed for not getting a trophy at first, but I can see why I didn't get one. The rhyme scheme in this sonnet doesn't EXACTLY fit Shakespearean or Italian forms of sonnetry... so, I'm okay with that.
But thank you for the honor of a comment! -
Applause
This sonnet is magnificent and should have received some recognition in my opinion (like a trophy, hint, hint). Your iambic pentameter perfect, rhyming excellent, metaphors rolled with such dramatic force. Excellent! I enjoyed this very much. So many sonnets are not written in proper meter but yours is fabulous--of one you should be most proud. Bravo! -
Lightening!!!!
Looks good to me. I must know... Do you sit with a thesaurus in you lap LOL? Love ya much! -
On a day like today when we are due to get a thunderstorm, how timely that I would come across your poem! I too love thunderstorms and marvel at the electricity in the air as the first sheets of rain fall marvelously free from the sky. Wonderfully written! Loved it! God bless!
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Gratzi! :-D
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Very well written sonnet I have written a few sonnets over the years but nothing near as good as this well done my friend
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