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Seems So

when cupid shot off his arrow
everyone of them hit everything but my heart
the love boiling inside isn't returned
and i feel that it gets worse as we're apart

my temper boils and I've said some stupid things
but i know its the truth and i have not one regret
remember the way my heart beat skipped when i saw you
and you smiled up and looked at me with your hand on my chest

sometimes i feel more of an accessory to you then anything
something for you to share and talk about to all your friends
ask me again if i really love you, because you know its true
why do you have to go on and hurt me like this is only pretend

i just want you love me
its really simple
don't you think so
i thought you did
but i was wrong

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Written March 28th, 2006

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  • zillion
    June 1, 2006
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    sad? nah not sad, emotional yes but I think something more than sad would work better to describe this poem. umm.......devastaion more so I think. I don't know though, it's not like I can read your thoughts and feelings. lol anyway, how have you been? thanks for talking to me and answering my comments. lol Peace out. Love always and forever,

    -Faithful Dreamer

  • WingsOf A Angel
    May 8, 2006
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    awww this is sad... and a great poem you are a awesome writer


    ash

  • Alissa Ann
    April 12, 2006
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    Awww. This is pretty sad, but heartfelt. There isn't much as far as rythm, but the strong emotion is most definitely present. My only suggestion is to change "boiling" or "boils" considering you used them within three lines of eachother. I'm a nazi for that kinda thing though. And in the end, this is your personal expression and anything anyone else says is only an opinion. Take care and keep writing. i hope everything works out for you.

    --Alissa


  • Tragiklylostpunk
    March 28, 2006
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    wow...this is so sad so good though!
    keep up the great writes

  • SimplySakina
    March 28, 2006
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    Brilliant

    "my temper boils and I've said some stupid things
    but i know its the truth and i have not one regret"

    you may be young but i beleive you have an old soul, your poetry is real and magnificent,it is actually more real to me because i am trying to do something that might or not benefit me,i am dead scared of the consequences but if i do eventually do it i want to have no regrets, then i will know that cupid's arrow did not just hit me but it hit the person i am longing for...
    sigh

    love Sweetful

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